Kura X:
This was quite a treat to read, and your line quality is pretty awesome but I have a few things I think you could have done better.
Your backgrounds were very flat, and seemed to really lack any depth so I'd keep an eye on it next time.
You also tend to use some very standard layouts, lots of 3/4 views and above waist shots. This could have been put to particular use in your seven trials.
I think your latter cameo's would have been better if there was some consistency, you show us four and then 2 new ones beat on MoeElle, it'd have had a bit more impact if you'd had those original four beat on Moe!Elle.
Looking forward to your next fights!
TDK:
I wasn't really sure what was going on in this. Did you change ideas halfway through? It starts off with this massive mech battle and then bam, we;re no the ground with no prior explanation. We don't know what's going on and then the story takes a twist to finding out Cue's mum filming a porno? It's quite eclectic.
You do have some funny lines ("I love the smell of apathy in the morning"), and your body armour is solid, you really need some tones or some more solid blacks to give the pages depth. The lines alone feel quite sparse.
Good round for a 1 weeker!
kura, that was actually pretty funny, kudos. My crit would be pretty much the paneling, I'm not sure why it has to be really thick tho I must ask, do you draw the panels separately? Also more varying angles would work in your favor immensely.
tdk I have to say last time i saw your battle was last year and this was heaps better than I remembered, so that's awesome. My crit would be... lineweights and take more care of your anatomy, some parts looks pretty flat. Other than that, story wise it gave me a chuckle in the end.
Kura: HA! This lil delight of a comic is topical, educational and all kinds of meta! Smashing good work, let the reign of M. SLAW commence with all Hell's chariots. Preachy and egotistical Cue rawks what she's got here, and trounces her ponce of a foe in good form. The setting's a bit lacking but perfectly suited to your cutesy and colorful style.
TDK: I dig your heavy well spotted blacks and sharp angles- probably because it's quite a similar style to mine. Your story is all over the place but its just the right amount of madcap and ends in sexy places which I've no complaint about. I think if anything changing up your line weights some to separate the backgrounds and characters would help.
Kura, I lol'd too hard perhaps here. Easy to follow up and good artwork throughout.
TDK, I had a harder time following your work with all the heavy black parts leaning into the BG a bit but I think with a bit of grey to differentiate foreground, background and/or characters that would clear it right up.
Kura: Whoaaa, heavy on the Murphy Slaw refs... which is fine, because it's still pretty funny without that context, too.
I'm glad both of these went for humour... and I'd say they both succeeded at that, too. Nice work, guys!
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