▲Crime Prophets No Man▽ / Spoiler vs. Gold

▲Crime Prophets No Man▽ / Spoiler vs. Gold

▲Crime Prophets No Man▽ — Spoiler vs. Gold

by Orion

51.4%
271 points
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Crit level: Open to any comments or critiques
tags: month of the dead, 24hr comic

48.6%
256 points
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Crit level: Open to any comments or critiques
tags: 24hr comic, gold, month of the dead, spoiler



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Heavenbat
Artist
74 comments
# 10   Posted: Oct 20 2019, 05:04 PM
Orion: That building in the first panel is AMAZING, seriously. I do like the idea of Gold accidentally stealing something cursed and then doing the smart thing to nope right the fuck out. I think my biggest hangup was on how Spoiler's 8-ball kept changing from being filled in with black to being just plain white; it was a bit jarring of a jump a couple of times, though I understand it's probably because you ran out of time to ink it in? Either way, the way you depicted Spoiler actually emerging was phenomenal!

Cy: I said this before and I'll say it again, I LOVE the atmosphere you pulled off in this comic. Sure, some things could've done with a bit clearer rendering but for one day this is imo really good. For me, the lack of background didn't even feel all that out of place--it just felt like a dark lonely night. The only place that I felt could've used a bit more background is in the first panel of page 3, cuz it kinda looks like the bench just disappeared.

ArtsandGoodies
Approval Committee
299 comments
# 9   Posted: Oct 13 2019, 01:58 PM
Orion: these one days have been helping you a bunch and I really like the expressions you have been doing for them. good job on consistently doing all these one days. I will agree on the crit that the dialogue felt awkward, Gold doesn't seem like the type of person to monologue to himself for so long. Also spoiler is a great character and I like how you make him insidious and imposing.

Cy: the colors here are fantastic and give a great creepy vibe for this. It's a good horror set up. My only crit is that on the 3rd page I feel the angles could have been changed to make Spoiler more imposing, like framing him to take up most of the 1st panel would have made his grabbing motion a lot more intimidating. But overall really good job on the this.


PyrasTerran
Community Manager
1436 comments
# 8   Posted: Oct 10 2019, 10:24 PM
I enjoyed both of these spooky tales, I don't have much else to say since they aren't 100% finished but I liked where they were going visually, keep it up guys

Flutterbyes
Artist
218 comments
# 7   Posted: Oct 10 2019, 10:29 AM
Orion: Thank you for giving me the visual of a cat wearing a backpack. I love it. The writing in this comic is a lot of fun: Gold describing his robbery as "golden," asking if Spoiler is a cop before bailing, etc. Also some really nice horror staging with the ball rolling off the table and then slowly turning into Spoiler for a classic "TURN AROUND!!!" moment.

Cydork: I like your horror setup here, too. Spoiler looming in the dark, appearing as line and color on black is very spooky. This kind of encounter is a classic "I swear this happened one night!" ghost story that is essentially just a strange encounter. The color on black worked great for Spoiler in the dark, but for Gold I think he could have used a flat shape under his sketch to improve visibility. I think a more dynamic running away panel would have helped with the horror mood.

Flytee
Artist
72 comments
# 6   Posted: Oct 8 2019, 11:27 AM
Orion- I'll echo what Rivana said, I'm noticing a lot of improvement in your comics lately. I think all the 24 hour battles are paying off. I like this character, the magic 8 boy growing limbs was pretty creepy. I will say the dialogue here felt really unnatural and not necessary. I couldn't really work out why Gold was monologuing to himself, it took me out o the moment a bit.

Cy- There was a legit creepy vibe to this comic that you achieved purely through lighting and the angle choices. (Having Spoiler loom over Gold for example) it was super impressive, Spoiler came across as intimidating (page 1 panel 3- where he's face is glowing in the shadows aaaa). Fantastic job overal with the tone, particularly on those first two pages.
For me the weakest page was the final one. I think the sequence couldn've been stronger, showing Spoiler actually grabbing and grappling Gold would've created more tension/ made the pay off of Gold getting away feel satisfying.
I also wasn't too keen on the eye close up- it is a very well drawn eye, but it doesn't show much expression so I wasn't really sure of its purpose.  If the idea was to show Gold panic, simply making the iris smaller would've helped.

Rivana
Artist
52 comments
# 5   Posted: Oct 8 2019, 06:38 AM
HOW DO YOU GUYS DO THESE 24 hour stuff?!? I love both your humorous takes on the encounter between these two.  I love the concept of a sentient magic 8 ball. I can't get enough of him.

Orion - there are some  typos along the way that I noticed but you're definitely i mproving the quality of your comic. Cat Gold jumping out the window was my favorite bit lol. I like how he managed to ask Spoiler if he was a cop before the reality of a giant magic 8 ball talking to him sank in.

 Cy - even though yours didn't look quite finished I think the lighting that you did is so effective in setting the mood. The sketchy parts did not deviate from the  story at all and certainly gave Spoiler that ominous and intimidating vibe.

Kudos on all sides! Well done :)
 



TheCydork
Artist
76 comments
# 4   Posted: Oct 7 2019, 05:11 PM
Apologies for my comic being incomplete, this is my first 24 hour battle and since I wanted to do something spooky for October I chose to prioritise the atmosphere over lines. I had fun though and tbh I think this is gonna help motivate me since I didn’t realise I could even achieve this much in just a day (or, well more like 15 hours thanks to an accidentally long nap during the battle lol)!

Orion, thanks for the battle as well, I really enjoyed your comic :) I expected something creepy too so I was pleasantly surprised to be smiling through the whole thing. Is it wrong that I found Spoiler kind of cute when he was a little stick man while reforming? XD Not to mention cat Gold jumping out the window haha

Orion
Artist
208 comments
# 3   Posted: Oct 6 2019, 11:36 PM
Alrighty! we are done with our match. 24 hrs and submitted.  Thank you again Cy for taking me up on my offer. Gold was a lot of fun to draw and play around with!

Can't wait to see what we got!

Orion
Artist
208 comments
# 2   Posted: Oct 3 2019, 11:11 PM
24 hour comics. The Ultimate Panic Art Challenge! Best of Fortune Cy.

and FYI this is not Technically a 24 hr deadline comic but as we are on opposite sides of the world some liberties are being taken. So expect to see this Sunday morning (EST)

TheCydork
Artist
76 comments
# 1   Posted: Oct 3 2019, 10:54 PM
*cracks knuckles* time for some p a n i c  a r t

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