The Stars Were Suns / Sable vs. Llaana

The Stars Were Suns / Sable vs. Llaana

The Stars Were Suns — Sable vs. Llaana

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Story: PyrasTerran & Rivana
Script: PyrasTerran
Drawing: PyrasTerran
Rendering: Rivana
tags: death, death battle, death tournament, Llaana, lovechild, lovechild 2021, sable


by Footini and Radji

This comic has been rated suitable for teens and up by its creator(s)

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Crit level: Open to any comments or critiques
The next installment in Radji and Footini's lovechild 2021 run, with more lore expansion
tags: Llaana, louise ambre-aliona, lovechild 2021, saal darkmalice, tears




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Rivana
Artist
312 comments
# 14   Posted: Jun 19 2021, 06:00 AM
Working on this battle and finally reading both sides was such a blast. All the comments and votes are very much appreciated.  

Thank you everyone!

Fluffsamasprime
Artist
247 comments
# 13   Posted: Jun 14 2021, 11:48 AM
Rivras: I love the intro for this comic. It really pulled me in. Loved page 8. Fuckit I really loved the colors for this entire comic. Llanna's shadow was always that of a centipede. I took my time on the third read through to really enjoy this. I hope to see more Sable comics, specially if they are a send of to dead characters. It really hits the feels hard to watch a character accept death.

Radjtini: I love seeing you guys comic together, they come out so well. Seeing Llanna get to say good bye before leaving was so bitter sweet. Also watching Sable's decent into madness. Might I add, loved the monster tiddies on page 6. I hope to see more comics collabs from you two!

snager
Artist
145 comments
# 12   Posted: Jun 12 2021, 08:35 AM
Footini and Radji: your combined skills are growing so strong! I was like, wow, Footini achieving next level out here, when I saw Sable on the first page. The world design of the dying planet is just almost too-fucked-up for my gentle soul. the human figures all melted together in flesh tones, the rib cage on the horizon, the tiddy monster. it's so very very Metal.  

I liked the idea of Sable being so high, she can see all alternate reality versions of herself at once, and this story was a good chance to show off how Saal's powers work. But as much as I like all that, the point of the comic seems to have been just that: show how Saal's powers work.

Maybe the mission statement had been to show Llana's relationship to her parents, but all the glory seems to go to Saal.

Pyras and Rivana's side does a better job of giving development to Llana, and also Sable. Even though there's tons of plot and action, the exposition-through-dialog feels much more fulfilling to the characters' individual stories. A lot of empathy was given to all the fallen (and winning) love childs. It felt like a good balance between the main character, Sable, and giving room to Llana, while still having time for cameos for everyone else. Sable neither hogged the spotlight nor acted as just a prop to talk about other characters.

The story also had time to develop the relationship between Par and Sable. I'm loving Par. the AI who doesn't understand sarcasm and nuance is an outdated trope, but Par is so cute and pure and friend-shaped I just don't care.

We also had time to hear more from the organization Sable works for, which just gives me so many ideas, tbf.

It was ballsy of the foot man to fight two of the most OP players on the site, even if he did team up with Armageddon headliner Radji. clearly, challenging ourselves to battle stronker foes is how we get gains.

Radji
Artist
571 comments
# 11   Posted: Jun 11 2021, 07:52 AM
Unexpected things happen in life and instead of stressing over this comic anymore we decided to submit as is. .
Quote from: Footini

Seconded. While I would have liked to finish the comic 100%, recent events meant that I had to focus more on my real life and comic drawing time was reduced significantly. Especially Job-wise.

That said, all other crits were noted and appreciated.

Footini
Artist
281 comments
# 10   Posted: Jun 11 2021, 06:13 AM
I know you guys were tired, but there was a 2 month drawing time and you <i>chose</i> to take this on. Footini, iirc you also took on several other comics during the draw time? Time management and self control are also important skills in comic making. Cutting down on pages or on other battles would have probably helped.
Quote from: TheCydork
Don't ever lecture me about time management again.  Unexpected things happen in life and instead of stressing over this comic anymore we decided to submit as is.  Get over yourself and whatever level of quality you think we owe you for a free comic we make in our spare time.
All other crits have been heard and appreciated.

TheCydork
Artist
526 comments
# 9   Posted: Jun 10 2021, 10:44 PM
Pyrana - Stellar comic (no pun intended). Well written, great visuals, interesting in-universe explanation... yeah. Just a well-rounded, quality comic. Visually, loved the horror imagery when Llana first appeared. I could very clearly identify each of the lovechildren, even the ones only in silhouette, and ough the centipede under Sable’s skin was, well, skin-crawling lmao. Pages 19 and 25 were also really cool, love the use of negative space. Writing-wise, I loved Abby’s attitude, and it was neat to see Sable be slightly manipulative at the end! Some more negative-leaning traits always add a nice bit of spice. As said earlier, this was a really interesting way to tie the lovechildren together in-universe and give an explanation for it as well.

