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i really like this! i mean, i'm a little biased towards good bugs, but i think you do a good job of quickly establishing sidae's personality and subsequently his abilities. you've also got a lot of fun compositional choices here! having a character appear multiple times on the same backdrop is a huge bop. looking forward to what you can put out!
Intro Story / Sidae
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# 8
Posted:
Apr 29 2020, 02:20 PM
# 7
Posted:
Apr 28 2020, 03:44 AM
It was self defense, officer, I swear! This was a nice comic, fluffsamaprime, keep them coming.
Incognito spider is best spider.
Incognito spider is best spider.
# 6
Posted:
Apr 28 2020, 03:36 AM
Oh man I love the design of Sidae’s monster form! That panel on page 3 where his fangs come popping out was A+. I also really enjoyed the first page - I liked how you portrayed Void as this blue high rise, and the little crossword puzzle that Sidae “solves” was a cute and funny look into his personality.
As others have said there is a problem with wacky perspective throughout the comic though, and just general confusion about the space. For instance page 2, I get the impression Sidae’s indoors, but the comic ends in an alleyway. I see him walk up the stairs but as the palette stays the same, I didn’t register an environment change till I reread.
But anyway, congrats on getting him in and welcome to Void!
As others have said there is a problem with wacky perspective throughout the comic though, and just general confusion about the space. For instance page 2, I get the impression Sidae’s indoors, but the comic ends in an alleyway. I see him walk up the stairs but as the palette stays the same, I didn’t register an environment change till I reread.
But anyway, congrats on getting him in and welcome to Void!
# 5
Posted:
Apr 26 2020, 08:39 AM
That was a fun intro I went from being like "Aww what a happy-go-lucky fella" to "OH LORD HeLp" Sidae certainly isn't one-note and I'm excited to see what kind of stories you'll tell with him.
Art wise your figures are great, tons of expression & really competently drawn. I also very much enjoy Sidaes design, the way he hides his monstrous nature feels really natural.
The main crit I have is the settings felt off, they were overcrowded and empty all at the same time, which is kinda impressive! (example- the start of page 2) the sense of space and perspective, in general, was a little janky. Try looking up references of similar environments, especially when drawing such ambitious, lively backgrounds.
overall I really loved this!
Welcome to void
Art wise your figures are great, tons of expression & really competently drawn. I also very much enjoy Sidaes design, the way he hides his monstrous nature feels really natural.
The main crit I have is the settings felt off, they were overcrowded and empty all at the same time, which is kinda impressive! (example- the start of page 2) the sense of space and perspective, in general, was a little janky. Try looking up references of similar environments, especially when drawing such ambitious, lively backgrounds.
overall I really loved this!
Welcome to void
# 4
Posted:
Apr 23 2020, 06:16 AM
Welcome to Void! Really strong intro here and gave us a sense of the character's personality and what he does to some extent but not enough that left us wanting for more.
Art is pretty good too. Aside from what was already mentioned, one thing I noticed is the lack of textures to separate foreground and background or just things in general. I think you have a strong eye for perspective, something I still struggle with!
Can't wait to see Sidae interact with other Voiders. He seems like a sweet guy..until he ends up wanting to eat you
Art is pretty good too. Aside from what was already mentioned, one thing I noticed is the lack of textures to separate foreground and background or just things in general. I think you have a strong eye for perspective, something I still struggle with!
Can't wait to see Sidae interact with other Voiders. He seems like a sweet guy..until he ends up wanting to eat you
# 3
Posted:
Apr 21 2020, 10:15 PM
Congrats on Getting them in. I made a full crit that should be on the approval email, but another thing I wanted to add is try increasing the gutter size of the panels giving a bit of white inbetween the black border. It tends to help give more spacing so panels can read easier, but you did some good stuff with characters breaking panels in this. Also the final pose with him bitting the guys neck is really cool. congrats and good luck with some battles.
# 2
Posted:
Apr 21 2020, 11:26 AM
OH BOY A SPIDER DUDE. One Fear.
Good comic! Very simple introduction, gives a good display on Sidae's character. I like the paneling. Couple of crits. I feel the ambient dialogue in the crowd at the train station on page 1 didn't really need to be there. We can already assume that a crowd of people are chatty, so picking out a couple of mundane dialogue felt superfluous. My other crit is the color composition. You have a lot of blues as the background but you use a soft red for the shadows on Sidea where as the other characters use a different color, it felt very jarring to look at, considering the tone of the shadow felt more like a highlight than a shadow.
Otherwise, good comic! Welcome to Void! Looking forward to seeing moreeee aaaaa
Good comic! Very simple introduction, gives a good display on Sidae's character. I like the paneling. Couple of crits. I feel the ambient dialogue in the crowd at the train station on page 1 didn't really need to be there. We can already assume that a crowd of people are chatty, so picking out a couple of mundane dialogue felt superfluous. My other crit is the color composition. You have a lot of blues as the background but you use a soft red for the shadows on Sidea where as the other characters use a different color, it felt very jarring to look at, considering the tone of the shadow felt more like a highlight than a shadow.
Otherwise, good comic! Welcome to Void! Looking forward to seeing moreeee aaaaa
# 1
Posted:
Apr 21 2020, 10:53 AM
Welcome to Void, we welcome your spider to our garden :-)
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