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The Blood Beast
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Uploaded January 15, 2010
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PyrasTerran's avatar
PyrasTerran
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15 years ago
Vandermeer: I'm glad you appreciate my improvement? XD Actually for the last comic I was trying to go for sunrise/sunset, because I didn't know which time of day P2's was gonna end up being.
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J.Vandermeer
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15 years ago
Ok, so-- let's air this one out: we've been seeing a lot of Arena, lately. That's awesome. Way to contribute, get involved, and put'cher stuff out there. I'm a fan. The lighting effects on page four? Simple, but really, really atmospheric. I think it's my favorite of the bunch. Again, I like the limited color palette, but you've given this submission a lot more thought, I think. Unlike your last fight against P2, it doesn't just kind of look like nighttime, it FEELS like nighttime, here. I notice the buildings have been given more attention this time around. Good, strait lines-- it all looks intentional, and I really appreciate the difference it's making in your work. I SEE IMPROVEMENT, and that's always a breath of fresh air. That. Being. Said. I'm not fond of whatever font(s?) you're using. It's too chunky to suit your art style. Page four is probably the most jarring example: it looks like there's some awkward sizing issues going on, with some dialogue getting stretched and squished and it interrupts the flow of the comic. Anything else I could say has been said already.
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PyrasTerran
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15 years ago
Finally, some crits :D thank you. For those of you who don't like the narrator, he's going to be absent from Arena's stories for quite a while. Now that she's "woken up"(more explanation on what I mean by that in future comics), she'll be able to get human language down, and she'll be able to interact with people in ways outside of trying to beat them to a pulp. Now that a range of her abilities has been established, I'm going to start bringing her personality out to explore. On Chiroptos: This won't be the last you'll see of him :) In the future, his mission and motives will be clarified. Yes, I paid more attention to buildings this time ^^' But this was more of an afterthought amidst previous crits.. in my next comics I will try to improve more on them. I always use the same stroke-size when I make these comics (9 at 200 dpi), primarily for ease of drawing since I unfortunately don't have as much time as I would want to fully invest in these comics. I'm experimenting with transparencies and smaller strokes to see if I can add better depth. Well.. depending on what I'm feeling/who I choose to battle next there might be ONE last rumble before we get to the nitty gritty of her persona ^^; but it'll be a relevant rumble, not a random one.
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William_Duel
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15 years ago
Lots of effects. And it's nice, you know how to use them well I think, but I feel like your art isn't getting as much adoration as it should. Your lines are all kinda stale and similar. The only thing really 'drawn' are your figures (and those need some help here and there). That reporter on page 3, he's looking kinda floppy. Those darker and deeper lines here and there would be nice to see. Line width variation and all that jazz. Do you do everything on a tablet? And that Giganticon thing, is that a reference to something? Or just another body to pummel? Cool beans.
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michaelharris
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15 years ago
I enjoyed the narration in the beginning, but it did seem a bit unneccessary and a little cliche towards the end. It was necessary at the part where she got hurt, that was very relevant. Backgrounds! They look like buildings! I can tell you looked at some buildings(or I assume you did) when you drew this. I think it still needs a little tweaking to merge the computer backgrounds and the hand drawings. I want to push you further to vary up your buildings as well. The action was sweet, though and this was a very easy read.
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aribooboo
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15 years ago
Nice, I like your narroration. Though, at times I thought some parts weren't neccessary, like saying what was happening. We can pretty much tell what's going on and having it written out just seem a little odd. I liked how you worded them but they just don't seem to fit with me. Your art for the most part was clean and I could read your action real easily and I'm so happy to see that. There were a few panels where you "colored" out of the lines, like Arena on the first panel of page 4. Although it's only slight, it makes it look rushed and messy. Just be careful with that next time and everything should be looking nice and crisp C: I hope you explain a little more about Chiroptos in your future comics because I didn't quite understand where he came from or what he wanted. It caught my attention and now I wanna know more so enlighten us :D Overall this was decent and I'd like to see how you play out her story. Go go goooo
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PyrasTerran
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15 years ago
All submitted :) I hope it's enjoyable.
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DrasticFantastic
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15 years ago
Lookin' forward to this. Hope we can do a battle in the future! (Once I think of a damn idea)
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PyrasTerran
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15 years ago
thanks ^^
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Angie
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15 years ago
good luck on this!
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