I have one minor crit - Abby and Maddie both seemed a little wonky. For Abby in particular, fullbody shots were fine but the closeups were oddly flat compared to Sable, and the lovely rendering of most other surfaces. They do only appear for a short while though, so it isn’t much of an issue. Great comic and teamup once again, Sable’s stuff is probably my favourite work by either of you tbh.

Radjini - For all the trippy imagery later on, my favourite page was actually the very first one! Idk, something about the huge pink planet, the broken moon, the flesh-covered buildings, all quite imposing but juxtaposed with the pleasantly smiling screen that Sable wakes up... it made for a really striking page. As for the story, it was really neat to have Saal enlist Sable’s help and revive her constantly from afar. Since they’re both time and space hoppers it made a lot of sense. Nice resolution for Llana too.

I’m with Putrid though, this spawned more questions than answers. I get this sense that neither of you have a clear idea of how Saal and Llana actually work, so you use cool or trippy imagery and vague explanations to coast by. Why will the pink drink stop Llana? How does Sable inject herself, but still have the vial to inject Llana with? What did injecting herself actually DO besides cool visuals? Who or what is the big spider figure, why is it trying to escape, how and when did Llana assimilate it? I was mostly left confused by the end.

As for art crits, the quality noticeably fluctuated. Compare page 2 to pages 11-13 for instance. The lines are wobblier and the colours much more garish without any shading to tone them down. I know you guys were tired, but there was a 2 month drawing time and you <i>chose</i> to take this on. Footini, iirc you also took on several other comics during the draw time? Time management and self control are also important skills in comic making. Cutting down on pages or on other battles would have probably helped. However, you both still did a good job considering you burnt out and came straight off the heels of a tournament!

Dr.Salt
Artist
96 comments
# 8   Posted: Jun 10 2021, 01:45 PM
I think both comics really nailed the emotions they were going for!

Pyras & Riv: Yours reminded me of a comic called Outer Darkness. They both have fun sci-fi/supernatural-horror thing going on.

PutridVodka
Artist
84 comments
# 7   Posted: Jun 10 2021, 01:41 PM
Rivana & Pyras:
That whole comic was STUNNING!!! Not only was it a very long comic, but the quality on each one was absolutely amazing- it never dropped! The lighting was fantastic, the gif page was such a great way to make emphasis on what was happening. The ending was so bittersweet and it left me wanting for more of what Sable will get to next, what her other jobs will be about and all. Easily one of the best written comics I've read here, loved it!!!

Radji & Footini:
Great use of colors overall! Specially when Sable was having that bad trip, the way you played with the panels there really cemented the trippy effect, too. But I gotta admit I had a hard time knowing what was going on and it gave me more questions than answers. Seeing someone as powerful and omnipotent and Saal be so vulnerable was a very nice touch in making them more humane, great job!!

Platinumartist
Artist
63 comments
# 6   Posted: Jun 10 2021, 12:38 PM
Wow, these two were comics of high quailty with their glorious use of color and tones. the tones that were set by both comics were wonderfully crafted and somber. It is sad to say goodbye to Llaana but I feel that this battle is a great send off.

Great Job to both teams! you guys did amazing!

Durianknuckle
Artist
22 comments
# 5   Posted: Jun 10 2021, 08:25 AM
Team Rivana and Pyras:
Absolute magnificient work omg!
Loved the hallucinations and colors! Llaana jumping was so sad 😢💔

Team Footini and Radji:
Llaana hugging Saal when she's a small baby is so cute omg ❤
Loved the sound effects! Also, good action!^^

PyrasTerran
Global Moderator
1469 comments
# 4   Posted: Jun 10 2021, 06:39 AM
Forgot to add the rating: Ours is rated T for Teen for disturbing imagery and some inhuman gore

Radji
Artist
571 comments
# 3   Posted: Jun 10 2021, 06:34 AM
credits: scenario: Footini and Radji
Storyboard: Radji
inking: Radji and Footini
Coloring: Footini
texts and SFX: Radji

radji's survival: Monster Energy drinks

Footini
Artist
281 comments
# 2   Posted: Jun 8 2021, 03:11 PM
Im.only internally screaming slightly

InkyBrain
Artist
45 comments
# 1   Posted: Jun 8 2021, 01:24 PM
HYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYPE

Comic Details -

 
Drawing Time: 8 weeks
Ended: Jun 17th, 2021
Votes Cast: 21
Page Views: 742
Winner: PyrasTerran and Rivana
 

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