ALRIGHT! I have read each entre. I have a few things to spew and i will do so.
P.S. (before i go into critizism mode) Skrewt, very nice name, i love it. I think its cute lol
Ok
Both of you guys didnt color in your work, so that\'s good, it all comes down to entertainment, and how well stories develop! I love it already, i have to look into the bios of the charries again to make a decent critizism (hopefully i\'m spelling that correctly lol)
Galli- I like your style man, you did the dodging of Galli very nice! I actually saw the movement, as i would in a move or something. Very nicely done. It looked more finished than before and your story was good. I was confused by the way Skrewt spoke, and i thought it was a mistake done by you, but once i read the bio of Skrewt i realized what had happened and i will speak on that when i get to Skrewt crit. The only problem i had with your entry was the end. I got that Galli got her arse kicked, and was looking up at both of the girls, but why they teamed up on her was kind of below the surface of view, if you catch my drift! Hopefully i\'m not drifting too much and am making my points across clearly. If not just tell me and ill explain myself without talking around myself. I really want to see a colored battle from you, just to see how things would look, in a week i mean. LOL done with that one.
Skrewt- I like your style as well it has a more rugged feel to it that i always enjoy. I loved the way you drew Galli, see basically looked like the original, shows you have skills in drawing other people charries, i give you props, cuz i cant do that well at ALL lol. I also liked how you drew Skrewt coming at Galli in i think the 2nd page. She looked very scary! I was very shocked lol. I did have a few problems with it though. Like Galli\'s your story i feel dropped a tad bit toward the end. I got kind of lost. I kind of guessed that Galli got stung by Skrewt, but you didnt really illustrate that. I also dont know why there was a bullet in her eye at the end. Who shot her? When? What\'s the theme behind Skrewt really? Why did she care that she killed Galli \"a youngling?\", does she not realize she\'s in a battle area? Or no? Another thing i had a problem understanding is how did Galli sneak up on her? She has censors that decet the slightest movement! I was really dissappointed when she didnt use her full extent of her powers. She didnt do all that much with her long tail things, and Galli shouldn\'t have been able to sneak up on her, i know she was damaged a bit, but if the feelers are all over her body, and she can sense the slightest movement, she should still have SOME sensory abilities. One more thing, her speech was beautiful. It wasnt supposed to be. I\'m sorry to say, i read her bio, and it reads that her speech is supposed to be childlike and backwards, and if people didnt know that, they would be lead to believe Galli made a mistake in having her talk that way. The entire script was off according to the bio, and that brought down the creativity for me, and my enjoyment of the piece. It was still nicely done though. If you have answers for my previous questions please IM me as you did before for my other question and tell me your answers.
Hopefully, my points were brought across in a way that is understandable and reasonable. If not just tell me im not pigheaded. Alright. Good luck to both players. Nice fight
Nyk
Speed Death Tournament 2005: Round 3 / Skrewt vs. Gallidaysay
Critiques & Comments
# 7
Posted:
Jul 31 2005, 09:25 PM
# 6
Posted:
Jul 31 2005, 04:04 AM
Ok, i\'m going to read this a little later, because i know it\'s going to be good. Just wanted to say that, Skrewt your charrie has SUCH potential to KICK Galli\'s ARSE man! Galli, you have your work cut out for you man, I cant wait to see what you come up with to try and beat Skrewt.
P.S. how do you pronounce Skrewt? Is it like Squirt? Sorry if the answer is totally obvious!
(some people pronounce things way differently)
Ill come back with creative critizism! (sorry to write this i was bored)
Nyk
P.S. how do you pronounce Skrewt? Is it like Squirt? Sorry if the answer is totally obvious!
(some people pronounce things way differently)
Ill come back with creative critizism! (sorry to write this i was bored)
Nyk
# 5
Posted:
Jul 28 2005, 06:36 AM
great tales and such memorable characters
# 4
Posted:
Jul 26 2005, 05:57 PM
I was very impressed by Northern Raven\'s. The story just flowed, especially liked that snarling Skrewt on page two.
Sketch\'s art is excellent, the spinning on the hand was done beautifully. Had trouble understanding exactly what\'s going on in the last page. Everything else is damn cool.
Nice fight.
Sketch\'s art is excellent, the spinning on the hand was done beautifully. Had trouble understanding exactly what\'s going on in the last page. Everything else is damn cool.
Nice fight.
# 3
Posted:
Jul 26 2005, 04:49 PM
sketch the fluidity of the action you had goin there is REALLY impressive!
# 2
Posted:
Jul 26 2005, 04:18 PM
Ah Sketch, that was truely, truely awesome. I hope you win - your art was exquisite for this one, very dynamic.
# 1
Posted:
Jul 23 2005, 02:40 PM
This may be a close one.
Speed Death Tournament Match
Drawing Time:
1 week
Ended:
Jul 31st, 2005
Votes Cast:
33
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1830
Winner:
Sketch
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Sketch - your work is beautiful! I\'m looking forward to seeing more of your work in the future.