Intro Story / Dairyu

Intro Story / Dairyu

Intro Story — Dairyu

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# 4   Posted: Jul 19 2019, 09:11 PM
Ooooh, we really don't have a ton of mythologically-focused characters on this site! You seem to have a real strong concept going for you, and I'm digging the art as well! Looking forward to seeing more of Dairyu!

# 3   Posted: Jul 18 2019, 06:04 PM
Your inks in this are gorgeous!! I love the air of mystery you set up as well as the backstory into Dairyu. I do agree however that I wish we say a little more of her personality but I'm really excited for where you take her!!

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# 2   Posted: Jul 16 2019, 12:10 AM
This was a really nice intro. I love your inks and the style you did for the lore building up the other deities, page 2 is just really nice to look at in general. In terms of story I do wish we got a bit more of Dairyu's personality in it. Like maybe while recounting the story there could have been some adjectives to better describe her feelings on the situation, like saying "the foolish humans" instead of just "the humans". adding a little bit of narrative bias is a subtle way of letting us know a bit about the personality of the character.

# 1   Posted: Jul 13 2019, 04:15 AM
Great job on your intro comic! Its certainly got me intrigued about the lore of this character. I'm excited to see what you do with her!
As for the art, it was was really clean and unique, I particularly like how you worked patterns into the bridge and sky. I don't really have any full on crit, the art and writing were really nice. However, since this is an intro comic for Dairyu I couldn't help but wish there was a 4th page showing more conversation/ her personality.

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Ended: Jul 19th, 2019
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