I love how absolutely brutal the beat down Choko gets is, Koe's power can be really dangerous. also thank you for the Monster Leaper cameo.

Thorn -

The comic, as always, was fire. The song lyrics really sell how harsh Koe feels towards law enforcement. I loved that the means of keeping her apprehended was a seal attached to the wall. Next level attention to detail. The use of color when needed was great, the story progression was great. How fortuitous that the next opponent be a MOTHER and the way she phrased her question to Koe after potentially speaking to her son for the last time was so fucking good. Such a great entry. Also I have cried every single time I get to the scene where her trauma memory is triggered. Thank youuuuuuuuu <3

Also Sojiin cameo was excellent, I LOVE the way you draw her ;w;

Tgood -

Well where do I even begin??? Holy shit this was SUCH A COOL IDEA to have it happen in the past. To see a younger Choko experimenting with her likes and dislikes through becoming "friends" with Koe. Chef's kiss. And truly, even if it was explicitly stated, I liked that Choko acknowledged they BOTH used each other, not just Koe and not just Choko. It makes that last page hurt all the more when Choko decides to do something that she can't take back.

ΒΘΤΗ:

Easily my favorite matchup of this round. The chemistry and dynamic these character’s have are both so prevalent in your comics that I wish there were more to read up on with these two.

This is EASILY the tightest match in my opinion because both of you really gave it your all and it’s so evident with these pages. Just excellent work you two!

𝚃𝙶𝙾𝙾𝙳:

Your comic says it’s open to critiques as well as comments, but any critique that I honestly have are minor nitpicks. Like I’m not sure if missing periods and/or commas on a number of the narration boxes on pages 8, 9, 10, 12, 13, 14, and so forth was intentional or just something that was missed when doing the lettering.

Full disclosure I did check briefly to see if it may be a manga thing? But I’ve no 100% idea and could be wrong on how things are done.

The GL (and overall story) here is well written and paced, and the song you shared fits the vibes so perfectly.

𝕿𝖍𝖔𝖗𝖓:

I’m trying to be so good at critiques because your works deserve it, and there’s mention of wanting in-depth critique.

Page 5 panel 4 (for example) This might be a personal thing, but seeing as there’s a tangent happening because of the docking, I feel it important to mention just being more mindful of where bubbles are going. Here are some examples of what I mean for just that instance.

I also think having music notes, or the singing be represented by putting the lyrics in a wave would really help elevate your comic pages. I really like this SDSU page on showing music in comics. I feel like there is just so much fun that can be done with a character and concept like this!

Page 6 panel 5 is a perfect example of everything I’ve mentioned. The bubble placements and the lyrics. There’s a lot going on that it almost feels cluttered, but there’s so much empty space too.

This is a personal opinion, but I love when lettering in particular suits the style of comic they’re being put on. I think your bubbles in general would look a lot better with thicker lines.

When you’re really at it, I love your line weights and character proportions a ton. Just deliciously curvy. I like how although this is an ACAB comic, there’s some nuance being shown at the end with a really nicely implemented flashback.

Overall this was a nice comic to read– and once again I seriously enjoy the dynamic shown here.

(PS. I tried twice to make formatting work. So that's why comment count looks higher, it's because of my attempts.)

I was afraid of this matchup 🥲 I've got a great idea for a comic, but it's gonna HURT