What a decisive mood the visuals set from page 0. The cover is already enough to stop and set music to go with this. The colors right off the bat do so much to swallow the reader, and the clothes-changing sequence adds to the voyeurism of the occult. There's something that tethers it thematically to the idea of the page being a slate to project the mind. The inks and figures, need I elaborate on? The inks to have a grit to them that's complimented by the texture in color and... supernatural noir vibe. The use of assets for the background clicks in a way I didn't think I'd see pulled off; again, the colors really tie all the pieces. To that end, I particularly appreciate adding it to the gutters. Using the asterisks as citations was done very prudently also; I knew where to look for more, but it didn't feel like a necessity to understand and enjoy this story on its own merit. Page 10 took a second scan to understand where I was supposed to read next, but I'm conflicted because the composition and paneling is so crisp and balanced. My biggest gripe would be that I wouldn't have guessed who Raven's costar is without reading the title.

I was afraid this work would contain too much unbridled magnetism for me to handle, but then Bruhmah only talks to Raven on the last page. I love and stan both yall. also the line about 'dont you wish you knew what i could do with this mouth' is nice. it makes that dude immediately disarming.

Late but I just want to say thank you for all the comments, praises and critiques. They are all very much appreciated. Camel - Noted. And I think the Bruhma hook fell short because this was initially a Raven BB. I was already more than halfway done with the inking when Don/Astrodile and I decided on a collab. So we didn't have the time to integrate Bruhma in the previous pages without overhauling the entire thing. There's an option to add more but that's what Part 2 is going to be about :). With that said, yes totally agree that Bruhma just being in the last page may not be that impactful as opposed to those readers who knew Bruhma had been missing for more than a year now/familiar with the character. Again thank you everyone for the feedback!

The rendering and colors here are really good. The figures are great as always, Rivana. The colors are quite nice as well Don, the material on Ozias' throne is really visually pleasant, and i really liked the eerie green and grey palette for the night scene, it fits with Raven's vampiric aura . The hard horizon line in the white space does make it feel a bit cramped, I would have erased that and just opted for a gradient. The hook for part 2 is a little weak, i must say, considering the hook is just that Bruhma and Rivana are meeting up in this space; I feel like meta-narratively, a battle between two characters often implies them both meeting up and interacting, so to use that as a hook for a next part makes it feel less like a cliffhanger and more just like an arbitrary end. Despite that, I am definitely intrigued for part 2. Oh and that intro page is absolutely gorgeous, i'd get a poster of that.

Astrodile and Rivana, this was a great team up. Really enjoyed this exploration into the Sandox sub dimension. So many cameos and great visuals all around! Sweet jumping jelly beans I look forward to the following parts. :)

