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Intro Story
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Uploaded October 18, 2011
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Rtv!
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13 years ago
The quality is very nice. I''m fond of the paintery-ish colour style, though id personally use a more boring red on the bartender. I like what i see her. Don't know much about the character, but judging from the epic cameo on page one i can guess! I'm curious about your future battles and how you'll come up with stories for them. Definitely an interesting character to me.
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Minteh
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13 years ago
For the colours, I'd intended on a more muted scheme, since the bar itself is supposed to be representative of a 1930's speakeasy with the dim lights, but I get if that backfired. I don't have any trouble distinguishing the colours, but I could also need to change some settings on my laptop to get the full effect of that sameness. The linework is pencil, as well, so I'm not surprised if it doesn't stand out against the colour, although that was intentionally done, so I'll gladly take the hit for that. I'm very much not used to dialogue boxes. In fact this is the first time I've ever even attempted them on anything, so I know I need to work on that - the font as well. I'd gone through a few websites searching for free fonts and wound up using something that was already on my computer, as I couldn't find something that I felt represented his inner speech well enough. I'm going to continue looking for that right font. Thank you so much for your insight Will, I'll be happy to work on all of those things :]
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William_Duel
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13 years ago
Well there's not a great deal to comment on as far as the character because we don't get a real sense of the character. I think there will be more to say after your first battle. If we think of this as a pilot episode, the gimmick is still unclear. I am fond of painterly styles such as these and you do it well but your color choices are not so great. Because it's all rather dull even colors, it's hard to make some things out on my computer screen. It's all got a sense of sameness. The problem is your lineart contributes to this because it's so faint as to be barely nonexistent at times. There's no real place to focus. Your James vs. Agent Black panel is the best in the whole comic because frankly that cloud with the lighter colors does wonders for the composition. Frankly you need some more warm colors here and there. The second page has issues with perspective but I will commend you for the panel layout, it's definitely visually more interesting. But I do have issue with your dialogue boxes. I think the color is fine, it matches the rest of the work but the digital effects you added detracts from the art as a whole. They're not consistent with your art. That blur and shadow drop that surrounds the panel is honestly rather distracting. And the font you use for your comic is not very good. I recommend you play around with different thoughts and seek one that might better fit with your comics.
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Minteh
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13 years ago
I'd appreciate any sort of feedback, if possible :] as this is my first character here on Void, I'm kind of curious to know the thoughts behind how well/badly he's received! Nowhere to go but up, I hope.
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Minteh
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13 years ago
words cannot express my happiness right now. New year's resolution: complete!
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Funfetus
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13 years ago
Quality work, but not much of a narrative. Looking forward to seeing him in action!
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