I would like it if you took the time to iron down the perspective and actually put down a vanishing point instead of just fudging it, I think it would greatly improve your stuff. I also think you should light the base tone of the paper a bit to get a wider range of grays because there isn't enough range between the lightest and darkest tones for me. I liked the story, it was well done.

I don't have anything productive to add, just wanted to let you know that I enjoyed this. :)

I didn't mind the look at all.

Booby, did you not scan it well? I can't tell if it was intentional or not. The pencils look good, and I have a feeling they look REALLY good in person, but on here there is just so little contrast that it comes out kinda murky. It doesn't need a pure white and pure black necessarily, but it needs replacements for them that are really close at least. Like, there is two major things about it that stand out to me. That characters are all pretty much the same shade as the backgrounds, and then the white speech bubbles look out of place because there is no white any where else. It is otherwise a pretty solid comic, though.

Yeah, I'm moving away from the drug use, it's not going to be very present at all later on. Just, the begginning was the only good thing I could think of for him to steal, so I could get him out of the apartment.

I like that you're trying some new things, I think the pencil shading is looking pretty nice. But there's kind of a lack of contrast, you have all these soft tones all over the place and very little dark tones which makes things look dirty instead of like shading if that makes any sense? I think that you should continue to experiment with this as it looks quite a bit less flat in comparison to your digital coloring, but you just need to work on varying your tones more. I was glad to see you move the camera around some more so this wasn't a talking heads comic. Story wise I was glad to see something a little different, while the story still heavily focused on Duane's drug use, it was good to see a little more happen.

ITS BEEN QUITE A WHILE SINCE I'VE SEEN JONG IN THESE PARTS. i've been wondering when you were gonna finish this comic and now it looks like it happened at last! alright, now you need to work on line width in certain panels where it shows environments going into the distance in perspective. The idea is that the lines closer to you are thicker and darker than the lines goes to the back. The figures seem to vary too much for Page 8 of panels 3 and 4, considering that they are drawn in the same perspective. This is also like your first fight scene, and its pretty well done, though it seems like you abused the action lines a bit. The trick of making a good fight scene is the portrayal of motion, which is primarily done through a combination of varied perspective and wrinkles/folds, which shows the tension of clothing around moving joints. What i was really impressed with this was the environmentals and the tone of the story portrayed through your pencils. The grays and the lack of white or black absolutes really brought this comic out.

Mmmm, my first thought was "Duane vs. Jong". Cuz it works like a battle. Anyways. It's pretty in a lot of places, I like your art and while it seems you tried to do some fun stuff with the backgrounds it didnt always pan out. The perspective is wierd. Not all the time. Sometimes it works and its loose and its funny but other times, like when they're sitting in kitchen. The scenery juts out wierdly. The one where it's zoomed out and has the ceiling and the floor, you could have zoomed in just a smidge and cut out the ceiling, the way it's drawn, that ceiling is rather distracting. So while it works in some places to show us a sort of wonky world view I think it's also distracting in others. But I like, it's awesome.

it didn't upload ari, try again?

I uploaded...but it didn't send me to the conformation page thing...So I dunno if it went through. E-mailed some thumbs to Angie too. Let me know if something didn't go through, please. NNNnnnn, my pacing is HORRIBLE, but um...enjoy?