I laughed out loud on both of these, especially page 2 of Bobert’s side. Please make more short and silly comics!

Raltz - This one was more clean (or maybe it's less blurry?) than your usual lines and the jokes made sense to me, having a pretty clear set up and payoff. I like your decision to use screen tones, it's something I wouldn't mind seeing you incorporate in your future comics. It was a little hard telling Sanguine and King apart on my first read through make sure you establish features of the characters clearly to avoid this. Upon another read I noticed that it looks like you did try to incorporate Sanguine's face dots but since the comic isn't in color they come off as eyebrows or regular face lines. In this case I think it would've been fine to use Bobert's method of adding color just for the dots if you don't have time to color the whole comic which in a 24 hour comic, is a safe bet. Bobert - I wrote out a big ol crit but then I noticed the preference tag oops XD I'll always appreciate your dedication to drawing oc's in maid outfits and I liked the ambitious pose on the first page as well.

Your chibis are really cute! However, I feel like sometimes they can look a little same-face-y; there were times I had a hard time telling who was who ^^; that said, this was a cute lil 24 hour comic, and I liked the touch of using the paper texture! Also 'big ol yaoi hands' gave me a laugh XD

Insane that we made the same plot but differently.