hey, this comic was more of a miss than a hit, that's alright! you gotta take those sometimes. i didn't make it intending to invest as much care in it as i typically do, kinda just wanted to put some jokes down and ship it off for armageddon. HOWEVER, a wise person once said your target audience should be yourself, and i laughed pretty hard while writing this comic, so believe it or not, this was actually one of my most successful!

Ok, I guess I just wasn't in a mood to approach those absurdly big balloons on my first read, but Bobo's comments made me want to try it again. It wasn't quite as bad as it looks. And I do have a constructive criticism in that the back and forth banter in the last panel should have the balloons placed between I&J, so the tails can clearly point left and right. As it is, it looks like the characters are talking to themselves and it threw me off.

I guffawed at the "Read Armageddon 1972" footnote, and had a few other chuckles throughout. The giant walls of text were whatever I guess; not sure how else to get that much exposition out of the way at once, especially if you want to have those wordy jokes in there. The news reporting on memes is such a great detail though. I'm sure the memes will die approximately right before they report on them. I was too slow to vote on this, but know that I appreciated it and am glad to see I+J care about Void just as much as ever <3

This is a funny idea but i feel like you could have either used another page for it or gotten rid of a lot of the dialouge, maybe intentional making the new dialouge something to gloss over by putting it as a background layer without a bubble treating it as just noise happening. I do like the coloring effect you did for the characters in the newsroom. that was cool

glad to know they'd take Mildred with them on vacation~

Page two, panel 3. Wow. They had to build a stadium sized newsroom just to facilitate those word balloons for one panel, and I couldn’t even bring myself to read them.

I don't know what's going on or who these dudes are, but the idea of the demons putting people back because they're too fucked up for hell is A+ Five-star gold. Wish I'd thought of it! BUT we did both think it'd be nice to see the mundane side of Armageddon and put up our characters in a Hotel room so another pat on the back for each of us for being on the same wavelength.

To be honest, I feel the story leaves a bit to be desired. I mean, why is there an unconscious (if not dead) child on Invyn's lap? Did he kill them? Did Jasper kill them? Did they get poisoned or sick or something and ended up passing out on Invyn's lap? Okay, I think I'm digging a little too deep into it. I know I'm probably just repeating what Sean said, but what's the deal with that huge block of text obscuring the 3rd panel of page 2? An extra page might've worked to your advantage.

I'll be honest that wall of text on page two completely derailed my focus on the comic. You easily could have added another two pages to spread that shit out. Plus, what's exactly the premise here? They are on vacation, they see shit hitting the fan in Void, and they are grateful? There's no pay off, though? I will give you kudos for having a dead child on both pages.

This felt.... haphazard. I am used to some rather sharp wits from your comics, but this didn't showcase it. It's essentially just a wall of text with very little in the ways of the comic working to elevate the dialogue and narrative. I am also not sure what is going on with your colors. Even if you wanted to stick with eartlhy, less vibrant tones, even your light sources and dull and muddied. You could do with looking into how to effectively use bright accent colors and rimlight to make sure shapes and light pop more. Also, I know you gone on record that you don't want to look at comics and references for your stuff. But you shapes are very blocky and clothes have next to no folds, so they don't look like they are made out of fabric, but rather out of metal.

French citizens surviving each armaggedon is going to be my new fav running joke.

I don’t quite know what to say about this. The art is decent, the jokes are okay, but overall it just feels kind of pointless? I suppose we’re learning more about Invyn and Jasper’s friend circle? For the most part it’s just telling the reader about Armageddon, which is hardly necessary given the hype it generates. I just didn’t find it engaging, sorry. Also what’s up with the seemingly dead child on Invyn’s lap?

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full title: Invyn & Jasper Have Exemplary Pride in Their City and Would Defend It to Their Deaths in ARMAGEDDON 2020 this was funnier when i wrote it and drew it and colored it and planned to upload it a month ago i hope the mods pick me for arma!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!