Intro Story / Kaleo

Intro Story / Kaleo

Intro Story — Kaleo


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Flytee
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105 comments
# 13   Posted: Feb 18 2020, 04:13 AM
This was great,  Kaleo has an excellent design, I'm a fan. I also like that you've tied distinct locations to him.

My impression of Kaleo from this comic is that he's the, level-headed, mum friend? I'm not sure if thats right after reading his ref and bio!
Regardless, I enjoyed this and I'm curious about the dynamic between these two characters.

!bangarang!
Artist
37 comments
# 12   Posted: Feb 17 2020, 06:23 PM
Happy February 17th! -Reecer6: okay, cool character, they're a neat transforming mermaid monster, i like that, but also: YOU REALLY ARE GONNA DROP AN INTRO STORY WITH A TO BE CONTINUED, WHEN YOU VERY WELL COULD'VE CONTINUED TO MORE PAGES, MAN

AND IT DOESN'T EVEN INTRODUCE THE CHARACTER!!! THIS IS A HOLDEN COMIC FT. COOL MONSTER

we've got battlepass for the express purpose of letting you nooot do this man
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Yeah I messed up.

Happy March 31st! -Reecer6
Artist
283 comments
# 11   Posted: Feb 17 2020, 02:45 PM
okay, cool character, they're a neat transforming mermaid monster, i like that, but also: YOU REALLY ARE GONNA DROP AN INTRO STORY WITH A TO BE CONTINUED, WHEN YOU VERY WELL COULD'VE CONTINUED TO MORE PAGES, MAN

AND IT DOESN'T EVEN INTRODUCE THE CHARACTER!!! THIS IS A HOLDEN COMIC FT. COOL MONSTER

we've got battlepass for the express purpose of letting you nooot do this man

Rivana
Artist
73 comments
# 10   Posted: Feb 17 2020, 09:35 AM
Art is great and looks Kaleo looks like an interesting character. The others are right in pointing out though that it doesn't show much about him. I ended up being more interested in finding out what is going on with Holden and how Lilyfeather is going to react to this. ^^

However,  I do like how you showed off his transformations and where he lives. I hope to see more from him!

Fred v2.0.1
Artist
498 comments
# 9   Posted: Feb 15 2020, 07:49 AM
pretty :0

Camel
Artist
83 comments
# 8   Posted: Feb 14 2020, 08:01 PM
The art here is really great, beautifully rendered backgrounds and a really pleasant palette. All I'll say is you should try pushing the shadows on your figures, the values between light and shadow are so minimal that they look like flats.

kubo
Artist
78 comments
# 7   Posted: Feb 13 2020, 08:28 PM
I LOVE DRAGONS> I LOVE THIS CHARACTER. I WANT MORE. No seriously, I need more. Your are and page layout is great here, I just want more. But I guess that's what an Intro is for :D I'm looking forward to our future fight!

ArtsandGoodies
Global Moderator
358 comments
# 6   Posted: Feb 13 2020, 03:26 PM
congrats on getting him in, his design is great. I love your colors and the painterly backgrounds here. My only crit is putting Holden in pure black flattens his body and doesn't show the forms. On the final panel the little green lines between his arms help and something like that would have helped panels like the one right before where Holden's body becomes one shape and it loses some of the body language.  I'm interesting to see how you go with the story for these two.

Symon_says
Artist
71 comments
# 5   Posted: Feb 13 2020, 12:26 PM
Short and sweet! How will the fish boy help his decaying friend?! Fish oil perhaps? xD
Is Kaleo anything like Captain Planet?

Shen
Global Moderator
1298 comments
# 4   Posted: Feb 12 2020, 02:28 PM
After seeing him evolve as a side character in holden's comics i am SO happy to see Kal get his own character slot now! I don't mind that Holden was in it since they clearly have a rich history. The fact that you bothered to do an intro at all when you could have just battle passed the character is already praiseworthy.
and speaking of praiseworthy, THOSE BACKGROUNDS!!! THAT CABIN!!! youre art is so POWERFUL, if you had enough time, you could rule this site hehe.
Cant wait to see the boy in action! Kinda wanna fight him, myself~

Flutterbyes
Artist
251 comments
# 3   Posted: Feb 12 2020, 07:42 AM
I have to agree with Cy. This intro doesn't really show off who Kaleo is other than that he has a relationship with Holden, so it reads less as an intro comic and more like a post credits stinger or a teaser to end an episode with. Seen as that sort of scene, though, it's a nice way to introduce a character like this. I like his transformation as he steps out of the water, and the way his personality is maintained throughout.

!bangarang!
Artist
37 comments
# 2   Posted: Feb 12 2020, 06:51 AM
Thanks for your comment! I kinda regret going about it this way honestly, I guess I got too excited haha

TheCydork
Artist
130 comments
# 1   Posted: Feb 12 2020, 02:33 AM
I’ve been staring at the backgrounds and scenery in this, they’re just lovely. The misty effect on the trees and water look very nice, and the little cabin! That wood detail! It’s cool seeing something so polished looking from you and this new character is visually very interesting.

As an intro comic though I don’t think this works. We don’t really learn much about Kaleo - the focus is mainly on Holden. The story also seems to finish before it’s even started. If you have four pages available for an intro, you don’t have to leave us with a “to be continued”, take the opportunity show more about this new character!

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