It's been a while but since you want indepth crit ill do my best to give you some helpful advice.
10 pages in three weeks is a good amount and congrats on doing full colors for it.
one easy thing to fix is all the white empty space around the pages, crop the pages closer the actual panels. it makes everything feel small and it makes it much harder to have dynamic lighting when the white is far brighter than anything in the panels.
At the beginning their is talk of a seraphim crown but we never get a good panel showing off the actual crown, when there is a mcguffin in the story make sure to have a close up panel dedicated to it so we know what the prized possession is.
I like how you characterized sanguine, the interaction on page 6 made me giggle.
for your action you should practice some more dynamic poses. seeing how Augustus uses snaps for magic I thought of Gojo from JJK, I would recommend studying some of the gege akutami's manga art, he's a fantastic mangaka that does a great job making dynamic poses with slinging magic, another idea is looking up meastro conductors doing work, those poses look like they're casting spells.
The final thing I want to touch on is your shading, it's splotchy and the color choice for your shadows makes them look muddy.
For shading you want the shadows to be solid shapes that the light source isn't touching. I would recommend using a brush that can taper and change brush size based on pressure/also use a smaller brush to carve out the shadow shapes, as for the color I personally like a dark purple on a hardlight layer but you can play around with dark saturated colors to see which ones you prefer.
I rarely give in depth critique now a days because i prefer just praising any and all attempts at actual art since we live in an AI hellscape right now, But i do hope this helps your art and good luck.
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Marrion: "Like what you see, old man?" "I'm married." LMAO?? Love the banter and colors here!
Bobert: Good work - page four looked especially cool!
This was a really fun comic to read, the fight was very good too! Layout of the panels/pages were nice
Cool coloring and plot, the action was easy to follow and it never had a dull moment.
It's been a while but since you want indepth crit ill do my best to give you some helpful advice.
10 pages in three weeks is a good amount and congrats on doing full colors for it.
one easy thing to fix is all the white empty space around the pages, crop the pages closer the actual panels. it makes everything feel small and it makes it much harder to have dynamic lighting when the white is far brighter than anything in the panels.
At the beginning their is talk of a seraphim crown but we never get a good panel showing off the actual crown, when there is a mcguffin in the story make sure to have a close up panel dedicated to it so we know what the prized possession is.
I like how you characterized sanguine, the interaction on page 6 made me giggle.
for your action you should practice some more dynamic poses. seeing how Augustus uses snaps for magic I thought of Gojo from JJK, I would recommend studying some of the gege akutami's manga art, he's a fantastic mangaka that does a great job making dynamic poses with slinging magic, another idea is looking up meastro conductors doing work, those poses look like they're casting spells.
The final thing I want to touch on is your shading, it's splotchy and the color choice for your shadows makes them look muddy.
For shading you want the shadows to be solid shapes that the light source isn't touching. I would recommend using a brush that can taper and change brush size based on pressure/also use a smaller brush to carve out the shadow shapes, as for the color I personally like a dark purple on a hardlight layer but you can play around with dark saturated colors to see which ones you prefer.
I rarely give in depth critique now a days because i prefer just praising any and all attempts at actual art since we live in an AI hellscape right now, But i do hope this helps your art and good luck.
Chefs kisses, mwah. You really pushed the envelope on your skill, very commendable.
I'm gonna be splitting my comic up into parts because life again got in the way.