Masukuda Hoppa Kuro vs. The Smile

Masukuda Hoppa Kuro vs. The Smile

Masukuda Hoppa Kuro vs. The Smile

Icon for Masukuda Hoppa Kuro50.5%
711 points
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Crit level: Open to any comments or critiques
tags: heathen, masukuda hoppa kuro, The Smile


by Heathen

Icon for The Smile49.5%
696 points
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Crit level: No preference
tags: heathen, kuyi, manga, masakuda hoppa kuro, The Smile, underwood




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ArtsandGoodies
Community Manager
434 comments
# 23   Posted: Sep 21 2020, 08:42 PM
Underwood: just want to say i love how you're able to change styles so much and have every style look amazing.

Heathen: We talked about it in voice chat the other day but to keep it archived hear the only problem your comic had was where you chose to end it off. with mutlipart series especially action series you want to end parts either right before the main climatic action or when there has been enough time for the reader to process the action and you start hinting at the follows up. Right now this ended on the page of the climatic action and the reader didn't have time to process the main action on the page it ended. you will generally want another page after the main action, or if there wasnt time for that to end it sooner right before the main action building up to it more.

Happy September 21st! ACAB -Reecer6
Artist
304 comments
# 22   Posted: Sep 21 2020, 03:03 AM
i am furious you two are both so goddamn good and simultaneously so goddamn fast like ONE WEEK SERIOUSLY??? FOR THESE TWO EXCELLENT COMICS???

Field Marshal Lionel Forsythe W. Underwood XIII, GBE
Artist
140 comments
# 21   Posted: Sep 20 2020, 06:51 PM
Thank you all for the critiques I'll keep them at heart. And thank you to Heathen for rousing me off my slumber. I could not have done it without goading from one of the best artists on Void. Yeah enough talk from this old man, lets get on to ROUND 2. Let me get my prune juice and Humira...

Heathen
Artist
378 comments
# 20   Posted: Sep 20 2020, 06:29 PM
Thanks for all the comments and feedback, everyone. And congrats on the win, Underwood, your comic had me laughing out loud just about every panel!

I’ll see you in round 2!

InvaderDiz
Artist
10 comments
# 19   Posted: Sep 19 2020, 12:14 PM
Yo, I know nothing about either of these characters other than they look cool, but this was one of the dopest things I\'ve ever seen in my life. 10/10

Fluffsamasprime
Artist
44 comments
# 18   Posted: Sep 19 2020, 10:57 AM
I don\'t know how to spoiler stuff so if you haven\'t read them don\'t read this.

Heathen! That was badass how you had all that glass shred apart those goons! The whole action manga style you went for in this came off spectacularly.

Underwood! I was laughing the whole time I was reading this! The whiplash reactions! The changing art style! If the intro were darker it\'d take me back to school days of read those edgy comics as a kid.

TheCydork
Artist
272 comments
# 17   Posted: Sep 19 2020, 05:24 AM
These were both super fun, and both of you guys have professional quality work! It’s also wild seeing the Smile in humorous situations haha.

Underwood - The randomly changing styles and expressions really got me. It’s amazing how easily you switch it up without it looking forced, I was lowkey thrown back to my school lol so random!!1! style humour (in a good way). The posing was also great. The only thing that bothered me was the jump from being set in an empty void save for the claw machine to a fully detailed city.

Heathen - This was ridiculously clean and professional looking for 1 week, holy shit. All the shots looked great, and I particularly liked page 5! It kinda threw me that I was reading from left to right though when you used Japanese words and a style reminiscent of manga. I also found the action kinda cliche, and without much of a spin to make it new and interesting e.g. the delay in the Yakuza being blown away when Kuyi lands, or the Smile grabbing him by the head.

Bobo
Web Dev
947 comments
# 16   Posted: Sep 14 2020, 09:01 AM
Spoiler: Underwood • show
As always, your art is impeccable and your writing creative and original! The humor in this comic didn't quite work with me for the most part, unfortunately, but I loved the action. You made such good use of extreme foreshortening, messy lines indicating movement, and background effects to really nail the impacts of all every punch and kick in this comic. And the cameos were fun and random. It's good to see you around again!

Spoiler: Heathen • show
Both you and Underwood clearly had fun imitating that classic manga style, and I'm way into it. I love how badass you made both characters, from Masukuda taking out a bunch of people with the shattered glass from the skylight to Smile just completely stopping him with one hand and smashing him into the ground. I wish there were more of this comic, because it was so good!

Rivana
Artist
165 comments
# 15   Posted: Sep 14 2020, 08:17 AM
Massively entertained. While I love serious and epic story arcs, I am just as much as a sucker to over the top, silliness, badassery and humor. No crits except I WANT MORE!

