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Captain Lunch Box, The Cat, Mustard vs Milly O'Nare | Mentor Trainee Roulette Round 1
I'm hoping to make this Milly's proper introduction to Void! Look her up for some wrestling mayhem!
Open to any comments or critiques
This comic has been rated suitable for teens and up by its creator(s)
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Bobert
All-Rounder
10 months ago
TRM: Back before my life spun out of control and I didn't amount to giving in depth comments to everyone on Whacky Races like I originally wanted to, I was gonna say that I saw how your instincts for inking and line weights were beginning to come through and I'm glad that it wasn't just a hunch. This comic has your strongest lineart so far, I'd say. Keep doing more of what was done in the comic and you'll get even stronger. Rikun: I don't recall precisely where you struggled with this comic, I assume it was a cluster of reasons because life is never as simple as we'd love it to be. There's no point focusing on how TRM's characters weren't featured as heavily in your narrative as that observation has already been made and writing struggles can often make it hard to seamlessly weave a story that gives every character their dues. Personally I was wondering if you are finding your drawing process comfortable or not? Cause I'd suggest maybe expanding your horizons to find a few more digital brushes that can spruce up your comfort and drawing instincts. Because I know that for instance in my case a lot of the default brushes in Clip Studio Paint don't do it for me and only recently did I start to enjoy digital art due to forging my own brush. Maybe that can give you some more leverage when drawing comics on figurative rainy days?
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Platinumartist
Inker
11 months ago
These were a fun read to have and I really liked seeing the interaction between the two TRM and Snowy - The Lineart and the Dialogue was also quite fun.The Paneling is pretty solid although I want to point out that in page 4 where the paneling gets quite chaotic and fits the energy that you were going for. This is great and I hope to see more of these characters in the near future. And I hope you learned quite a lot from your mentor. Rikun and Kubo - The comic starts off with a bang with solid lines, great paneling, and good dialogue.I adored the interaction between the character and I can fully understand the difficulty trying to use multiple characters in a single comic but it seem to fit all pretty well. I hope to see more of Milly's adventures in the near future! And I hope you learned quite a lot from your mentor.
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Gregly
All-Rounder
11 months ago
TRM and Snowy- very zany and enjoyable, i like the environments and whimsy! Captain Lunchbox peering over the edge of the panels on page four is great, he's being ignored by the wrasslers and is out of the frame. I enjoyed the action and the disclaimer at the end was funny. Keep going, i love your stuff! Rikun and Kubo- There's some good action, but I think some of the moves could be punctuated more with impact lines and such. I wish there were more backgrounds even if they're really simple-- I hope we get to see more of Milly soon, but I agree TRM's characters didn't have much place in your story this time.
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Snowy
All-Rounder
11 months ago
I was trying to come up with a way to not be harsh about this, but it is bothering me so - Rikun, I'm not sure why you couldn't have utilized TRM's characters more, it feels like you didn't want to use them -at all.- Other than that, I agree with fluff's comment. There are some nice action shots, it would be nice to see you push them some more. TRM, I'm super happy with how your comic came out, especially after you lost pages! I can really see the improvement, and I'm so happy you're so willing to take advice!
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Fluffsamasprime
All-Rounder
11 months ago
TRM- The spot blacks and clean line work really helped with your comics pop. Go hard on those spot blacks! There were a few pages that were a little hard to follow,but over all I think this comic shows some real growth in your skills. Rikun- I think you got pretty ambitious with this one. Most pages of all the entries. You did a lot of action shots and I would have liked to see you push the dynamic view of them to really drill home the power of the wrestling moves.
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