Tgood: Gosh, what a strong opener! I'm downright obessed with your artsyle, especially with the chunkyness of your brush giving it a bit of texture. The way that you played around with the panels on a couple of pages (especially on page 6) was super cool to see!

Passion: Love the built up suspense and clean lines on display here! Blackblood just tanking all of the bullets without a care in the world helped build her up as an intimidating figure.

Man both of these are so good!

Choko is the softest looking badass I've ever seen and Blackblood just doesn't care lol

I'm very interested where these two's stories will go!

Tgood- Gorgeous artwork! The pacing and action panels were incredible. It's was so intriguing to see a hint of Blackblood's backstory in your round. Choko is such a cute, interesting character! I'm excited to see more of her, specially interactions with more characters!

Passion Punkin- Love the clean linework, and I'm specially a fan of the way the flashlight mover around on those panels. As someone who struggles with action scenes, I would give a lil advice of using more speed, blurr and action lines. It can give it more oomph!

Great job overall, fun reads!

I really liked the look and feel of this. Great stuff, keep it up.

You've got a great artstyle and a good knack for dynamic posing. Visually this was a good read! I do have a small gripe, though, which is with the dialogue on page 6. Specifically when it comes to the flashback scene. on page 6 panel 4 we get flashback dialogue but have not yet been given a visual indicator of any kind that this is what's going on, and because the word balloons are the same as everywhere else in the comic, I though that the dialogue on that panel was something being spoken to her by either choko or the cat. I had to reread it a time or two to understand what was happening. And then I had the same issue on the final panel of that page, partially because we are then removed from the flashback panel by Two additional action panels, so my initial reading of that panel assumed, again, that this was dialogue being actively spoken to her in the present. There are lots of ways to make and use dialogue balloons and I definitely think it would be worthwhile for you to experiment a bit with different types of balloons to use to achieve different effects and help with reader clarity. I know this is a pretty long comment for a pretty small issue, but it's a little detail that can go a long way

I really like your style the characters look cool! And I loved that you put some words in japanese.

Tgood: wow, I adore your art! You’re great at action scenes and poses. Everything felt very dynamic. Choko is so precious and I love how you depicted your opponent 💜 I hope to see more from you soon!!

You two knocked it out of the park!!

Tgood: I adore your style and grayscaling! Really dug your story and I think you'd benefit from your text bubble a touch smoother, but that's a small nitpick truly! You did excellent~

Punkin: Really like your character designs! Lil suggestion for the future, I'd love to see some sound effects to sell your action some more, but wonderful job!

Hyped to see this one.

Best of luck to you both!