I enjoy how these two comics tackle kind of similar topics but in very different ways!

Pita: I'm honestly on the fence about the gradient backgrounds; they're very pleasing color-wise, but they also end up kind of disengaging the characters from the space they're supposed to be occupying. Especially with the gradients constantly changing color. Though I DO really love the look of the black and white toons against very colorful surroundings!  Story-wise, I can't think of anything to critique; it's a classic moment of snapping at a friend and instantly regretting it, but it's a classic for a REASON; it works well and serves as a compelling emotional tug.

Karma: Aw man I feel so bad for Conway D: I know how it feels to have a friend be brushing you off for their phone, so this comic struck a particular emotional cord with me haha. I love your crisp lines, and the areas where you do have spot blacks are real nice--almost wish there had been a bit more of them! The only hangup I had was on page five, where it looks like Merry's figuring out what's going on thanks to the gears turning thought bubble... but then there's no follow-up on that, so it feels like a setup with no punchline almost? As far as I can tell, Merry doesn't figure out Conway shut off his phone and they just have a fun friend's night and get hammered.

Still, really great job both of you!!

Pita: I loved this comic, Your inks are always clean and crisp. Your colors are also really good in this and the way you use them to set the mood is fantastic here. The only sort of crit i have is since there are so many midshots you could have varied up your angles to have some more dynamism and punch up the dramatic moments. However with the colors and expressions you have there is already a good sense of expression in this.

Karma: I love the way you draw Merry and this story is a nice simple one. My favorite thing is how you show how possessive Hunter is, this is a great introduction to him just by showing his obsessive control over requiring Merry to always read his texts, it does a great job of giving him real creep vibes since that is a real habit people have and readers may have even experienced. Also I just like your line art, good job with this comic.

Oh shoot, yeah, looks like they uploaded out of order. I had them numbered and double checked, but I guess something went wrong. That last page should be page 3.

Edit: Bobo fixed it for me. Thanks Bobo~!

      Edited Oct 1 2019,  06:37 PM by KarmaLarma

Aw, these were both so sweet.

Pita - Honestly I don’t have much to say. I enjoyed your comic, and I can’t think of anything to crit ;v;b On my second read I noticed panels focussing on Conway tended to have coloured backgrounds (when the sofa and stuff weren’t included), whereas Merry tended to have grey or darker backgrounds. If this was intentional, I really liked that. Influenced the mood without me even realising at first!

Karma - I LOVE Conway stealing Merry’s phone to mute it. Idk, it’s just sweet and very fitting... lowkey stealing a phone but to help a friend. And the ass slap of course was pretty funny haha. Similarly I can’t think of any crit, I am a little confused about the last page though? Was that supposed to be the penultimate page but got bumped to the back bc it wasn’t complete?

Well I came very close to finishing orz But! It's only one not fully inked page so at least it can be read.

Make sure you read Pita's half first!

Edit: tfw you submit then 1 minute after submissions close you notice a typo. Dang it!

      Edited Sep 30 2019,  12:01 AM by KarmaLarma

What's better than this?  Guys bein' dudes, havin' a long-term sleepover.
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Gonna drop some context links here for the newbies to better understand what the arching plot is.

First, how Toon Town got demolished.  We're gonna start with the creation of Creamimi and lead up to how that part of Void City got pummeled.
cw: nudity and some unpleasant situations
https://entervoid.com/view/5272/2/1
https://entervoid.com/view/5949/2/1
https://entervoid.com/view/5973/2/1
https://entervoid.com/view/5983/1/1

And so far the only character to address doing something about the left over land, to which this comic is a response to.
https://entervoid.com/view/6031/1/1

      Edited Sep 22 2019,  01:26 PM by Pita

This is going to be good

Good luck, you two!