After Hell's End / Kazue L. Burns, Morgan Maruyama, and "Eva"

After Hell's End / Kazue L. Burns, Morgan Maruyama, and "Eva"

After Hell's End — Kazue L. Burns, Morgan Maruyama, and "Eva"

by Energy

This comic has been rated suitable for teens and up by its creator(s)

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Crit level: Open to any comments or critiques
tags: after hell's end, eva, kazue l. burns, mild language, morgan maruyama




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Flutterbyes
Artist
298 comments
# 10   Posted: Jan 31 2021, 04:19 PM
It's good to see you taking on such ambitious full color stories! I can see you're experimenting more with composition, visual angles, and layout, and there is improvement there. I second what's already been said. I don't think the thought balloon tail tool in Clip Studio Paint really fits, and I don't see it ever working. I think you might need to just draw out those little circles.

Flytee
Artist
271 comments
# 9   Posted: Jan 31 2021, 05:17 AM
Keep it up Energy These ambitious, fully coloured comics are an excellent step in the right direction. I think you do a good job changing up the angles and having a lot of variety in your panels- I also appreciate the effort to have backgrounds in most scenes.
I wouldn't get too bogged down on the anatomy and facial expressions, there were a fair few misses, but I'm sure you're aware of what you need to work on, Just keeps practising and studying the human body & how it moves. Remember references are your friend.

Now, here are some suggestions that will likely instantly up the quality of your comics, without you needing to change much about your current technical level.  

- Change up the shapes of buildings in the background, they don't need to all be rectangles or squares. You can create more variety & visual interest with the types of tools your using. Look up photos of different skylines for inspiration.

- Place your text on the page first, then do your bubbles behind them. So the text will fit perfectly every time. A lot of your speech bubbles looked fine but I noticed some had huge gaps around the text others had barely any breathing room, this lack of consistency looks sloppy but is really easy to fix.

- Try some different brushes. This extremely thin line your using is PUNISHING, every little mistake becomes so much more glaring and it gives art a bit of a flat look to it. Brushes with more width variety/ texture are a lot more forgiving, but also add more depth to your lines. I think it's worth trying some out.

- Change up your eyes, + pupils, eyelids (even if this is only represented by the top line being slightly thicker) and a light shadow across the top this will make your character's eyes instantly look more expressive and alive.

I hope some of these suggestions are helpful, keep it up Energy!

 

 

ArtsandGoodies
Community Manager
557 comments
# 8   Posted: Jan 31 2021, 12:04 AM
congrats on getting this done, you just gotta keep moving forward and you should take solice in the fact it's done.

Footini
Artist
326 comments
# 7   Posted: Jan 30 2021, 08:03 PM
You're getting better and better Energy
Keep up the good work.

Fluffsamasprime
Artist
319 comments
# 6   Posted: Jan 30 2021, 01:30 PM
You're doing an awesome job on these!
12 pages fully colored!
Great job! Keep it up!

Rikun
Artist
133 comments
# 5   Posted: Jan 30 2021, 12:51 PM
Energy, you should be proud of yourself for committing to this BB and making it a full color comic! This is honestly huge for you and you deserve some props!

There's a lot you can do to improve from here on out, and this'll be the first step. As mentioned before, practicing anatomy and perspective will be crucial for your improvement. I also would recommend thumbnailing out your pages so you'll be able to see your comic as a whole and figure out what needs to be fixed without doing too much work. I'd also recommend that maybe working on tighter, smaller stories should help you out even more since I think trying to make every comic an epic blockbuster is extremely overwhelming.

All in all: pace yourself, take the time to absorb information, and use this comic as a jumping off point. Despite how you might feel at times, you've proven that you can make a comic if you put your mind to it, so keep it up.

Rivana
Artist
326 comments
# 4   Posted: Jan 29 2021, 06:33 AM
Congratulations on finishing yet another comic. I applaud you for taking the initiative to focus and see this through the end. Now that you know how to keep your focus, I suggest taking some time to study drawing fundamentals - starting with anatomy and drawing from life (or photographs! Not just people, but also environments).  You don't have to spend the whole day doing this, 30 mins to an hour a day could go a long way overtime. From there you can go to values, color theory, perspective etc, the sky's the limit. All these I am still in the process of learning myself.

You're taking steps to the right direction so keep up the good work.

OberGoat
Artist
49 comments
# 3   Posted: Jan 27 2021, 05:46 PM
I like seeing that you're trying new things, some of your angles are looking pretty nice, I really like page 11 in particular. Keep working on anatomy and faces.

PutridVodka
Artist
110 comments
# 2   Posted: Jan 27 2021, 05:31 PM
I really like how varied your panels are, the lighting and shading on your work really lifts it up nicely

TheCydork
Artist
581 comments
# 1   Posted: Jan 24 2021, 03:03 PM
I commend you for for taking a break off Void and sticking to your guns to finish this. I know how tough it is to stay motivated on a single comic. I think you’re getting a little braver with your panel layouts, page 7 was a step in the right direction imo. I can’t help but feel this is a rush job though, which is weird because it took you so long to finish? There’s a noticeable step back from your last comic in terms of line quality and shading. In almost every panel I can see where lines have overshot and should have been erased/cleaned up, and I can clearly see the brush strokes for the shading, which is haphazardly placed. It was really hard to take the story seriously when the first face we see is crudely drawn and has eyes pointing in different directions.

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