Round Robin Resubmission: David Birch vs Croco / David Birch

Round Robin Resubmission: David Birch vs Croco / David Birch

Round Robin Resubmission: David Birch vs Croco — David Birch

by Orion


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Page 1Page 2Page 3Page 4Page 5Page 6Page 7Page 8

Crit level: Open to any comments or critiques
tags: David Birch, round robin, roundrobin



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Heavenbat
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59 comments
# 9   Posted: Oct 20 2019, 05:14 PM
God, this is such an entertaining story. I don't remember if I commented on the original or not, lol, but I very much enjoy this finished product. Those are some delicious spot blacks, and the limited color palette does wonders to set the tone. I think my biggest hang-up is on page 4, with the line "Surprises weren't the only thing getting caught tonight", only because the phrasing seems off to me. Surprises don't generally get caught, so it threw me off, lol. Despite that, though, I loved the storyline; there's something so goddamn funny about a scary mafia crocodile being spooked shitless by something that we find out is just a dude who is equally spooked of him.

ArtsandGoodies
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279 comments
# 8   Posted: Oct 12 2019, 03:18 PM
This is a nice improvement and the colors help add a lot. I'm a fan of green palettes and i like how you stuck with limited color for this, i don't really have much of a crit for this as it was an enjoyable story and it's always nice to see a BB completed version of a comic done previously.

Flutterbyes
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# 7   Posted: Oct 10 2019, 10:42 AM
I do love the creepy "This is what happened to me.... I don't know what it was or what it wanted" story you've told with your spot blacks, minimal color, and visual storytelling. And then it turned out to be something so much less scary than when the story built the threat up to be!

Elyan
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# 6   Posted: Oct 9 2019, 09:45 AM
In reference to my old critique I´ll just address your improvements. Which is of course full shading! Thats a good improvement. i would have liked some more contrast in colors though cause sometimes that dark muddy color sheme made is hard to read the pages.  Page 3 to me stood out most on this matter. the hint or the arrowed panel is fading  little from focus cause its just the same color without an indicator its an panel by itself. a slightly lighter color would have helped here i think.
Some aspects of the color choices for croco and the tunnels are stuff i would recommend experimenting a little more on to get clearer results but all in all this is a big improvement.
next time maybe try to shade in some elements to simulate depth. drawing wise you already got the sense of depth there :)

TheCydork
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53 comments
# 5   Posted: Oct 8 2019, 06:47 PM
Oh I really love the palette for this comic, it sets the vibe very well. Also loved the angles and spot blacks on page 6, it's fun seeing David as an intimidating figure to someone who doesn't know him, and then the cute little "here's ur hat back :)" at the end. I already gave crit with the original submission, and I feel adding colours sorted those issues out just fine!

Crocostyle
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42 comments
# 4   Posted: Oct 8 2019, 05:28 PM
As said before, I absolutely love it.^^  Your comic already got a great story, it just needed more eye-candy, which you delivered! The colors are moody and befitting of a gritty urban underground, but not so much that they detract from the comical elements of your story. The shading really helps make objects of interest stand out, as well as give an extra sense of space. Thanks for putting so much consideration and doin' my character good!  I hope one day to do the same for Birch, as he deserves much better than the story I gave him.  Well done, dude!

Flytee
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53 comments
# 3   Posted: Oct 8 2019, 11:05 AM
This was great! I really liked how creative you got with the panelling when Croco was travelling through the sewer, it made the location feel really cramped.
Also having the comic be from Croco's perspective and playing around with our expectations of these characters was cool- the last panel of David freaking out was a funny pay off, after him appearing as a cool, mysterious saviour on pg 6.
I think overal this is some of the best art I've seen from you, I don't have much crit, just keep doing what you're doing.

Rivana
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# 2   Posted: Oct 8 2019, 06:44 AM
Wow the color palette definitely gave this comic an extra OOMPH! The green tones was a great choice! I especially like how David appeared to be such an intimidating and scary presence in the sewer scene -even going as far  as returning Croco's hat implying that he was followed!  And then suddenly in the last page David is just as terrified at the realization that he just saved a Crocodile man. That expression in his face was pure gold. :D

Orion
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208 comments
# 1   Posted: Oct 7 2019, 09:13 AM
At long last the comic is now in full color! AS well as all the missing words from pages 2 and 3!

Thank you for all for the feedback from the original comic as well as some color advice from Shen and Pyras!

This was a great revisit and an essential completion to some of my best work in recent memory.

Thank you for your revisit of this comic (either for the first time or second) and would hope there is further feedback on what i can improve in future.


      Edited Oct 7 2019,  10:09 PM by Orion

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