Sister Kiteria vs. Colbitzer

Sister Kiteria vs. Colbitzer

Sister Kiteria vs. Colbitzer

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585 points
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by Sean

Icon for Colbitzer49.2%
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yarnwitch
Artist
302 comments
# 20   Posted: Aug 27 2020, 09:48 AM
for people mentioning power use: As much as i wanted to let it be ambiguous, I think my personal experience with heat illness and sensitivity and just knowing about it for a huge portion of my life created this issue. I was under an impression that it was at least somewhat common knowledge, so now I know that's not the case and I can be more wary of that in the future!

Give me your heat resistance powers, y'all. *shakes fist*

snager
Artist
51 comments
# 19   Posted: Aug 21 2020, 01:59 PM
Both of yall: it's so nice to see two such different characters interacting- are they rivals? mentor and student?
I take it you said to each other 'dont do more  than 3 pages' and then you both were challenged to try to fit a fight sequence in something that small. Personally, I found it hard to follow the action, and it took a couple re-reads for the both of yas.

Yarnwitch, I was so stoked to see your watercolors in action and I was not disappointed! everything we love about watercolors - the granulation, the melting together of the colors - all on top of your nice spot blacks and cross-hatching! your color pallets use contrast without getting too saturated and without clashing on the page. beautiful! and I really like the way you give us a link to the comic in reference! never seen that done before, very clever and merciful to newbies.

Sean, i love the way you drew that rat. your thick black lines and the puplpy yellowed paper really make this look like a woodblock, which is :ok_hand: nice. you really know how to make the most out of  black and white art!


Bobo
Web Dev
947 comments
# 18   Posted: Aug 21 2020, 08:45 AM
Spoiler: Yarn • show
Arts sort of already hit what I was going to say about not being sure what the trick was on page 2. His bio says he can adjust body temperature through touch, but that wouldn't explain her being unable to aim/shoot him. I honestly wasn't expecting these two to work together, so that was an interesting twist. Does that mean Kiteria is also anti-furry, or do their interests just cross over in other ways? Really beautiful comic and it's always good to see more of you!

Spoiler: Sean • show
I would have loved to see this in color, but gosh are your inks pretty! I'm just blown away at how much better your art has gotten since you first started battling with Margot (rip). I feel like the panel where she finds Colbitzer's jacket is way too zoomed in to be able to tell what's going on. I was able to connect the dots based on how he's not wearing the jacket afterwards, but some indication that Kiteria had moved and that what she had in her hand was clearly his empty jacket would have helped clarify that plot detail. Still, the violence of your comic was visceral, and it's always good to see just how far Colbitzer is willing to go when fighting someone. You keep me wanting more every time with this bastard!

ArtsandGoodies
Community Manager
432 comments
# 17   Posted: Aug 20 2020, 06:13 PM
Yarn: your traditional stuff is very good and the art and figures look really awesome in this. Though story wise i'm really confused as to what the trick was he did, I don't know what really went on there. but even with that i still really enjoyed the comic

Sean: This is a great comic from your end. while some of the action is a bit too close up to tell what's going on you improved a bunch at making it clearer pulling some of the shots further out to make it clear. I really like the bottom panel of the first page. Also I just enjoy your inks in general

Symon_says
Artist
167 comments
# 16   Posted: Aug 19 2020, 03:33 PM
Ooof these week long scar matches are great. Way to go you two!

Yarnwitch -
Spoiler: show
 Nice tie in with Colbitzer's intro. I really like the mild use of colors and shading. Made this feel more like a dream or nightmare respectfully. I would recommend fewer panels per page and maybe enlarging your panels altogether for a larger page count, unless restricting such a thing. Great work and go get that new target!


Sean -
Spoiler: show
 Youch. Ol' Colbi must have felt that slugg to the gut. The background texture and color was a nice choice and you got a lot of nice details in here too! Rats included. Where did Colbitzer's hat go? Probably at the cleaners. Kiteria sure got an ear full from this match. Keep it up!

Pizza Man
Artist
15 comments
# 15   Posted: Aug 18 2020, 07:16 PM
Really enjoying the quality on both of these! I gotta say I'm hard pressed on who I should give the advantage to.

Flytee
Artist
143 comments
# 14   Posted: Aug 18 2020, 04:46 PM
This was a great battle.
Yarn- its so nice to see traditional pages, I love your watercolours, the constant colour pallet through this comic was very nice. This was solid though I will admit, I sometimes had a hard time following the action.

Sean-I enjoyed the scar and the dialogue on the last page. That was pretty brutal. The grainy looking overlay also added a nice finished polish to your pages.
crit wise, I wish there was an establishing shot at the start- or just something to set the scene better. The flow of the action also felt a bit janky at times.

My favorite thing about both of these comics was the relationship you established between these two. Its different to other duos I've seen on the site- I'm really invested in what comes next.

Heathen
Artist
373 comments
# 13   Posted: Aug 16 2020, 03:21 PM
Yarn: I really liked this comic, aside from the clarity and composition issues I talked to you about.

