Nothin: I love the inks here, my favorite thing is the effect you did for Steph to make him look like he's tripping on drugs, I also like the way you drew Chica. I just wish there was more to this comic.
Radji: Your inks are always great and the water color texture stuff you do is really cool. The new eyes for Chica work to make her more toon like. This story was good with how Chica dealt with the pot dealer. Though some of the dialogue felt bloated,you should try to have someone go over your script to see about ways to may the dialouge flow better. That being said look forward to seeing chica go down the hitlist.
Nothin: I like your style a lot, and Steph is an interesting character. The way you drew Chica in the last page was really funny!
Radji: Oh. My. Gosh. Can I marry your backgrounds??? Honestly I am not one for gore and the like, but I really enjoyed how you drew Ruiz (or what was left of him). Chica is a hardcore gal and goshdang, I'd never like to be on her bad side.
Nothin - As with your previous comic, I was left feeling that there should be more pages and consequently being disappointed that there weren’t. I enjoyed the panels of Chica holding the knife and joyfully saying not to snitch, but overall she just felt like a background character who was interrupted by Steph and Cutie Mark’s antics. There’s very little actual interaction between her and Steph.
Additionally, I think you could have done more with that time you had. Even with a fairly low page count, no colour and sparse backgrounds, some panels look rushed. Particularly the last two panels on page 3, plus the first and last panels on page 4 - these look as if you drew them without a sketch layer, and the blood is clearly not filled in properly. I understand you were doing two battles at once, but the other battle was also just a few pages with no colour, and had an extra week. So, idk. I think you need to work on time management.
Radji - Damn that was dramatic. I’m not gonna lie, I initially didn’t pick up on the bacon soup comment so when the body fell out I was pretty horrified lmao. You draw gore very well, I tried to read page 4 quickly so I didnt have to linger and keep looking at Ruiz’s corpse. It goes without saying the art in general is amazing, I especially like your backgrounds and use of textures. Very interested to see if the reveal leads to an actual battle soon..
I think the dialogue needed some proofreading though. There were a couple of missing words and some of it felt too long and clunky, for instance “and you looks like that dumb cartoon dog some of my classmates won’t shut the hell up about” doesn’t exactly roll off the tongue, especially as an angry comment.
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