Impending Extinction / Oleander vs. Mob

Impending Extinction — Oleander vs. Mob

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Crit level: Open to any comments or critiques
Warning, Slight Gore.
Yeah it is an honor to suit up as the big bad and hopefully I can find someone who can suit up for me so I can take on the Threat with Viro lol. All in all it was a nice chance for me to experiment with some methods, So feedback is very much appreciated.
tags: fight, gore/violence, mild gore, Mob, oleander, Running Away, Transformation, viro


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Crit level: No preference
The comic takes place after these events:

https://entervoid.com/comic/7631

https://entervoid.com/view/7526/2/1


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RanZombie
Artist
18 comments
# 9   Posted: Jul 12 2022, 09:47 PM
Platinum - I liked that you really did have a good grasp on how Mobs powers works and even hint at the type of problems or troubles they might cause on him, as well as the unconscious benefits it brings. Oleander was also decently written and did have a clear motivation and reason of being there (That of offing the homeless in an underpass).
I do have some gripes with his general demeanor, but I can understand why you wrote them that way as there's still little content of him to properly gage how he would react in a situation like that.
The best criticism I can personally offer would be in regards to the first panel. It's definitely a good way to start a comic, showing the reader a general idea of where things will take place. However, I feel like it's a little bit off focus. Rather than drawing our attention to the underpass itself, we're shown the road over it and the city on the horizon. I think it would've helped if you brought a little more focus and space to that section in order to make the viewer feel like their about to enter this place, where all the action then unfolds. I can see that you added a few tents in there to kinda draw attention but I'm afraid its still too in the lower corner to really make the viewer catch that.

Rockman: I was around to see how you slowly brought this comic together so there's not many things I can say that I haven't said already, but I was still very impressed with the final result and love to see how your work gets progressively better and better!
Having Mob alter the status quo by being a perfectly mortal guy with power negating abilities will never get old! Can't wait to see what else he gets up to in void!
Oh and I already told you this, but I was really happy to know that you decided to follow up on my own characters events and effects on Oleander. It really helps in making everything feel like a continuous story and not just self contained events each in their own bubble!

PutridVodka
Artist
158 comments
# 8   Posted: Jul 12 2022, 09:01 PM
PLATINUM- I really liked the angles on the chase scene, pretty dynamic! the spashes of color really pop up against the black and white. Mob walking away from Oleander's fight was pretty funny too

ROCKMAN- Your sense of humor always gets me every single time holy shit. Also the way you used screetones was so neat and tidy. Mob's interactions with others is such a delight to see! And I'm so excited to keep Madd pestering the living shit out of him! Mob being really damn powerful and not realizing it is my absolute favorite thing ever. Your expressions and poses are looking even better and better with each comic!

Lovely match, both of you!!

Snowy
Artist
177 comments
# 7   Posted: Jul 12 2022, 08:14 PM
Platinum - The story feels really rushed, which might have been a time constraint issue, but I think you could have made Mob's meeting with Oleander feel a bit more natural, as well as Viro's sudden appearance. Your angles are getting better, good work with that! The spot blacks are nice too, it gives more contrast throughout your comic.

Rockman: I love the expressions so much! Madd and Mob's dynamic is a really fun one, I'm glad that you're exploring it. I think you could have used more backgrounds, but the ones you have are lovely (I envy how you draw cars).

Nice work to both comics, I'm excited to see more! : )

Fluffsamasprime
Artist
438 comments
# 6   Posted: Jul 12 2022, 12:09 PM
Awesome job guys!
Rockman: I love how oblivious Mob is. The humor hits me good. I'm a fan of the silly expressions you do for these. It confirms I need more mob in my life. Nice seeing the story from the collab carry on.
Plat: You've been going with braver angles and shots. They need a little tweaking, but they are quickly getting there. Really liked the coloring speckled through out the comic. It was nice touch to help set the tone.
The ending kind of came out of nowhere. Didn't expect Viro to show up at the end.

Red
Council
698 comments
# 5   Posted: Jul 6 2022, 10:37 AM
Plat - I thought you had some really interesting shots and panels in this one, specifically the second page was really cool with the bottom two panels. Overall it looks pretty clean and I think you did a great job. My main critique point is about the story, I felt like it was just a weird random encounter for Mob that ended abruptly. So the story didn't really feel like it had much impact on either character. I thought it was fun that Viro showed up, but maybe it would have been more interesting if she intervened in a more dramatic way to save Mob? The end was also maybe a missed opportunity for more of a joke for the last line, Mob kinda commented on the absurdity of the situation, he's getting attacked randomly and then a lizard shows up, I feel like that could have been played up a little more? I feel like sometimes you jump into the action a little too quickly, and your could benefit from a little more setup to set the mood and tone. I thought your depiction of Oleander was spot-on, and I'm really glad you used her!

Rockman - It was pretty funny to see Oleander depicted in this way, I never imagined her getting pestered by a trash child and getting annoyed. She seemed very human in this and less like a monster. The interactions were pretty funny. It was very cool to see you progressing Oleander's story by showing her powers weakening. I was really hoping someone would start changing and evolving her and adding powers and weaknesses. I thought the art was great, good expressions and action. I wish there were a couple more backgrounds but I really won't fault you for that. You dod get credit for drawing several cars though.

Great job both of you!

Bobert
Artist
81 comments
# 4   Posted: Jul 6 2022, 10:10 AM
Rockman: Mob is incredibly foolish and I look forward to more of your stuff with him.

Platinum: My brain is fried like usual so here is my disappointing feedback. I think your action was nice and thoughtful. Though I think it's also a bummer that the comic was a bit too short and didn't have as much character interaction as Rockmans did. It would have been nice to have had both in yours, cause I know you are definitely no slouch in character writing.

DesDemonical
Artist
15 comments
# 3   Posted: Jul 6 2022, 08:58 AM
These comics were both so fun to read!

Platinum- I just loved the panel where oleander's sword reveals her true form for a split second . Also the "terribly sorry about this mob, i'll come back to relieve you of your pains" haha! really fun writing and story

Rockman I LOVED the way oleander kept trying to kill mob with her powers being negated lol, and mob's reaction being "You're trying to rob me" and "Wait where did she go? are you a puppet?" really fun. ALso the art was really good!

IItherockmanII
Artist
67 comments
# 2   Posted: Jul 5 2022, 09:23 PM
My side of the battle takes place after these events:

https://entervoid.com/comic/7631

https://entervoid.com/view/7526/2/1

Fluffsamasprime
Artist
438 comments
# 1   Posted: Jul 3 2022, 05:57 PM
More mob and oleander!!!

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