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A Lesson in Spirit
Thank you Flytee for the Battle and I'm glad to have been able to tell this story. For everyone else who reads it I really hope you enjoyed what I was able to produce. On a side note, the last few pages were gonna be a BB on its own but it was gonna lead into another BB. So I decided to add it in as an Epilogue instead so its one less BB to do and I don't have to worry about being stuck inbetween two BBs.
Open to any comments or critiques
This comic has been rated suitable for all ages by its creator(s)
Uploaded May 24, 2021
Comments (8)
Platinum
I definitely think this is your best comic so far! I love how you continue to fill out the world of your comics with cameos and background details. I have to say though that this comic kind of felt like you were just trying to hit a specific plot point instead of trying to build up to it with meaningful character motivations. It felt like some of the actions taken by characters were more for plot convenience than because the characters would naturally do that on their own. For example, you wanted Blue to see Darren's inner world so you could reveal more about Darren. You needed her to possess him to make that happen. So you gave her an arbitrary desire to use him to speak to Mr. Rensga, despite the fact that she's communicated with him just fine through other means before. And maybe I've just missed previous story points, but it doesn't seem like he's a super important person in her life, so it just feels really convenient that she would need to randomly speak to someone and decide now was the time to use possession to do it instead of just possessing a radio or something. I hope that makes sense. I got a bit rambly there, sorry! I'm looking forward to learning more about Darren in the future! You've given us some interesting nuggets, and I'm curious about this mysterious epilogue. I'd just like to see you focus a bit more on what each character wants and build a story off of that rather than trying to hit specific plot points!Flytee
Your art is like a warm hug for me. I just can't look at it without feeling happy ;-; I really love that we get to see more of Blue's self-doubt here. The fact that she's never really taken the time to try to figure herself out is a really interesting thing to focus on. It's a nice departure from her usual carefree, live in the now attitude, which I feel like really shows how a lot of people who seem outwardly positive can actually be hiding a lot of their own doubts underneath the surface. I'm intrigued by this ending (I slammed my hand on my desk because I want MORE!) and think you did an amazing job of showing Blue's journey to uncovering her memories. Your use of creative lettering in this comic was so fun; honestly, the whole comic oozed illustrative creativity and comic storytelling. I think my main crit for you would just be to have someone proofread your comics to catch little mistakes and typos, but honestly I think I only saw one or two of those here XD. It's hard to critique, because I just think your style works so well, and your character-based storytelling makes everything feel so grounded and real, even in the face of the insanely supernatural world of Void. Excellent comic, and I look forward to more! <3Spoilers
Kinda sad we won’t see ghost Blue anymore u-u Or at least not as often. She’s looked the best here I’ve ever seen her tbh. Just so cute and squishy. The marshmallow thumb was really apt.