(I thought it'd be appropriate to at reply to everyone.) I am glad to have had both sides of the stick despite my past history, not that I can say I find myself being overly deserving for the current state of the comic. Still I thank you for the encouragement as much as the chastisements. They both do well to keep me in mind my next attempt. As I said before I am going to continue to work on this comic until fruition because there are still a few things that could be learned from finishing it on my part and I feel like, while a not an overly serious comic, I want the story to be seen in entirety. I guess to clear one of two things up the text was not meant to be legible as it was more just place holders until I got did the text digitally. Also, I have no idea what happened to Sofa King on this one. I am a tad disappointed but really I have a comic that is less then a quarter finished and only half legible so I don't I'll be throwing anything in my glasshouse anytime soon. Again, thank you for your time and consideration.

Orion: I think aside from some completion issues you've got some nice layouts going and I dig the angular environs you've set up. You have a good basis of design and good enough writing to justify putting some inks down on those pencils and you'll have a rather nice comic. You have the skills to be great, they just deserve more of your time and effort to shine. Inks will add line weight to your already cool style and its simply the next step in your progression. Keep up the solid work man.

Orion, I won't say what has already been said, but I WILL say I liked the layout of that first page quite a bit. Next time, Orion. Next time.

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Orion, believe it or not, I'm gonna be a little lighthearted than before and say even if it was a messy sketch of a comic, there is some potential shining through it. Your anatomy and expressions have actually improved from what I can tell. But I'll agree with the others, you just gotta keep your schedule organized and see how you can balance it between battles to show a complete comic. if there was a bold/underline/italic option for battle comments, I would have used all three in that schedule advice. Don't make this a regular with you anymore, man. Change that, show us a completed battle soon. Sofa: :'c

I could say something but it probably won't help. I ran out of time and I didn't even get the chance to put in speak bubbles of all things so this might be a wash but given the this comic has gone better for me then any past I am going to stick with it and resubmit when I have something worth showing. And with summer classes starting next week I'm going to need something to tie me to drawing for that time. So onwards. This went badly but it will not end that way.

Orion: Scetchy, unfinished, unreadable.. but the potential is there.. I agree with Hats, you should be able to produce something more polished than this Sofa: You know the drill.. Both of you: Shape up - if this is what to be expected (and with a 2 week deadline no less!) you might aswell not bother.

Orion: man, if you focused yourself I know you would be able to produce something more polished then this - I know life can get in the way of things, hell it has done for my battle, but this is becoming to regular for you. Ive honestly lost faith in you. Up your game. sofa: UGH.

No thumbnails as I'm on my way to eat breakfast with some friends, figured you guys would rather have the comics now than wait for me to get home.

Yes yes! Good luck all!

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Hey now. Good luck you two!