Sean: this might be one of your strongest showings yet. Your side suffers from a couple of the same problems, in a similar way. It feels too sudden when Kiteria starts diving and blasting, and Colbitzer teleports into cover. You just didn't choose the best frame in the action to illustrate those motions fluidly. If a gun is going to be fired, we need to see the gun beforehand. If a character is going to dive to the side, they should look poised for evasive action beforehand. The layout of the room needs to be established beforehand so we understand how Colbitzer could get behind a pillar so quickly when he had just been standing in the open directly in front of Kiteria in the previous panel. They're basically in arms reach of each other in panel 1, so the guns appearing suddenly in panel 2 seems random, like, woah, ok, he was just standing there, but alright.

Then the part where he seems to immobilize her is really confusing. She gets tired for no reason,  then we see his hand reaching for her out of the shadows, and then he's leaping at her with that same hand pulled back, so that whole sequence is broken. Yarn had a similar problem in depicting Colbitzer's powers, and I'll tell you what I told her: whether you're doing a proximity thing or a touch thing, you have to be extremely clear in communicating what's happening when the ability essentially just causes heat exhaustion. There's no special effect, we can't see it, there's no color to indicate heat. So someone has to either verbalize or think in a thought balloon or narration that he's raising her core temperature, or you gotta draw some heat waves or something. Clarity trumps realism every time.

That's a well drawn rat butt.

Good scar and good punny dialog tied to it.

I like how both of you established their brutal teacher-protege relationship.

TheCydork
Artist
261 comments
# 12   Posted: Aug 14 2020, 09:29 PM
Love how both of you decided to go with the knowing each other beforehand route!

Yarn - Gorgeous watercolours! I loved this pink and yellow lighting and the spotblacks, that ominous, shadowed shot of Colbitzer’s face on page 2 was great. The rest of that page was a little confusing to me though. I wasn’t sure what what happened, what the trick Colbitzer pulled was and how Kiteria ended up on the floor. Kit also seemed to disarm him far too easily on the following page.

Sean - Ohhh man what a vicious scar! I love how you tied it in with Colbitzer’s shit talking too. The environments were also good, and I got this really claustrophobic vibe but in a way that felt intentional, like Colbitzer was testing Kiteria with a limited space and lots of hiding places. I agree with Hellis though in that it started a bit abruptly. Some of Kit’s expressions could have been pushed farther too, like when she is reeling from being hit in the face.

Hellis
Artist
239 comments
# 11   Posted: Aug 14 2020, 11:44 AM
Big fan of the action. Also good choice on both ends on how to go about a short deadline. Keep it to the point nad focus on quality.

Sean: Your comic is solid, but it starts to abruptly. I know you decided to keep it tight, as you should have. But some sort of establishing shot or set up page would have really elevated this one. Solid inks, SOLID spotblacks. Good clean action. You leveled up. I will have to fight you :<

Yarn: Your watercolors are so fucking great. QUality of this was great. The expressions are vivid and the general tone, especially for that very last panel? :chefskiss:. Really do love a bit of good noir, something I want to see more of from both of you. You work that tone well.


Fluffsamasprime
Artist
36 comments
# 10   Posted: Aug 14 2020, 10:59 AM
These had some good action shots and some entertaining banter!

yarnwitch
Artist
302 comments
# 9   Posted: Aug 14 2020, 10:49 AM
OHHHH DANG DUDE!!!!! Nice job! I appreciate this fight. HMU anytime alright?

Sean
Approval Committee
355 comments
# 8   Posted: Aug 14 2020, 09:42 AM
*vibrates violently*

yarnwitch
Artist
302 comments
# 7   Posted: Aug 14 2020, 06:27 AM
*vibrates excitedly*

Sean
Approval Committee
355 comments
# 6   Posted: Aug 6 2020, 10:18 AM
"A pig and a nun walk into a bar..."


yarnwitch
Artist
302 comments
# 5   Posted: Aug 6 2020, 10:17 AM
We should have made this a death match, im boutta fuckin' wreck a pig.

Sean
Approval Committee
355 comments
# 4   Posted: Aug 6 2020, 10:16 AM
I'm putting you in the trash with this dumb nun where you belong, jerk face!

TheCydork
Artist
261 comments
# 3   Posted: Aug 6 2020, 07:54 AM
Ohoooo two baddies who think they’re righteous facing each other? *eyes emoji*

yarnwitch
Artist
302 comments
# 2   Posted: Aug 6 2020, 06:35 AM
I wish I had something more clever to say but you're going DOWN!!!!!!

Sean
Approval Committee
355 comments
# 1   Posted: Aug 6 2020, 06:23 AM
Nothing tastes better than catholic blood and a good plate of guilt

Comic Details -

 
Type: Scar Match
Drawing Time: 1 week
Ended: Aug 20th, 2020
Votes Cast: 27
Page Views: 445
Winner: yarnwitch
 

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