I am feeling chatty today so here's another wall of text Cy lol [spoiler=For Cy!] [quote]You focus on the letter here, for instance giving it a whole page, which gives the feeling it’s supposed to be very important. We can definitely assume they’re friends from the snippet you show, but the letter’s words don’t carry much weight since we haven’t actually seen much of the relationship or Raven’s guilt. Actually the point of this comic too is actually to show Raven's guilt for the first time. So far in her battles I've only illustrated her need to feed on blood. Raven vs Jerin demonstrated that she was hiding behind Rocio's back about this despite Rocio already offering her blood bags. So yes, I did not expect anyone to have an inclination that Raven was feeling guilt until this particular comic. On the next page she did say she needed more blood than she was letting on with Rocio - adding possible conflict between the roommates. I hope that makes sense. [quote] I reread that comic and still couldn’t find any mention of it, though on Py’s side I saw it mentioned once. My point still stands, this was basically a blink and you’ll miss it moment in an opponent’s comic, so it’s odd to treat it as though it’s very important to Raven or was a goal the whole time. Raven also said she intends to stay with Rocio until she finds a way back home or earn her own living quarters (aside from the part with Raven trying to escape via portal and failing at Akira's club) in the last page of that Pyras battle :) [quote]I meant dropped as a plot point in this particular comic, like I said in the quote you replied to. Since Part 2 is set in the Sandbox, I think it’s safe to assume that within this comic, she isn’t going to try and get home another way. In the Sandbox scene page 12 - Raven was still thinking about home in her mind so I wouldn't say it was 'dropped'per se. We'll have to see how things go in Part 2. . So yes, Homeward Bound is still an appropriate theme for this collab I would say. I do know Raven still wants to go home and will still try to find a way even after the events of this collab [quote] what I mean is, you’ve essentially told the reader that nothing that happens next matters. At least, for Raven. Some people won’t pick up Part 2 to find out she actually keeps some of her experiences, because you’ve already told them here that she won’t. The statement "None of it she remembers" is more in the immediate future/present sense which is true. I imagine these latent memories can only come into play via triggers in the real world anyhow. It's a broad term that is open to the interpretation that may change later on but yes indeed Raven doesn't remember anything unless something else triggers it in the outside world. At least that's how I am planning to play this off :) I approach my Void comics as a continuing story so things are open to evolution and development. I don't intend to reveal everything in one go. I like to take the reader for a ride. What may be true now may not be the same later as we find out more about how this Sandbox works is how I envision it. [quote] Bruhma appears on the very last page, his presence is more of a cliffhanger than a hook. Miller as a character (i.e. including Amber) hasn’t been active since 2018, Jason himself disappeared in 2017. To use Miller as a hook, there’s an assumption that the reader has gone through the archives of a character who’s had no prior connection to your own, and who was last seen three years ago. Otherwise, he could just be another background character, or unknown cameo. I only recognise Miller at all because I’ve seen pictures of him in the RP server tbh. The Miller and Bruhma hook was admittedly for the older members of course but it wasn't the main focus of this particular comic. The comic can still stand on its own for the new/unfamiliar readers just based on what was immediately available to them: What is this Sandbox place? Raven trying to get home, her guilt? Who is this strange person who asked Raven if they met before in that last page?, etc. I added some references to older comics on certain parts if they needed a bit of backreading. (ie Raven vs Jerin and Dove vs Raven) but not much. New readers didn't have to know who Miller or Bruhma are. I will leave that to their respective owners to expand on those cameos. (I had Pyras' permission to add Miller so I imagine he's working on a more detailed way of re-introducing him to Void). But yes afaik Miller is just a cameo here and it's perfectly okay if nobody recognizes him lol. It's more of an Easter Egg for the older members but will still bear weight at the same time because this is how he 'officially' came back after years of being thought as deceased. With regards to Bruhma, the next part will focus more on him so his anonymity here is expected/intentional for the new members. Older members - esp Badger - should recognize him since Bruhma disappeared in a Talon vs Dahiris comic. [quote] This bit did confuse me I have to admit. I wasn’t sure what the significance of the recording was, I didn’t know there was a possibility he would carry it over to the outside world. In that case, yeah there’s a lot of possibilities and story that could open up. Yeah! I like dropping hints that are open to interpretation instead of full on infobomb (unless it is necessary. I kinda did that in page 11 but I wanted to be concise and not bore the reader. Also presented in a manner that is not out of place - in this case, I used Ozias' tech to do some narration) Also! I am not saying your confusions aren't valid but I just wanna share what is going on in my head and why the comic is presented as it is. :) [/spoiler] Thanks Flytee for the comments too! I am glad to hear about the improvement on inking as that is still very new to me and yeah I am just as thrilled that Don decided to join in to color. And yeah totally agree with your take on the Sandbox. It is vast and it didn't quite show that in the comic as much aside from the 'empty white space' part. Blank slate is a very fitting term. I like it. I didn't even make that connection until you brought it up. [quote]I also would've loved to have seen some of the background characters actually interacting with this world, I think it could've been a good opportunity to further hammer home how it functions, but also inject some weirdness and atmosphere into the area. Funny you say that! Because I am hoping other Void artists would jump in on this. There are only so much interactions I can put in this comic without working on it forever but yes there is a plan to show what Sandbox can do in the future. I actually thought of this story because I know other artists could use it to advance their characters based from what I've seen about how it was used in the RP server. I did this with that in mind, not necessarily to advance Raven's story. And it was such a good thing that Don asked if they could utilize it for Bruhma's return and that alone made me excited that it was already being used for other people's character arc this early.

