oooh I'm bummed I didn't get a chance to vote on this when it first came up. Very intriguing B.B showcasing your fighter. Leaves me with questions that makes me want to read more rather than feel lost on the story. I would like to see your ink work tightened up as it comes off a bit mussy and scratchy.

Short, sweet, and gave an interesting look into the characters' personalities. That's what I like to see outta what I read! It did seem cluttered, and it was hard to really get a lock on depth. Like Kuro said, space out your panels over more pages. It's supposed to be a quick, simple thing, I'd imagine, so I'm not gonna call you on it being quick and simple. Quick and simple is tricky, but great if done well. Just keep experimenting with it.

There were a lot of tight shots at roughly the same panel size & angle. It got a little monotonous. Move your camera around more. Give us fewer panels per page & go with a higher page count, so we can get bigger views of things, or more varied angles. Or utilize more space on your pages, as the gutters between panels were unruly in spots.

WHOA AN ELI COMIC. It'll be interesting to see how you draw this guy now!