Thanks everyone for your comments. I am working on achieving a balance between concept and finish,
I always plan too much for my slow ass to draw. I'll also work on lettering, maybe go back to digi-letters.
Willy D, yeah I have like a whole graphic novel's worth of ideas for this storyline, maybe take it onward next M.O.T.D.
Dure, your inks looked so nice and crisp! I wonder are they digital or trad? Your use of spot blacks was very well done.
Anyway, quite enjoyed your side, I loved it when Headhunter ripped them out of the robot!
Joshua: I wish you had finished, I do see some great potential in what you had. Your action sequences are nice, they were easy to follow for me and I love how you handle scenary. You've got a great way of showing space and depth, like on page 5 ( of the city ). It was kind of hard to read this though, the speech bubbles weren't very clean so I sort of struggled. The story was clever and I liked how you incorporated so many other characters in there. Not much to say, but let's get a finished product from you next time, yeah? C; Look forward to it!
Dure: I have to agree with the others with this being white, it would have helped a lot. Regardless, I like how your drawings can stand on their own. I loved that over-head shot on page 2. Though sometimes your action panels looked a bit off or strange, like on page 4. Is Anya on the floor when she got hit? It kind of looks like she's floating, or even like she floated TOWARDS the punch. And on page 5, first panel, Headhunter's leg looks like it's going AWAY from Anya instead of kicking her. Just think about that next time, act it out in a mirror if you have to, it really helps. Other than that, ace with the hatching, I always adore how you do it. The story was entertaining. There were parts I didn't quite understand though. Like I wasn't exactly sure how Anya and Headhunter were connected ( I know she summond him, but I don't know if how she gives him energy and power was explained... ). I hope we see more of that and I'm still curious to see how things go from here. Keep it up Dure, I love seeing comics from you :3
Pretty good comics here you two.
Josh: Not bad, I do see lots and lots of effort here, it's just very chaotic looking and messy and that really hurts the eyes here. I did love the narration and action you put into this, it goes to show that you know how to make a story exciting and never dull. What I would like to see from you in the future is something just as exciting, but a lot cleaner.
Dure: I do think your backgrounds are showing a bit more strength this time around, but they sorta lost it around the middle. I do wish you'd maybe put in more details that aren't textures. I would like to see you maybe push the inks a bit further next time instead of just putting your pencils (which are nice and clean like what Lysol does) on a pale purple background. I will say however that I have seen better from ya since your porn battle had some lovely art. The story was pretty good, I've got nothing to really say about it.
Overall I really enjoyed both entries, but I'm siding with Dure for a more consistent comic.
hahha ^^ yah I know, the background was a crap call, I was out of time and panicked and decided to just plop a neutral color there to make the pages easier to read, I totally forgot one of the points of doing inks is the high contrast.
Josh, I did want to see this a little cleaner. The panel arrangement and even the text arrangements can get really confusing. On top of that the handwriting was kind of sloppy and seemed like an afterthought so it was even harder to understand. This just seemed really unfinished, I wish you had done half the pages well rather than giving us 16 unfinished ones.
Dure, I think I would have liked this better on a brighter background. The art is great the story is great. I wanted to see a little more personality out of Heaven and Earth though. They need a little something more so they don't end up just as props. Other than that I enjoyed it.
Duredhel: Wow dude, brilliant idea for a story. no complaints here. Clean cool and classic.
JoshuaEliGilley: You have an awesome story here also. But the whole thing was a little to loose for my taste. I loved the idea and the action you have going on. Maybe i was paying to much attention the the pencil smudges through out the battle. The art was great but try to at least adjust the contrast.
Eehh...eehh.....I dunno I don't want to get too much into critiquing this for...vaguely defined reasons I won't go into. Joshua had had a strong first few pages, though Im not a big fan of the 'ruffstyle'. Too rough I say, though your effort is not wasted. Eh, lots of interesting ideas here and there. I wonder if you're actually planning something overall.
Dure, strong art, great details, I would dare to say that this was better than your Anya BB outing. Complaints: Page 4, that punch, was not very dynamic. And is there a reason for the color choice? I guess it's more interesting than white but I dunno if it's really helping you either. But haha, Heaven Earth isn't very heroic. It's good to see Anya change as a character though.
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