This comic was absolutely gorgeous. Your inks are as excellent as ever, they felt a lot more textured in this comic, I loved their scratchy quality and all the cross-hatching you did. The colours also add tons to depth and atmosphere. You two really are an amazing team. The story was interesting as well! You took it in a direction that I didn't expect. The set up was cool, writing-wise page 6 really grabbed my attention. The Omni-void/ sandbox is an intriguing setting. A pocket dimension, where you're basically a god who can conjure up any object or environment just by thinking about it...the storytelling potential is pretty wild. I'm excited to see where you take this! Visually I completely understand the choice to make the sandbox an empty white space, its like a blank slate right? I did, however, have a hard time connecting to the setting. I think an establishing shot giving us a sense of scale might've grounded me a bit more. Despite the empty white backgrounds, a lot of these panels made the environment feel quite small and overpopulated. (I get the vibe its supposed to be more vast?) I also would've loved to have seen some of the background characters actually interacting with this world, I think it could've been a good opportunity to further hammer home how it functions, but also inject some weirdness and atmosphere into the area. Overall fantastic job! I can't wait to see more :)

Thank you for the detailed explanation! I definitely get more of it now. Also, quotes don’t work under spoilers? Wackk, I did the same as you and just bookended the quotes anyway so they’re easy to see haha.

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[quote]I just chose the eye candy route as some comics I read in the past did. Definitely not for everyone but it was a personal choice on my part but I understand the disconnect that may come with it. Ahh, fair enough. [quote]it was shown there that they are friends and Rocio was even giving Raven blood (the blood bag comment)... But yes it is a safe assumption that Rocio and Raven had grown close as friends in the background. Oh god my bad, I forgot that little moment in the Vs Jerin comic! It’s still a pretty small moment in the grand scheme of things though. You focus on the letter here, for instance giving it a whole page, which gives the feeling it’s supposed to be very important. We can definitely assume they’re friends from the snippet you show, but the letter’s words don’t carry much weight since we haven’t actually seen much of the relationship or Raven’s guilt. [quote]Her desire to get home was in Dove vs Raven. I reread that comic and still couldn’t find any mention of it, though on Py’s side I saw it mentioned once. My point still stands, this was basically a blink and you’ll miss it moment in an opponent’s comic, so it’s odd to treat it as though it’s very important to Raven or was a goal the whole time. [quote]Why would it be dropped? She is trying different avenues ways to get home. I meant dropped as a plot point in this particular comic, like I said in the quote you replied to. Since Part 2 is set in the Sandbox, I think it’s safe to assume that within this comic, she isn’t going to try and get home another way. [quote]At the risk of spoiling. Sandbox leaves latent memories/feelings in certain people (I thought you should know this lol). This kinda goes back to what I said earlier about assumptions though? I know that, but people who aren’t in the server don’t. All they will see is what you wrote here: “none of it she remembers”, which comes across as total memory loss. I’m probably not explaining myself too well... what I mean is, you’ve essentially told the reader that nothing that happens next matters. At least, for Raven. Some people won’t pick up Part 2 to find out she actually keeps some of her experiences, because you’ve already told them here that she won’t. [quote]Want another hook? BRUHMA and MILLER have been missing/dead for a long time and were seen in the Sandbox. Bruhma appears on the very last page, his presence is more of a cliffhanger than a hook. Miller as a character (i.e. including Amber) hasn’t been active since 2018, Jason himself disappeared in 2017. To use Miller as a hook, there’s an assumption that the reader has gone through the archives of a character who’s had no prior connection to your own, and who was last seen three years ago. Otherwise, he could just be another background character, or unknown cameo. I only recognise Miller at all because I’ve seen pictures of him in the RP server tbh. [quote]Also Ozias started recording Sandbox events and this will carry over to the outside world - another possible hook. This bit did confuse me I have to admit. I wasn’t sure what the significance of the recording was, I didn’t know there was a possibility he would carry it over to the outside world. In that case, yeah there’s a lot of possibilities and story that could open up.

