Nice beginning here, can't wait to see your first fight. My only crit might be to be careful how close your words or punctuation come to the sides of your bubbles there. On the last page in the second to last bubble it seems like a run on sentence that needs a comma or something. I think it's actually two sentences if I squint to see a period there, but it kind of got eaten by the side. Good stuff, let's see some moar!

Nice grasp on the greytones and a hefty narrative. I dig your fragmented 'Void' style three piece panels and dialogue boxes. Really solid environments for you, maybe the best. I would have liked to have seen more of Hungry in action but I suppose that's what the BATTLES are for. Make it happen.

Haha! grats on getting in DX! Now GET TO COMICING! Challenge someone!