TRM: try not to lose FACE!!! huh? Gregly: Zuze has now stolen our hearts

Trm- I really enjoyed this, there's a good sense of motion in your drawings but the panel order on page two does feel a little confusing. I liked the zoom in with gorgles pupils popping out of his eyes, and I laughed when they all started swearing a bunch at the end!

TRM - Py said it all with the visuals, so I’ll just crit writing. It’s really hard to explain, but I feel like the story here doesn’t flow at all. Events just kind of happen abruptly. Like Gorgle himself asks, who steals a hand? And the switch to violence is really jarring after such a slow buildup. This is still a good effort for three days though, and it feels crisper than your usual stuff. I also liked the slow zoom gag at the end of page 2. Gregly - I love this little shit XD I personally didn’t find the ending abrupt and thought the comic was short and sweet! Would have maybe liked to see cleaner lines, but this is light speed after all!

Gregly: Cool forms in the hands (of both characters). I think it's a really great thing to get such a strong sense of volume from a relatively simple style. What you have going on here us very appealing to me! Good interpretation of your opponent too. TRM: This was really fun. Looks like you just went for it. Would be cool to see some more variety in panel comps- it does give it a very static feel. But you visualised a lot of abstract things here with the fire in the eyes, the wobbly 'yes' and double drawing the sword arm as it was being swung. All of those elements really elevated it and were very cool to see.

TRM: So you've got a ways to go with your anatomy and character design skills but that'll come with time, something you can work on for future comics is your paneling, at points it can be confusing when you intersect panels the wayou do for the 7th panel in page 2, and it can make it hard to determine where the eye should be going. Remember that readers read in a Z pattern from right to left and then to the next row, and be more careful about those inbetween panels Gregly: Your first page got me so pumped, I loved how you interpreted Gorgle. It's a shame that the conclusion was so sudden. Good punchline at the end but I'm sad you didn't get another page of drawing Gorgle in keep it up everyone