Arke, where are the backgrounds? Also when you did show a little bit of wall or such, the perspective was waaay off. The story was a little hard to understand and the anatomy was a little wonky. I want to say that this was decent, but the truth was that if was far from decent. You can draw people well enough, but without backgrounds or details the panels look dead.
Molotov, the quality wasn't that great but you know that. Regardless, where is the story? Like you mentioned on the last page, it was pretty random. Arke had no explained reason for being there, no real motivation either. Anyhoo, those sketches were solid! (as in \"awesome\" even though it technically wasn't finished work.
I'm pretty sure both of you could do a lot better : (
Z3RO
Your pages were pretty much on the bald side considering backgrounds and panels.
The dialogue seems to be hovering in the middle, next time you add text try to select the option \"allign centre\". That way you can freely type and edit. i respect the fact you pumped out ten pages, but with a little more time spent you could have done less pages and more detail and still make it rock. Lovely expressions on the face and still a good read.
Molotov
I enjoy this line art style alot better then the sketched type you used to do.
You capture the characters well but the black outline is kinda distracting. Your fight started
of pretty funny, but near the ending it kinda faded into confusion. Couldn't make out who's who.
I like the way your letters look in this one, is that handwritten or a specific font? It really looks cool.
Good luck on your next bout.
I was mildly disapointed. Latem... the work just seemed... not your best. I believe you didnt put the effort into this as everyone thought you would. =,( still i did enjoy the read.
Yup, no excuses I could've done far better than what I put up here. I was so tempted to just default after looking at those terrible pages, but I didnt wanna dis molotov so I paid the price. One big lesson I learnt from this, \"Don't waste your friggin time!\" Hopefully I'll kick laziness ass and USE my time draw up a proper comic next time.
Thanks for the battle Molotov, was cool to draw Latem. Your story was pretty funny, I pretty much liked what you did :). lol Thanks for going easy on me ( I was worried Arke was gonna get cracked by the guitar)
Thanks for the advice guys, it's a good wake up call for me
Zero, congrats on being in yer first VOID battle, I can't imagine it's easy gettin' the swing of things here, but yah... the quality of this wasn't quite up to what you'd done for your intro pages... though I'm guessing that time was a major issue here.
Keep on truckin' man!
Z3RO-duuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuude after seeing your stuff in the incubator and your nicely done intro pages, I was pretty disappointed with this. Those are some insanely empty backgrounds. Your inking was also looking shaky in some areas. The people look nice in the closeup shots but kind of fall apart in the more distant shots. Latem to me also seemed pretty out of character and the deliveries thing seemed kind of convenient. The panels with the dark shadow dude also looked pretty rough, those were some jagged lines. I really didn't have much of an idea of what was going on. On your next battle put a lot more time into it, I know you can do better after seeing those intro pages
Molotov-it really sucks that this wasn't properly finished but I enjoyed what you had. You have such a lively style, just wish you could have inked it and gotten more done. Aside from it being unfinished, there was a bit too many closeups.
Wow, Z3ro, your pages were really boring to look at. :| There wasn't anything in the background, no breaks from the stark white paper, and nothing in the foreground! You barely had anything in it besides characters, just a few lines to establish vague settings. Fill out your backgrounds and foregrounds, otherwise your pages are just boring, and that makes me want to stop reading. You should try experimenting with tones or shades to get rid of that awful white.
Also, work on you anatomy and proportions. Besides that, your pages were okay, but I couldn't get into it.
Molotov! I dig your style [first time reading one of your battles] and your story was cool. But it looks unfinished [lack of backgrounds in places, still all in pencils with very little ink] and that makes me sad, because I would have loved to have seen it at it's full splendor.
Oooh, nice to see Latem back up and battling again.
Popping a virgin battle, are we? Nice nice.
I'm looking forward to some very good stuff out of Arke. *thumbs up*
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