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The writing positively shined through in this comic. I like that these siblings can be emotionally vulnerable around one another and reach out for support when in a rough patch. There are different kinds of love, and this is a familial, quiet kind of love that needs to be explored more in comics.
I liked the interpretation of Llaana being an antagonist purely in Snaffle's head, like an intrusive thought or something that can send you mentally spiralling. Win or lose, I think your did a great job writing that sibling dynamic and repurposing Llanna to fit your story.
My favorite background--Cryptid Football, circa 1950. Go Flatwoods!
I liked the interpretation of Llaana being an antagonist purely in Snaffle's head, like an intrusive thought or something that can send you mentally spiralling. Win or lose, I think your did a great job writing that sibling dynamic and repurposing Llanna to fit your story.
My favorite background--Cryptid Football, circa 1950. Go Flatwoods!
FrenchFoot
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In contrast to Lucky and Corn's entry, y'all had a polished looking comic, but I was left wanting for that plot. In combination with Birthright and this comic, I understand that Llaana wants to live, but I've yet to understand why she feels threatened. Maybe I'm not supposed to and you're only asking me to witness the rise of an Enfant Terrible. If so, I stand by the critique that I need to understand her angle. If she be villain, the best endorsement she can get is a justification for her actions.
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Snaffle & Loot: Loved the style change for the dream sequence
Llaana:Sooo gritty! Loved it!