I loved everyone’s comics. No words. PERFECTION🤩🤩🤩🤩

Thank you cab and jelly for the crits. This comic is meant to be like an intro video bembe is making, for the short and sweet i cut out some opening panels where the yellow square is framed like the start up for a movie and bembe is counting down. Would it be better to have that framing in to help set it up? I also only used 3 pages with 9 panels at most, 9 being the most i would put on a typical comic page.

First I just wanna say it's great to see artwork from you again after such a long time my friend, and I can see you were very passionate about telling this story, I can sense the enthusiasm of sharing this tale with us. My only nitpick is that is was a bit more tell than show at times (and I know, I'm guilty of that sometimes too), so its not a total bad thing cuz we were limited to how many pages we could use here and you squeeze as much as possible here, keep making stories you are excited to make and we'll always read them, comic making is in my opinion always about pleasing the first target (which is always yourself), one should never see comic making as a chore, it's something we love to do and this tale is a shining example of that, stay golden my friend.

So in my first read through, this felt a bit long for a short and sweet comic. I get that with the endless scroll format it can be difficult to tell what should be within bounds vs not. So on my second read through I tried to identify at which point in particular it seemed to cross that line, and my conclusion is that this comic could have ended after "Bembe is officially the 7th member of the sunset squad. As a comic pitch that's a great place to end it. We have the main character, we have the setting, we have an idea of the themes, it's a great hook. Everything after that point is more just a list that we read. A lot of the duties listed are implied with the position of being a lifeguard. And the ones that don't feel like they'd be better served being explored in the full comic than just being stated in a pitch like this. Other than that particular criticism, I think this is highly effective. The character designs are fun and unique and the expressions are amazing.

Bobert. Thanksies for the feedback. There will be episodes in the future with both the ritual combat and dealing with monsters, but not enough space in the intro for them fully.

Very colorful and surreal, speaking only for myself I would have loved to have seen a bit of that ritual combat or a conflict induced by a monster but that's not tonally appropriate for a slice of life lol.