Songbird my man you have GOT to get over Swan XDD
I think my favorite part of this comic was just the jump-cut to Songbird being sandwiched between Harrison's massive pecs, though everything else with Harrison is a real close second.
I'll agree with everyone else in that I wish that the heist plotline and the gambling plotline were a bit more interconnected; I really enjoyed both, and they had the vibes of an A-plot/B-plot split that you see in a lot of sitcoms and TV shows in general. Because of that, I don't think you really would have needed to have them be part of the heist storyline, just so long as there was something linking the two plotlines--could have been something as small as Harrison bumping into the cat as he escorted Songbird through the casino!
I really like how Songbird’s powers are portrayed here! It seems to be highly effective to the point where perhaps even Songbird loses track of how powerful he is. The casino/boxing match setup is really cool, though I do feel that some characters feel a bit disconnected from the central plot. I think you should also put a little more attention into your backgrounds, sometimes it can be hard to tell where characters are standing in relation to each other. Always glad to see more Songbird! That morshu reference at the beginning got me lol
I had a lot of fun reading all these comic!
Loved all the portrayals of Songbird. I feel like Pizzaman got him the closest. It had me laughing pretty good.
I loved all these though.
Everyone went very hard on heavy weight!
Snowy - I loved your plot and the art was superb, liked a lot Dairyu here, also thanks for the cameo!
Fluff - I loved your color palette and character expressions, but the thing I most loved are the references to Morshuu HAHAHAH
YOU WANT IT!? IT'S YOURS MY FRIEND
Keito - Really good sketches! Story was nice.
Pizza - I will always love how free your style is.
Selevan - Nice story and monochrome style!
Sorry these aren’t too in depth but here you go;
Pizzaman: Loved the storytime storyline, and good job on the long scroll format! The only thing I wanna recommend is using the ellipse/circle tool for text bubbles, the odd shapes were throwing me off a bit
Selevan: Excellent work on the character depictions and action, good sir! But I agree with Jelly in that there’s things left unanswered but the end of the comic. Maybe that’ll be in another comic you got planned but as a stand alone it can confuse peeps. Keep up the good work tho
Jelly: Despite the fact these are sketches, they work so well as lines I had no trouble following along! Your panel work is stellar and your story amazed me, wonderful job!
Fluff: I was laughing through this entire read, your comedy is always amazing! I loved your portrayal of everyone and your minimal palette~
Snowy: This has gotta be one of your most outstanding comics yet! Everything was so on-point, and I’m happy to see a different side to her than normal! Super excited to see more!
You had some great bits in here. I especially liked how you did the reveal with Harrisson. I could really feel the awkwardness haha! I'd say the interactions with Harrisson were my fav in the comic. The whole tamagochi bit was also very creative though. One thing I think could have been improved is maybe including a page before page 11 that would have included a "trigger" for Dairyu to blow Harrisson through the wall. I love the panel itself, but when I first read it, it just seemed like it came out of nowhere and left me a bit confused as to what was happening. Entertaining work though overall!
Oh God this was hilarious
How Songbirds folk (for the most part) refused to join him, so he had to outsource muscle haha
Harrison being charmed and going on a tangent was funny, also like how Dairyu knew him well enough to know something ain't right, even if it was obvious XD
I wonder what he has in mind for the relic 👀
I absolutely loved this entry! The visuals are great and I really dig the color palette you went with. This comic is just shenanigans all the way down and it's a real joy to read. If I had been asked what my expectations were going into this battle, Keito being turned into a tamagotchi would not hVe been one of them. If I had to put forth a nitpick, tho, it's that half of the cast here is entirely disconnected from the plot. The pages with quicksilver, keito, and 41 could be removed entirely and the overall plot is entirely unaffected. That said, it's still a thoroughly entertaining section and comic overall
I loved the interactions that you had for the characters in this, and the expressions were so fun as always! I loved how overboard Harrison took Songbird's charming words and the silliness that ensued. Nice colors for this as well, I enjoy your limited palettes a lot!
I knew that you were going for a Casino heist scenario due to our back and forths during the death match and I really love what you did, also the green and orange gradients are lovely.
Incredible effort from everyone! I've had little time to indulge in comics and art lately, so I apologize if my comments on each of the entries are brief
PIZZAMAN- The stylization of some characters specifically is very fun and appealing. I liked the whole aspect of everyone telling their own story. The dynamic between characters was hilarious
SELEVAN- The vougue-like cover already had me invested in what was gonna happen with Harrison. I got really excited when Harrison climbed on the train's roof to avoid crossing that door. Such a cool Western Spaghetti easter egg. I always like seeing characters be polite to others, even if they get in the way of their goal
SIRJELLYRAPTOR- I'm a big fan of your art style, and regardless of your entry being considered sketches; the creativity with how you play with the panels and the line weight makes it feel as if it's inks instead. I'm always impressed with your work. Specially it (seemingly) being made with a ballpoint pen. Amazing work at dialogue, too
FLUFFS - Holy shit your entry put a big ol' smile on my face lmao! The Zelda CD-i reference in the begining grabbed my attention right away. And then I read what was going on and got doubly excited! I am incredibly flattered and thankful for the cameo and references to my idiot himbo. Songbird's constant hatred for Swan will never cease to be hilarious and I love him for it. The scene with Songbird and Harrison trying to fool Dairyu was so endearing and funny
SNOWY - The quality on your entry is absolutely stunning. Your inks seem to be getting even better with each comic I see from you. I really digged the expressions and body language in this! And seeing Dairyu starting to get overzealous over her family is both exciting and terrifying. These 'new' sides from her are very intriguing but I also worry about my fave air goddess- the words you ended the comic on would be very wholesome on another context. I really like how foreboding Dairyu's stories have been
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