Dawn of the Hunt

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Dawn of the Hunt

Dekkard returns to what small semblance of a refuge he has in Void City. It's a new day for him to try again in his mission.

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Open to any comments or critiques

This comic has been rated suitable for teens and up by its creator(s)

Uploaded February 20, 2025

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Dekkard

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Dekkard

Comments (6)

You have such a cinematic way of presenting your shots, there's a lot of visual interest that carries the eye through! I remember when you were initially talking about this you were thinking about doing the multi-page route instead of the longform that you ended up using here - I really think it benefitted a lot from that since it is such a continuous physical action that flows from one scene to the next, even within the 'end' and 'beginning' of your pages, in the sense that I can't really tell where one page ends and another begins, which is a great use of this formatting! I'd love to see you experiment more with smaller line weights in some areas, like the firing of the gun effects which could benefit from a thinner line to really separate it from the rest of your lineart. I also think you could benefit from expanding the greyscale to other areas, the contrast scenes are really good, but I think even just a darker grey to act as a barrier in some areas between the black and white could really help elevate that 'sell' of the gunfire flash! Great stuff and looking forward to more!

I like your style of storytelling. It reminds me a lot of old school action movies. And you do seem to have good ideas as far as compositions go. Just keep on putting the work as you're definitely growing already.

You have a lot of interesting shots here! I like how you've paced the comic to show action, while keeping it moving to hold attention. I do think that there could be more work put into the hands (especially when you're using them as the focal point of a panel), but I'm impressed that you're willing to do so many panels with hands being so prominent! I also suggest you use 'center' for your text alignment unless you're using the alignment to also tell the story, but in this case it's distracting since it's created odd spaces between the two characters. Overall, really nice work though, I'm glad you took my suggestion to make it one long comic page!