Thanks for all da crits yall. Im listenin, and taking this all in, infact im workin on a BB for da outcome of this battle. lol as its goin now I already know so lets get it! Imma give yall somethin to actually read. thanks again

Orenkie, Great effort ( i know it sound condesendent... but it's not ment to be ;D) love the way your style is going, but you need to go there. your art is inconcistent and at first your aproche wasn't very original. still I liked quite a bit the way you brouth that witness character in. but i belive it would have been better if you had started that way. Overall, it seemed like you started on the art before finishing up your scenario, i'm not even sure where Radio Barron is in all this. I know all of this sounded arch. but I do belive that you got a lot of talent, the angles you used are very interesting and your art remind me of Peter Chung a bit. the basics are there. you just need to refine it. you'll be kicking serious butt in no time and i'll still be there watching you ;D RTV: dude, Impressive first page (page 2 ). great quality and storywise. the only itch would be consistency but of what I saw you you so far, this was your best ever! Bravo to you both peace A

Orenkie-alright since no one has really critiqued I'll bust out with a long ass one! You did a nice job on the inks and you are improving, but you still have some things to work on. First things first I think it'd help if you did the borders in Photoshop or just made them thicker with your inks, they look so thin and sketchy next to your bold inking. I also think the inside of the car would work a lot better if you didn't have all that empty space, maybe make bring some blacks into the ceiling/wall of the car to fill some of that space and add a little bit of atmosphere. Perhaps look at the Dee vs.Kotori fight where Dee relied heavily on inks to create an atmosphere? I was also confused about what was going on in the second page, while I like that you experimented with the layout, I had a hard time getting what was going on. Be careful with your text placement, compositionally that last panel was pretty weird with that text just there, if you want to do that try and draw the text so it feels like it's actually part of the image and not just stuck there. I think on the third page you could have zoomed out more on the car, I was like wtfmate in those first three panels. Maybe it would have helped if it wasn't an overhead view? While it helps to have different camera angles, sometimes interesting camera angles just aren't necessary at all if they're confusing. Page 4 you could have benefitted a lot from having that middle panel take up like more space and have the camera zoomed further out so we get a better idea about what she's doing. It also would have been helpful if you had included a sound effect of her putting her fist into the car hood On the 6th page I didn't like that you gave those dudes like no face pretty much and there were a few spots that looked like you hadn't inked like the overhead shot with the little stick people. Altogether I think you could benefit from fixing the placement of the text, rethinking your shots/camera angles, and making that inking more dynamic. The battle was a step up from your previous one so keep going at it dude! RTV-was nice to see you fight with Su again dude! I would have liked to have seen some more blacks in your background, you do a lot of cool things with your inking so I'd love to see it incorporated into the backgrounds more. In some areas there were still some pencil lines, work on cleaning your stuff up a little more, I think it'd make your stuff a lot more professional looking. You had some nice poses and panel layout going on as well. But dude RTV that last panel on page 6, don't make me get the squirt bottle for using the blur tool, the blur tool makes me cry. Other than that the battle was good, just work on getting those blacks into the background and you'll make me a happy kitty.

Ooooh shit in a hat! I uploaded the wrong file! That last page was fully inked, had the most details and said \"to be continued\". However, i am getting a step closer at actually submitting. well i'll post it on DA or in the forums. Oren that was some funny shit, i'm gonna have to read it again so i can preach yo black ass a long ass comment.

OHrenkie: Duuude. Your style is so boss. I love the weight you give to things and your story was fresh. Some thing I noticed though was that it seems your style is limited, for example, with faces. Big lips, bulky bodys. Which is not bad. I have those myself mhm BUT I don't see variation in it. Also your panels were a taaad vague. Could have used more backgrounds and what not. But that style is DIFFERENT which I like. Ah like it aaalo <3 AreTeeVee!: Mm. you draw damage good my friend. SO GOOD. Brings a nasty little smile to my face. Your junk is intense AND precise, I can easily read whats going on. I frowned when I saw some penciling going on but I liked it. Could have used more background, more filling. The faint blurs were...eh. EH. But dude, again, style and clarity was a lovely thing.

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oh shiiiiiit SU~! haven't seen a fight from her since 2004. fuckfuckfuckfuckidyfuckshit. i can't wait 8D~

Umm... *wipes bloody frosting off mouth* Hasn't come in yet. ;;>_>

Dont worry about it at all, i ment it like Nike: \"just do it\" :) *Starky and Hutch voice* 'do it, c'mon doo-it doo-it' I myself am pretty curious what i will come up with once i scrape off the rust off of this character. i notice Radios' death was a glitch this afternoon. It be pretty ironic if Radios died on Orenkies birthday. Speaking of wich...happy fukkin' birthday Oren! *starts breakdancing.... kicking random members* So where's the cake with the titty girl in it?

my apologizies

...Cause they don't? Prolly a glitch they just fixed.

Errrhh...why the hell does Radios' stats say he's dead? I don't recall him being killed by Hiemie. Beat up, but not killed. Confusing...

There is no 'try' mah man.

trying to bring Su back? interesting