Lathos vs. Harvey

Lathos vs. Harvey

Lathos vs. Harvey

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tags: harvey, lathos


by Sean

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RamenBean18
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29 comments
# 7   Posted: Jul 9 2021, 08:48 AM
Don’t forget! We shall battle someday!! 😁

TheCydork
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581 comments
# 6   Posted: Jul 7 2021, 11:07 PM
This is a step up from your intro! The action is way clearer, as is the environment! You also have a good flow with the dialogue, and despite the high amount of it I had no trouble discerning who was speaking and what order to read it in.

I noticed you tend to have a lot of small, cramped panels with similar poses; the rule of thumb with traditional comics is 5-8 panels per page, while your range is 11-17. You don’t need to have a new panel for every new action or viewpoint shift. For instance on the first page, you could have probably merged the 2nd and 3rd panels and overlaid the whole convo over the dripping van. The 5th and 6th panels could also have been merged, giving more space and maybe a chance to see Harvey’s shadow in the background to build some apprehension before he suddenly appears! I’m no panelling expert but if you like I can look over future thumbs for ya.

In terms of writing, Lathos and Harvey have clear voices, which is great! However the story felt.. a bit convenient? Idk, I just find it hard to believe Harvey would risk approaching and putting a hand on a stranger when 1) he seems aggressive and 2) a fight has the potential to result in an explosion.

SnowyMoth
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126 comments
# 5   Posted: Jul 5 2021, 08:48 PM
Nice work on your first battle, Rehn! I'm interested in seeing how you'll expand upon his story after seeing this battle!

Fluffsamasprime
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319 comments
# 4   Posted: Jul 4 2021, 12:40 PM
Congrats on completing your first battle Rehn! Now you have the blood lust in you!

Platinumartist
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96 comments
# 3   Posted: Jun 26 2021, 02:11 PM
This will prove to be one interesting battle, good luck to the both of ya!

StealRehn
Artist
6 comments
# 2   Posted: Jun 26 2021, 01:43 PM
Best of luck!

Sean
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380 comments
# 1   Posted: Jun 26 2021, 01:17 PM
Good luck! Have fun!

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Drawing Time: 1 week
Ended: Jul 11th, 2021
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