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The Demon
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Uploaded February 15, 2021
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Fluffsamasprime
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4 years ago
Lawson the SPEED DEMON!!
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Mixiemon
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4 years ago
Awesome to see lawson back. The aliens you set up here were really cool. Even though the shading isn't fully complete in some places I do like the places you put the shading as well as the blackspots. However for the shading that isn't blackspots don't use black, using black just flattens it and I noticed that was it throughout the comic. Try using a saturated dark blue or purple and experiment with that to make the shadows feel darker and more interesting. There is also the issue where lawson's head feels flat, in particular the eyes look pasted on and not like eyeballs that rest in sockets. Your main alien guy has better definition on the planes of his face, do some studies of the head and break it down into shapes. But overall it's great to see you rebotting this character and doing a new story with him.
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Footini
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4 years ago
Yo this was a real fun read. I loved the design of the aliens and the action of page 7. and hey, looks like Drake already made *fast* friends with JaJa!
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Spirogs
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4 years ago
Hah, this was a good read. Checked all my boxes for my "keep me reading" metric. Villains are interesting, hero is interesting. The lore behind these space "gods" is pretty neat as well.
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Heathen
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4 years ago
Glad to see more Lawson action on the site!
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TheCydork
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4 years ago
Yo good on you for finishing/redoing this! Your art’s definitely improved. I like the use of heavier spotblacks, especially on the aliens, as it adds depth. Page 7 was super fun, I love all the different poses you included, especially the one where Lawson runs towards the screen. Wasn’t a fan of the speech bubbles on page 12 though. The wobbly edges were easy to ignore when the bubbles were more sparse, but when there’s many together it looks sloppy. There’s also a lot of text, which may make readers switch off, and the reading order is unclear. It would be best to space things out over more than one page, or summarise the exposition. It’s also weird that the Orb explains it’s being used to power the ship, but then the aliens are still powerful enough and, well, living to track Lawson down to Earth within a few years.
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Fluffsamasprime
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4 years ago
Can't wait to read it!!
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OberGoat
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4 years ago
Comic is done! At least as done as I'm going to get it. The story is all there, all the pages are colored, just a few of them aren't completely shaded. The baby prevented me from getting 100% done, but I'm still fairly pleased with the comic overall, I hope you guys enjoy it! The (re)beginning of a new story arc for Lawson!
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OberGoat
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4 years ago
About 3 years ago I made a comic that started a story thread for Lawson that I had every intention of continuing and then just... didn't. I've wanted to go back and revisit the story and remake it, as the original was rushed to meet the deadline I gave myself, so this comic is just that, though I did trim off some parts in the beginning. https://entervoid.com/comic/6294 -the original comic. (please excuse the art, I was really out of practice.)
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