There is no question why both of you are two of the best comic artists/writers in the site. Major kudos!

brownkidd
Artist
11 comments
# 14   Posted: Sep 14 2020, 06:32 AM
Hot dang these are both tite. The action is so smooth and the writing, while silly and over-the-top, managed to stay entertaining without veering into cringe territory. Well done to both of you!

Hellis
Artist
240 comments
# 13   Posted: Sep 13 2020, 02:54 AM
I am stumped critting these. Please know I gave you both the same, rather high, score. Becouse both works are clean as hell, funny as fuck and straight up exellent.

snager
Artist
53 comments
# 12   Posted: Sep 12 2020, 11:22 PM
Y'all got me so hype for this battle! i'm new so i've never seen a gentlman's agreement where the battle has a part one and part two. I think I ruined the jokes a little for myself by watching Heathen stream it in the discord - or maybe that vibe was what made it more real.

anyway, please stay tuned for my new TV show coming spring 2022: Boroto's Two Dads!
The Story centers on the life of a 1X year old boy named Boroto Tennyson-Uzumaki - His soul is bound to 10 different demons and once a day he can use his special family blood line ability to turn into any one of them. His two dads, middle-aged retirees Benjamin Tennyson and Naruto Uzumaki, are very supportive of their son's goals but worry about how drastically the demons change him.

Camel
Artist
97 comments
# 11   Posted: Sep 12 2020, 09:52 PM
Underwood - What's there to say?? It's hilarious, it's bonkers, and it looks clean as fuck. All i'd crit is that final colored page is a bit too saturated for my tastes but other than that, primo.

Heathen - With a one week deadline you're obv punching a bit below your weight, but still this comic is remarkably clean and gorgeous to look at as well. Your action rendering is arguably the strongest on void, the fight scenes are just -mwAh-. Only thing not working for me is the overly light backgrounds - a lil value would make certain scenes pop a lot more.

CandycornRhino
Artist
77 comments
# 10   Posted: Sep 12 2020, 09:03 PM
I'm a loss for words.

I cant comprehend crit this lmfao.

Heathen
Artist
378 comments
# 9   Posted: Sep 12 2020, 08:43 PM
I forgot to select a crit level, but please, have at it and pull no punches.

Shen
Artist
1320 comments
# 8   Posted: Sep 12 2020, 01:58 PM
i... i am not worthy to crit these XD these are both some of the best comics ive read here in a WHILE. The quality is amazing and I laughed my ass off. i tip my hat, gents. Also, Thanks for the shout-out, Underwood LOL

PyrasTerran
Global Moderator
1449 comments
# 7   Posted: Sep 12 2020, 01:24 PM
I’m back in high school lurking around the manga section of Barnes & Noble ☺️

Footini
Artist
54 comments
# 6   Posted: Sep 12 2020, 12:33 PM
Honestly, these were some of my favorite comics I've read on here in a while.
Both were near pitch perfect in their styles and humor.

Underwood- There wasn't a page that didn't make me laugh in this.While there wasn't much plot beyond 'two dudes fight just because' the absurd humor carried the energy through to the end.

Heathen- You nailed the old school manga look, down to the sound effects and even the shading.  The sudden ending did kind of leave me wanting more but in a ' aw that's it?' sort of way.  I definitely want to see a follow up.

Two high quality comics from two void pros; great read from both of you.

Sean
Approval Committee
357 comments
# 5   Posted: Sep 12 2020, 12:33 PM
Fucking hell... I don't even know where to begin. I am going to need to drink a few bottles of sake and come back to this comment section.

You two are fucking disgusting beasts. I want more. Seriously.

Sean
Approval Committee
357 comments
# 4   Posted: Sep 9 2020, 08:26 AM
HURT EACH OTHER!!!!

Hellis
Artist
240 comments
# 3   Posted: Sep 5 2020, 04:43 PM
WUUUU. UNDERWOOD COMICS?! This fight gonna be fantastic

Shen
Artist
1320 comments
# 2   Posted: Sep 3 2020, 07:24 PM
whoa this is outta nowhere! Awesome!

Field Marshal Lionel Forsythe W. Underwood XIII, GBE
Artist
140 comments
# 1   Posted: Sep 3 2020, 07:22 PM
Yay first comic for Kuyi! Woot woot!

Comic Details -

 
Drawing Time: 1 week
Ended: Sep 19th, 2020
Votes Cast: 28
Page Views: 436
Winner: Field Marshal Lionel Forsythe W. Underwood XIII, GBE
 

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