Valid points, because I literally did the story in like 5 hours then went all "fuck this."
The car was actually thrown through the window into the room and did a backflip onto the table, throwing
the Munkei outside.
So yeah.
TDK-This was a step back for you I think, I imagine time had something to do with it and in the future definitely cut down your page count if you think it's going to be cutting it close. Quality > quantity afterall. While most things were clear, I got a bit confused on the whole getting hit by a car sequence. So he's inside and then a car somehow hits him while he's inside without the car actually entering the building and then the car disappears. It would have been better to just have the car fly through the wall instead of using magic to toss him from outside a doorway. Your lineart was looking stronger on the first few pages, but the quality definitely tapered off at the end, and I think this would have benefited greatly from some dialogue.
AchYaBam-you have a nice style and I sure wish I could see it instead of this string of defaults and incomplete entries. If you continue doing this, people aren't going to want to battle you, which is never fun. I understand that life happens but it seems like shit is always happening and you can only make excuses so many times before they lose their impact. If you are having issues with time management or establishing a work schedule, I have the bootcamp at http://entervoid.com/board/index.php?topic=11708.0 and can potentially help you. But if this is a case of waiting until the last minute, you know better than this by now.
Man I hate to be a dick but here we go.
TDK - cool experiment with there being no dialogue if that was your intention. Unfortunately the panel flow and the art wasn't really detailed enough/clear enough to really tell what was going on most of the time. Pretty average but eh, whatever haha, we all have those comics :P. Looking forward to the continuation!
Ged - Really? C'mon man. This is just as bad as a default. I mean yeah we've all turned in incomplete stuff here and there but what you have here is pretty nonexistent. You have nothing really to show, which is too bad because if you'd only finish something I'm sure it'd look pretty decent since your style does shine through here and there through these. If I were you I'd probably not battle at all until you're at a point where you can actually deliver bro because doing this all the time just isn't fair to your opponents.
tdkgunghoul: Good panelling and great action and poses, I don't know if it was supposed to be silent or perhaps you didn't have enough time to letter your pages, which is a shame because I didn't have much idea what was happening, however the expressions and actions did give some indication. Personally I would have liked a bit of dialogue at least.
GedTheBedHead: Shame you didn't get this finished but I like your sketches anyway! very dynamic and fun looking, didn't have much indication what was going on due to it's incompletion, but I'm sure it would have looked ace if it was.
Can't wait to see how you guys take it. Especially you AchYaBam.
Though question: Is Munkei in Doodle Dan's Gang as he has been portraying in his more recent comics?
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