Rumble Roulette / Kujo vs. Rae and Blue

Rumble Roulette / Kujo vs. Rae and Blue

Rumble Roulette — Kujo vs. Rae and Blue

47.3%
316 points
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Crit level: In-depth critique preferred
tags: kujo, rae and blue

by Flytee

52.7%
352 points
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lefrafra
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9 comments
# 8   Posted: Aug 11 2019, 06:52 AM
Thanks everyone! Going to push harder on everything the next time around. <3

Flytee
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28 comments
# 7   Posted: Aug 8 2019, 01:41 AM
Thanks everyone for commenting, I'll take all this feedback onboard.

LEF- thanks for battling! I loved you comic, the ending was particularly strong.
Also the way you drew Rae and Blue was so damn cute.

ArtsandGoodies
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240 comments
# 6   Posted: Aug 6 2019, 08:13 PM
Lefrafra: I really like this story, how you show us a little about what's going on with Rae and Blue but not explaining the whole thing as well as ending off with the sudden intensity. It shows an interesting sinister to his playful mischief doing it to intentionally bother them so they lower their guard and play into his paw. My main crit would be the lack of backgrounds and shading. Kujo even remarks about how messy the place is which would have been a great opprotunity to just draw some messes, for backgrounds try blocking out spaces and filling it in with random stuff, the more elements you add to the background the less you have to worry about how each individual item looks. also try playing around with some textures as well on top of your colors to help add some more feeling to walls and floors. I do look forward to seeing you do more with this and future deals Kujo may do.

Flytee: I like the story and I like how it shows how kind of poorly Rae is handling her situation. But my favorite thing is how you are playing around with text mixxing it with panels and outside of text bubbles. I personally liked page 7 and didn't find it that confusing and want to see you play around with that stuff more, though some of your word bubbles may not read in the right order, Like i'm not sure if on panel 2 page 9 which of blue's bubbles i should be reading first. The reader will generally view it left to right then down, but if something is directly below a bubble they will go to that first before going back to the left side. Besides that good comic and I look forward to seeing who this mysterious person is and how their story develops.

Flutterbyes
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# 5   Posted: Aug 6 2019, 07:07 PM
Lefrafra: A DOG CREDIT CARD? I love this demon dog's antics. I feel like the deal part at the end suddenly got very intense, but I wasn't entirely sure what was going on, or what was agreed to. It was good that you broke up the rather closely framed chatting format for when Kujo consumed their suffering, but I think it needed to be broken up a little earlier, especially to better frame the things being discussed. It felt like it was still stuck in lighthearted gag mode, when consuming Blue was on the table.

Flytee: This is a nice adaptation of Kujo's routine: He's a dog who supposedly is normal, while Blue suspects something but also wants Rae to be happy. I'm so curious about where you are taking this storyline. I kind of wish it led to a bigger conflict between the two characters, but that would have been a rather long story.

Heavenbat
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# 4   Posted: Aug 6 2019, 10:31 AM
Lefrafra: I LOVE the last couple of pages, with the demonic shit going on! Very ominous :P The only downside I'm seeing in this is that it feels... rather similar, story-wise, to your last comic save for the ending. I feel like there's so much you could do with a demon dog other than 'dog gets adopted, causes mischief, is asked to leave'. Also, I really liked the colored lineart you had in the first page and on Kujo!! I wish you'd continued that through more of the comic, especially on Rae and Blue!

Flytee: I think I said this already but your comics are a DELIGHT to look at. I agree that page 7 is a tad confusing but at the same time it's visually so cool that I don't find myself caring much! I love the humor of ghost vs hellhound, and the ending has me wanting to know what's gonna happen next omg

Rivana
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# 3   Posted: Aug 5 2019, 02:31 PM
I thoroughly enjoyed reading both comics. Both of your styles rendered well into the characters and I can feel their personalities shine through (and this is coming from someone who have never read their introductions/bio prior )

Despite Kujo's mischievous personality, he still ended up very likeable. if that's not that intention oh well, he's just too cute =P . Rae and Blue are also very captivating. I feel like they could start a series of comic strips with all their shenanigans and gain a good following. Their banter made me chuckle.

I do agree on the critique regarding Lefrara's lack of backgrounds (which I must say, I am also guilty of in my own comic/art). I didn't feel like it took a lot from the story though but still noticeable.

I hope this is not the last time we see these characters together. They got really good chemistry. Keep up the good work.

      Edited Aug 5 2019,  02:32 PM by Rivana

SnowyMoth
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# 2   Posted: Aug 3 2019, 07:59 PM
Man, I love both of these! The artwork in the two comics is so nice to look at, and I loved the humor.

Lefrafra - You've made Rae and Blue absolutely adorable in this comic, I love it. I kind of wish that they'd continue to be roommates if just for the mischief that Kujo was getting up to! I'm definitely wondering what kind of 'solid' Kujo is going to ask of them, as well.

Flytee - I love how sneaky you made Kujo in this, I feel bad for Blue having to put up with their shenanigans! I like the insight that we get into Rae and how they're both holding up in Void so far. I'm definitely curious about the person that shows up at the end, I can't wait for more.

G.Lo
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# 1   Posted: Aug 3 2019, 04:58 PM
Lefrafra:
Your style is adorable and I love how everyone looks in it!
Backgrounds are essentially non existent and what little semblance of a background we get, there’s nothing there! I would recommend adding the teeniest bit of furniture, or maybe a couple of pictures/posters hanging on the walls to just to give a sense of place being lived in. You could also add some texture to the floors/walls to add a little more depth as well.

This was a very cute encounter and I LOVED how Kubo got under Rae’s skin! And the dealing with demons bit at the end was faaaantastic haha What sinister plans does Kujo have in store?!

Flytee:
Oh man your art has such a charming quality to it, I absolutely love it! The mix of chunky and thin lines with the painterly colors are so pretty!
I think really the only critique I have that I’m conflicted about is Page 7- it took me a couple of times to get the flow of it correctly but I also like the idea of it’s layout. It could have just been me that got confused on how that page worked XD

Definitely dug the innocent until proven guilty game Kujo played- poor Blue could never stand a chance against that pupperoni face! I’m excited to see where this goes and what dirt’s been dug up on Blue and Rae!

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Drawing Time: 2 weeks
Ended: Aug 6th, 2019
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