Pita: I'm honestly on the fence about the gradient backgrounds; they're very pleasing color-wise, but they also end up kind of disengaging the characters from the space they're supposed to be occupying. Especially with the gradients constantly changing color. Though I DO really love the look of the black and white toons against very colorful surroundings! Story-wise, I can't think of anything to critique; it's a classic moment of snapping at a friend and instantly regretting it, but it's a classic for a REASON; it works well and serves as a compelling emotional tug.
Karma: Aw man I feel so bad for Conway D: I know how it feels to have a friend be brushing you off for their phone, so this comic struck a particular emotional cord with me haha. I love your crisp lines, and the areas where you do have spot blacks are real nice--almost wish there had been a bit more of them! The only hangup I had was on page five, where it looks like Merry's figuring out what's going on thanks to the gears turning thought bubble... but then there's no follow-up on that, so it feels like a setup with no punchline almost? As far as I can tell, Merry doesn't figure out Conway shut off his phone and they just have a fun friend's night and get hammered.
Still, really great job both of you!!
I had them numbered and double checked, but I guess something went wrong. That last page should be page 3.
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PITA- I'll second and third the use of colored backgrounds as a 'ehh'. I understand the strain of time, but we're getting a peek in the famous Merry Softshoe's digs. I would've loved to have seen more of the joint and gotten a feel of his personality. I think adding such a narcissistic shot of himself as a framed poster was cool- just wanted more.
Despite my want for environment, you didn't lack in emotionality. I think both battles seemed to hone on in pulling the feels card. Although I feel this would've had more impact if I knew who Hunter was in order to invest in this phone arguement. I had to read the other comments to realize this was something of a collab where the story continues after reading yours, but even then I feel I'm out of the loop over this Hunter guy. Adding something establishing like a flashback may of helped.
KARMA- Ahh everyones favorite ne'er do well. Seeing these two back in action, even on something as usual as a nice night out was really enjoyable to see- even if it did have a bittersweet feel. I'm surprised you played this straight- I could see regular human characters enjoying a night out like this. I was turning pages waiting for toony highjinks on getting that phone off, but they never came. Perhaps you were trying for a more somber tone, but considering these are two toons, it took me aback.