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Speed Death Tournament 2020, Round 1
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Chimaeric
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Uploaded January 29, 2020
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I'll never get over how much I love these colors! They've got such a fun vibe to them. It feels almost 90's, but even moreso, I think it feels emblematic of your aesthetic somehow. Anyway, I love it. I especially think it was really cool how you overlaid the daggers on top of everything else, resulting in cool color effects from both your colors and your lineart. I want more of Evelyn so bad! I do think your comic suffered a bit from characters going off-model, which is something I myself struggle with too much to give you any advice on haha. It's probably mostly a time constraint thing, but I guess it's something to watch out for in the future.chmaeric
So there's something small, but imo significant I want to point out in the last text box on the second panel of page 2. The way the lines are divided up, I first read "charge points" as a single thing (like there's some sort of point where you charge? idk I'm mostly just dumb) instead of how it's intended (as a noun and a verb). Something I personally think about a lot when putting together text boxes and speech bubbles is dividing up your lines in a way that increases the ability to easily comprehend what's being said. For example, if you had put "points" after a line break (i.e. "A warrior who has left her charge/points to herself"), I would have immediately interpreted it as intended. I really don't know if this is a me thing, or if it has to do with how some people's brains process text as opposed to others, but I've always felt like it's important to sort of finely craft text in comics to have line breaks in places that clearly divide separate thoughts. I don't know if I'm making any sense, and this isn't as much a critique as it is something I personally find interesting, but hopefully it makes some sort of sense to someone. Anyways, on to the real critique! This comic gave me chills. I don't know how you did it, but you somehow managed to write Knife-Eater to be such a badass that it really does justice to her character, while also using her to further Antares' story. And even though your art feels a bit sketchy overall, you still managed to make it look super good, and I just wish I could draw as quickly as you and still make things look so pretty. I think your use of light and shadow added a ton, as well. Going from the darkness of the forest to the dim lights of the Kill Club room to the bright lights of the city and the shadows on its rooftops, then to the stormy cliff... it's beautiful. I need more!