Void City Shit Posts s01e01 / Kurdis

Void City Shit Posts s01e01 / Kurdis

Void City Shit Posts s01e01 — Kurdis

by snager

This comic has not been rated; viewer discretion advised.

Icon for Kurdis
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Crit level: In-depth critique preferred
tags: bruhma, cecil gagnon, dairyu, dean, king jack queen, kurdis, lacy webbs




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Fluffsamasprime
Artist
243 comments
# 17   Posted: Apr 3 2021, 11:35 AM
I would have liked to have seen some of the watercolors you did for your intro and other comics in this. It could have given more life to some of the panels with minimal backgrounds pop more. Your chaotic inking style works best with them.
Story wise its fairly difficult to follow and some characters pop in only to add awkward dialogue that doesn't add or drive the story. Not sure if its for comedic effect but it missed for me. Anyone not deep into the rp lore probably wont get the inside jokes that you put in this.
Page 3 it might have been funnier to have panels 3 and 5 switched so it would be the highly detailed face first then switching over to the more kermit the frog style you drew him in.
Page 7 Panels 2 and 3 I like the angle you did and how it gave the scene some drama. What is being talked about in the panel 3? I'm so lost. Why is Cecil chasing Bruhma?
Theres also a change in lettering where you go from handwritten to typed on page 16 then back to hand written. Is that because they're lyrics to a song? It might have been better to have just stuck with hand written instead.
Personal preference would be to see you do a shorter comic for a shitpost one. I think you could have easily sliced up this comic into 3-4 mini comics and even done some watercolor instead of going for 19 pages inked/ sketched.
This is my critique and opinion, you don't have to listen to any of it if you don't want to.

Don
Global Moderator
175 comments
# 16   Posted: Apr 3 2021, 12:11 AM
Hi! Stepping in as a global moderator, I just want to remind all parties (And those viewing/planning to comment) that any particularly off-topic discussions that are not about the comic itself should be kept to DM's. While the commentary below has been partially relevant to the comics contents to some extent, I feel a warning should be warranted that unless they are about how to improve the comic, general commentary OF the comic itself— It is in the interest of the community that we keep those responses off the comment section entirely. Any further messages that are specifically at/to/about Snager's person (And once again, not about the comic itself) should be sent in DM's or not at all.

Snager has requested in-depth critique of their comic, and so in kind it would be best if we focused on giving them that critique, if not some other variations of comic-commentary in general. Thank you!

Heathen
Artist
446 comments
# 15   Posted: Apr 2 2021, 11:06 PM
If what I’m about to say offends anyone, tough.

People can draw whatever the fuck they want.

PutridVodka
Artist
84 comments
# 14   Posted: Apr 2 2021, 02:25 PM
Six months ago we did briefly talk about the possibility of Kurdis and Cecil interacting (in the form of a battle) but nothing came from it. Last bit from me, just wanted to clear the situation a bit more

snager
Artist
139 comments
# 13   Posted: Apr 2 2021, 12:20 PM
:( wow, i'm sorry guys. i wrote this like 6 months ago and I thought we'd hashed it out back then. (except for snowy, but sorry I put your character in there, too.)

all i really remember is talking to putrid about if kurdis and cecil DID hook up. but that's not the same as going ahead and implying something happened in a comic.

I feel really bad, i don't know what to say or do.. except to say this doesn't have to count as canon.

6 months ago was a very different time.

Golden
Artist
52 comments
# 12   Posted: Apr 2 2021, 12:15 PM
Wooow
The fact that you didn't ask someone for consent, *especially* when it involves something WAAAY more than just a single on-screen cameo, that's not cool at all :/

InvaderDiz
Artist
59 comments
# 11   Posted: Apr 2 2021, 09:47 AM
In Snager’s defense I had given consent for Lacy a long time ago.

TheCydork
Artist
522 comments
# 10   Posted: Apr 2 2021, 01:02 AM
Thirded. Honestly assumed you would’ve asked beforehand; knowing you didn’t ask before putting Kurdis into relationships (Cecil) and/or somewhat sexual situations with other people’s characters (Lacy, Bruhma) makes things feel incredibly uncomfortable.

SnowyMoth
Artist
91 comments
# 9   Posted: Apr 1 2021, 11:56 PM
I really don't have much to say about this other than that I agree with Putrid.

PutridVodka
Artist
84 comments
# 8   Posted: Apr 1 2021, 11:49 PM
I'd appreciate it if you asked first before using another's character when they are so involved in the story. Not to say I mind cameos but this felt beyond just that

Heathen
Artist
446 comments
# 7   Posted: Apr 1 2021, 02:11 PM
This right here is why I don’t RP.

I like that second to last panel, though.

snager
Artist
139 comments
# 6   Posted: Mar 30 2021, 01:59 PM
what
Quote from: TheCydork
What-what? :?

TheCydork
Artist
522 comments
# 5   Posted: Mar 30 2021, 03:33 AM
what

InvaderDiz
Artist
59 comments
# 4   Posted: Mar 28 2021, 10:14 PM
Well that was a wild ride from start to finish. Good to see lacy and Dean!

Footini
Artist
277 comments
# 3   Posted: Mar 28 2021, 02:05 PM
Excellent use of pringling in your high and low frequency fields of opacity.

Radji
Artist
571 comments
# 2   Posted: Mar 28 2021, 11:59 AM
And now I want to hug kurdis and pat their head and go " there, there"

snager
Artist
139 comments
# 1   Posted: Mar 28 2021, 11:53 AM
in depth crit preferred

edit: im kidding you can say anything you want

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