Thanks again again ,Cult

Cultmaster: I wish you would have finished this, my only real complaint is that marker lines are kind of distracting. Is there a better way to lay down color without that texture? Oh and the General will have to murder you now... Corry: If you are doing such a light style, you will have to add more details. The anatomy is really getting there but I wasn't a huge fan of the colors. Everything seems to be local color, it might be fun to try a color scheme or two. I hope you can finish next time!

CultMasterFlex - Nice style here. I think if you had carried on with what you were doing, this would have been a nice comic. I agree with baracai on the color scheme - very cold, very cyberpunk. Use more of that in future battles and your style will really come together. MrNoitall - I really enjoyed some of the body language you worked in here. The scenes with Corry in his room - and especially the pose and mirror on the last page - those were really well done and I can tell you've been refining your style. I always dig Corry comics, and this one's no exception

barcai: Yeah I literally lost the last four days because I was going out of town and getting back the night it was due, so I just made sure I got the ending wrapped up for sake of fulfilling the match stipulation (being the least). But that's no excuse for the first panel (building) Architecture seems to be my weakness. ari: Yes, the orange guy was a program he created to roam around wherever without being detected under the (normal) naked eye. I did what I could with the bio cult provided and he gave me the OK with ballparking what I thought he was capable of. To both: Noted on the color usage. Thanks mucho!

Cult: I really can't say much since you didn't really have much...so far your style is looking neat, but I'm holding my judgement until we get to see something complete from you. Hope to see it soon! Mrnoitaull: I liked this! I was kind of confused about who the flame guy was though...I'm guessing I must have missed something that was in your guys' bio. Most people don't read them so, if that guy was part of it, you might want to explain that a bit in your comic. If I understood right, he was a program of some sort? But anyways, I did like the story. That scar was lookin' NICE, that last panel was my favorite and I think it ended great. I like how you handle dialouge too. Though, I'm still not exactly sure what Killer Byte was after...I think your general idea is great but you need to work on making that clear to the audience. I had to read it a few times before I got it. Your people are looking ok, I like that somewhat realistic style you have, but your backgrounds are looking a bit bland in some parts. Using textures is fine but you still need to fill the background up with objects for it to work. Despite that, you are getting better with them and I think color is something you should continue to experiment with. It really does make your style pop a little more. Overall, this was decent C:

Cultmasterflex: I'm sad that your scanner died on you, this looks like it would have been an interesting read. Mrnoitaull: I like the quality work of the stuff that you finished. Also the scar was awesome! Keep up the good work!

(I think I had to have gone through these comics twice to really get a critique going.) Cultmasterflex: I love how you have the colors. The white, blue, and grey really brings the cold feeling I think you wanted. Your people seem a bit stringy and such though, might want to brush up on legs. The guy holding the cigarette in the background's hand in the last panel. It looks like a blob. You might not want to make blob-like hands next time, even if it is just a background character. Also, you need to make those panels POP a bit more. They seemed to blend with the overall background, and that makes it harder to read, since you have a random picture in there with a thin panel border. Otherwise, I can't wait for more! Mr.Noitall: Oh my oh my. You've improved since I last saw. First thing to say, first page...The building doesn't really match any of the other buildings. Its like a piece of paper stacked on a cork board, expecting it to blend in. Textures are a not something that looks good in a comic. We need a bit less of that, and more hand drawn things. Now, for your shading...I see you're using airbrush/soft brush whateveritscalled, and it seems like it doesn't blend that well. Blend it a bit more. (But of course, thats my digital painting instincts kicking in...) Your anatomy though, was really good. The last panel on page four had me confused. Did they say the same thing at the same time, or did they interrupt each other....or...what? Page six..that's when you started getting lazy looking. But when I scrolled down and read you were busy, I understood. What I don't understand is the last few pages were perfectly fine. Did you decide to put more time in those last pages as a good finish? I think it was a good idea to put your last efforts in the ending, because then it kindof gives you a good finale to look at. Of course, I do not encourage this in the future. Good luck and good job, you both!

godd job man im sorry my shit wasnt straight but we will do this again...cool scar lol

Mrnoitaull.. besides the pages that were not completely done.. your story was great. You've gotta a lot better at drawing in the backgrounds making the pages come to life. I really enjoyed the story.. good work.

You have a good thing going here, Mrnotaull. Your colors and textures were well placed. The fact that you didn't finish is about the only thing i'd have to mention. But all you would need yo do is set up a schedule for your battles, so you would have time. I spend at least 3 to 4 hrs a day. But your work is dope, and your story is awesome.

Fox I agree! Switch box Again made me Laugh OUT LOUD! cultmaster so sorry about your scanner troubles. it looked intriguing. Sucks for your first time out of the gate. noitaull you're great. love all the easter eggs and the one-sided conversation. Time management though....get on that. LOL

ummm, so switch box again. thats pretty funny. and that's pretty much all I can really say about this..............

yeah one page is def undone 'cus I miscalculated my deadline soooo my bad in advance.

i suck at life i jus had to bury ANOTHER scanner well heres wat i got BUST!!!!

thats sucks...

Yeeeeah so I definitely do NOT have these next four days to work on my pages. I'll be at the Big Apple Con and I doubt I'll have anywhere to upload them. ::sigh::I'll make the best of tonight.

impressive cajones, kid. good luck to the two of you.

ZigZagZero: Corry the computer genius (among other things) faces off against a computer uhm-ghost dude(?). This will be fun to see! Rip it up yall, good luck! i like that interpretation lol

Scar match straight off the bat? This I gotta see...

Corry the computer genius (among other things) faces off against a computer uhm-ghost dude(?). This will be fun to see! Rip it up yall, good luck!

Looking forward to this one!

AIGHT YALL!!!!! GIVE IT YO BEST

Oh, I see Corry is fighting another new character :) Good luck to both of you XD