Thanks for the comments so far! I was saving a post for the end but Cy raised some points that I wanted to clarify :) Note: Blah quote tags don't work inside spoiler tags. I'll just leave them so we know where the quotes are lol

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Oh I like doing pin up style so I just integrated that in page 3 (IE drawing something I normally enjoy and putting in the comic). There are different ways to tell a story, some work for others some don't. I just chose the eye candy route as some comics I read in the past did. Definitely not for everyone but it was a personal choice on my part but I understand the disconnect that may come with it. And she is undressing because she is changing to her normal costume. I dont think anyone would want to step out in the open wearing their night gown. Not with Raven at least lol. [quote]Raven seems to care about Rocio and finds it difficult to say goodbye, but we’ve never seen them interact in a friendly way in your comics. Raven vs Jerin (my side) kinda showed this in the last page. https://entervoid.com/view.php?id=6937&side=1&iid=8 It is still difficult for me to produce a lot of comics to show the details of their friendshhip (my bad) but it was shown there that they are friends and Rocio was even giving Raven blood (the blood bag comment). Pyras had a small BB in the works that kind showed a bit of the lighthearted stuff these two get into but not sure when that's gonna happen or if dropped. But yes it is a safe assumption that Rocio and Raven had grown close as friends in the background. I am working on speeding up my comic output so hopefully we get to see more. Her desire to get home was in Dove vs Raven. And in her intro it was more of a narrative thing to determine whether should she stay and move on in Void or try to get back home (ie A choice has to be made at some point for Raven) Dove and Raven happened after that so she still wants to go home and anyone can safely assume that it's still one of her goals. Which reminds me I should add her goals in her bio. [quote] The portal fails, so the going home plot point is dropped (and with it, interest over what she needs to make right drops because we know this particular comic won’t give us answers). Why would it be dropped? She is trying different avenues ways to get home. She thought Jerin's blood would make a difference but it didn't. Maybe she wants to find another interdimensional traveller next as a possible continuing plot for this, etc. The sky is the limit. If anything this opens up avenues for Raven to seek other Void characters IMO. [quote]We know Raven is going to go straight back to Rocio, so the letter plot point is dropped, along with a potential conflict. We know that Raven doesn’t remember her time in the Sandbox and comes out fine, so it will not affect the canon in any way. It’s effectively pulling a “but it was all a dream!” ending. What’s the hook? At the risk of spoiling. Sandbox leaves latent memories/feelings in certain people (I thought you should know this lol). And this is more of an intro for the Sandbox as well so other characters can use it if they wish. Want another hook? BRUHMA and MILLER have been missing/dead for a long time and were seen in the Sandbox. See page 10 for Miller cameo and 11 for a bit of a narration/exposition on Sandbox behavior (the two missing persons found were Bruhma and Miller) and pg 13 for Bruhma. Also Ozias started recording Sandbox events and this will carry over to the outside world - another possible hook. [quote]Going back to earlier, I think I have a feeling that the Raven-Rocio relationship disconnect may be due to an assumption that readers are in the RP server? Nope no RP server assumptions came with this (and even so, Raven and Rocio relationship in the RPs already came with the good friends/roommate assumption. Their RP server relationship is very rocky at best which is not what is at all hinted here). The assumption is more on after Dove and Raven they have been roommates and hanging out. As mentioned, a glimpse of this was shown in Raven vs Jerin. Hope that clears things up!

As everyone else said the art is on point for this BB. and I'm so glad that the colors compliment the lineart so well. I'm excited to see how part 2 turns out and what it could mean for both of these characters.

Rivana, You and Astro/Don have done an incredible good together , your beautiful art and Don's Colors, its a recipe for a true feast for the eyes, I can't wait for the part 2, I wanna read more. (also thanks for the Roxy cameo :-)

This was such a delight to read!

Uploaded! Just a note that this was supposed to be Raven's BB iniitially so the story looks way too focused on one character but there will be part 2 :) Don - thanks so much for working with me on this. Your coloring is phenomenal! <3

Cab: Doesn't it mean that the part II- will have them lost in San Francisco

LOL real talk when I chose the title I was thinking of the exact same movie (one of my faves when I was a kid). Raven can be the cat. Bruhma is a werewolf. I guess we need one more doggo XD

Doesn't it mean that the part II- will have them lost in San Francisco

gimme gimme GIMME GIMME GIMMEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE

Rikun: Homeward Bound I? Does that mean there's gonna be a part II?

Yep there will be part II.

Lookin forward to this one!

Homeward Bound I? Does that mean there's gonna be a part II?

ABSOLUTELY! I am fangirling right now that you decided to join in! I'll do my best <3