I think something that would improve your story is that everything feels a bit like it's "un-earned" for lack of a better word. Like Jessie just invites him out of the blue to cuddle after she was just beating his ass? I don't know, it makes it all feel a bit off.
I wasn't really familiar with Paavo but after reading his bio, I see that you did a very good job of keeping him in character. At first I wasn't much of a fan of him honestly, but now that I know a bit about him, I can see why he's acting the way he's acting in the story. So good on you for really understanding your character!
I did like the little details like how Paavo is wagging his tail like a happy dog would.
Don't really have critiques on the art side as I think it's just a matter of putting the work in to see improvements. Don't be afraid to look at references for poses you're not sure of. It will definitely help you.
It's a bummer you couldn't do the lineless style through the full comic, but your pencils were clean and very readable.
Very expresssive faces. Wasn't sure on the "cuddlyness" part, but thats just me I suppose.
Overall very nice!
I really like the lineless style on the back half of your comic, it looks cute! I think it is a little weird for a furry to have a constant blush, but it works with your style. Nice work!
It's kind of interesting how vastly different your pencilled in art looks in contrast to your colours. I haven't given a big read of your older stuff so I don't know where you could stand to improve, especially in regards to your job throwing a few wrenches in your productivity. I know that in my recent death match I got tennis elbow from my kitchen hand job and then in an unrelated benign layoff it has been impacting my ability to write the current heavy weight comic I'm doing.
I do like that in 3 weeks you did 9 pages. Maybe that could be a soft goal for you if you'd like. Aim for a week to have 3 polished and coloured comics pages? Who knows.
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