Fun battle from both of you!
Hellis: What an ambitious chase sequence, you had a lot of action going on! Page 4 is my favorite. Some of the scenes I feel do get very lost with the inks, like there wasn't enough focus. I suggest you try balance it next time with more shadows. The colour black gives weight to a page and naturally have your eye drawn to it more, for example, I feel like I skimmed then forgotten about the bazooka panel because of the large heavy blacks on the top and bottom panel of that page, leaving the least emphasis on the third panel-- it didn't help that the weapon seemed to have completely disappeared after that either. Last page definitely could have used "less is more" in terms of dialogue, it feels super cluttered at the second panel. would have been better to just simplify it down to a couple of lines, I feel this would have given more impact too.
Gregly: This was a delight to read! Love the amount of detail you've added for the backgrounds, and nice touch on the bubbles for Gwen inside the car. The ending was really cute!
For the colours, love the red and green on the dull purples + blue highlights on page 2. I don't quite agree with some of other the colour choices as some places feel like they don't have enough contrast or feel a little out of place. Adding a colour correction layer or changing some of the colour into similar hues may have helped compliment it more-- like, let's say shifting to more purple; taking away the light blue to a lighter purple, and yellows turning into pink, but still keeping bright blue and/or red as the highlights. I encourage experimenting to get more of a feel of what works and not. Trying out generated colour palletes as practice may also give you new ideas for next time!
hellis- ya got some sexy action going on. I like the bold angles, everything feels excellently fast paced. The magic blasts on page 4 look great but theres no impact to them so they look a bit like theyve been there the whole time, maybe some speedlines or magic splatter might make those look like theyre doing more damage. as for the characters themselves, Hara is forever my boyfriend but his muscle definition on the last page is a little TOO thick, his abs look painted on. You should do some anatomy practice, look at a whole bunch of ref, look at how other artists (coughTayandMagscough) draw muscles. I like to look up bodybuilders for MAXIMUM SWOL then dial it back from there haha. Theres also still a bit of a stiffness to your gestures that you are getting better at but I'd recommend some gesture practice drawings. if you can find a video of timed gestures, being forced to draw quicker and quicker will help you understand shape and balance and is generally a good exercise now and again. Youre definitely improving, it wont happen all at once but keep at it! And I look forward to where this plot is going! (kaiju huey?)
Gregly: i effen LOVE how you did Gwen's speech bubbles i laughed so hard omg. I want this cops and robbers rival eternally it cracks me up! The overhead shot on page 1 was PHENOMENAL but I dont think I love that shade of yellow on the last page. This was hilarious I love your comics!
Alright so.
Hellis: hey man, you got something cool going. I like how you do them action stuff. Just a few pointers.
1. Watch where you place those characters.Took me a while to register Hara firing the bazooka thing because the blasts were really skimming the panel borders. Give the stuff some breathing room if you want to show the whole action.
2. When drawing stuff into black backgrounds, white/brightened borders around characters or highlights are your friend. Gwen gets really lost in the black there. Also, if you're doing that emerging out of shadow thing on pg 2 panel 1, you'll need some way to gradient that shadow. Perhaps hatching.
And 3. I understand that you ran out of time at the last page. I can tell and I understand. But please for the love of god next time break up that exposition into more panels with action that lends more to the dramatic reveal. Or cut text. He could have been fine just saying "we got the big thing now", reveal the Park kaiju blood and go like "REALLY big."
All in all, keep it up man. Sorry to hear shit got in the way but you did good.
Gregly: Yo, I liked it. Simple comedy pulled off gud. I actually liked your direction here with color. Just going to suggest maybe looking up more stuff on color contrast. Gwen and regi can get lost in the background at times by sharing very similar hues. I hope you can continue to refine this. Good work.
Hellis: Very ambitious paneling and compositions, but I am constantly distracted by the improper use of the fill tool and random blurry lines. You should avoid scaling up lineart as much as possible, it always leaves a fuzzy anti-aliasing and it's really noticeable. Also the fill tool needs to be set to add 1 or 2 pixels to the selection, otherwise you get an uncomfortable thin grey pixel outline where you dont want it.
Gregly: Your are a master of comedic writing and I bow to your skills. I was non-stop grinning throughout the entire comic.
@Hellis
I'm not gonna lie, I went through your comic feeling a bit lost. It was pretty busy to be honest, and I didn't really feel like it ever grabbed my attention for long. I feel like you did some great jobs with some of your dynamic posing and perspective though, so major kudos on that!
One thing I do highly recommend you work on though, would be practicing drawing girls. From seeing your comics, including this one, you have a high tendency of making your girls look as masculine as guys, and it can hurt your comics a bit, because if Gwen wasn't referred to as a she, and I didn't have past knowledge of her as a character, I'd have 100% thought she was a grown man. Many people have issues drawing the other gender, but it is something to work on. Alongside this, when highlighting the muscular structure like you did with Hara, I think it could greatly help you to learn how to imply more lines for the muscles are there, because with the dark lines there, it feels like they're highlighted a bit too much, whereas it makes them not look real.
Also that car you drew was honestly very visibly pleasing, I don't know how accurate it is, but I can tell you put a lot of effort into it, and it looks great!! And again, those poses you got in this, were actually really impressive, so congrats!!!
@Gregly
That city on the bottom of your first page, is massively impressive, and overall I think you did a great job with it! I really enjoyed the little end you put to your comic, with how they were doing all those good deed.
One thing that I do wanna say is, there's something I really like about your colors, but I feel like it would be heightened a bit with a bit more practice of color theory! Overall, really good comic!
omg ok.
@gregly - this was so cute and innocent and i loved it!
@hellis - WHAT ARE THEY GOING TO DO WITH IT, I NEED MORE INFO HHHHHNNNGHGHGHGGNGHGHGHHG [screaming]
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