Invitational Tournament 2019: Round 2 / Buck Xander vs. Twobody Sextuplets

Invitational Tournament 2019: Round 2 / Buck Xander vs. Twobody Sextuplets

Invitational Tournament 2019: Round 2 — Buck Xander vs. Twobody Sextuplets

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Sony-Shock
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9 comments
# 9   Posted: Jul 11 2019, 10:08 AM
>Reading critiques

More showing, less talking, more showing less talking! I know that rule (very important). I've been taking liberties on it due to deadlines, but I might be doing it too much, uh? I'm going to keep it in mind and improve!

A solution is that, if I can't afford to draw more (those deadlines don't allow for much!), I should simplify stories! In general, I might have been trying to cram complex stories into very small comics, so lots of the details are shown in dialogue... now that I think about it. I'd defintely tell the stories differently if I had more time...

And when I work with more time, I also will have to make sure to spend more time refining plotholes! I was aware of them and patched them as much as possible, but with so little time to write the script... Still, I will keep my eye on it, if not, I might make the same mistakes for lack of practise!

Measure is the key.

Thanks a lot for all the critiques!

TheCydork
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# 8   Posted: Jul 1 2019, 11:20 PM
@Deji Congrats on graduating! Looking forward to seeing the finished comic :)

@Sony-shock Lovely art as usual (though it feels a little less polished than last time) and I just love seeing these kids since their design and premise is super neat.

However I didn't enjoy this comic as much as the previous round either bc it feels kind of the same. The opponent relatively doesn't do or say much, meanwhile one of the sextuplets monologues, the end. I think you did too much telling rather than showing as well - at the beginning it seems Maggy has been shot, we see blood and the bullet, but then Buck says his guns kept jamming. Another sextuplet talks about how Maggy must have gone after a big fish and that Buck must have been following her.. but we didn't see this, we were again simply told earlier that they'd seen him a lot. This really lessens the impact because it all feels like hearsay imo.

Having said all this it's still massively impressive that you completed 10 pages in a week! So congratulations for that!!

Mokachahan
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# 7   Posted: Jun 30 2019, 12:09 PM
CONGRATS ON GRADUATION, DEJI WHOM I HAVE NEVER MET BEFORE >3>) Seriously, though, I'm excited to see the finished product! Your art is UNFF and Buck is so bad-ass, so I can't wait to see more!

Sony-Shock, your art is KILLING me with how cute and pretty it looks! The action shot in the first page was like YOOOO and I'm on love with how expressive the sextuplets are! They're designs are crazy cool and it was great the whole gang got screen time this time!

Nohara
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# 6   Posted: Jun 30 2019, 11:01 AM
I'll have to come back when my phone wants to load more pages!  Congrats on graduating!

Flutterbyes
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# 5   Posted: Jun 29 2019, 05:40 PM
Deji: Congratulations! What you did do is a nice peek into your your process. It's still very clear, with indications of what you meant to do.

Sony-Shock: I am so in love with your sense of mood and feeling. How DO you do that digital brush pseudo-painterly "just rough enough but also really polished in the right places" look?!

Kozispoon
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# 4   Posted: Jun 29 2019, 12:55 AM
DEJITARUU- Err, congrats on graduating! XD

SONY-SHOCK- Per usual, some great characterizations, character specific detail and expressions. The shading and lighting on some your panels are really choice. I will echo and expand on the previous crit though that this dragged on. You dedicated more time on one of the kids evil bad guy monologuing their master plan to Buck to such a degree it got boring. Honestly, I think building up to the sniper shot and leaving the reader wondering 'oh man, is the kid ok??' would've been a more compelling hook than sitting through a character describing how they are a genius rather than showing us.

Sony-Shock
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9 comments
# 3   Posted: Jun 26 2019, 11:32 PM
I'm very excited to see the finished version of Deji's comic! 0v0 The art is so pretty!! And Nano looks so cute! Can't wait!

Congrants on graduating, btw! 'v'c

Aeolim
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8 comments
# 2   Posted: Jun 26 2019, 09:08 AM
Ahhh its a shame that you were unable to finish your comic Deji, i was really looking forward to reading yours :/ but that’s understandable since you had a lot on your shoulders aha. Well, you did what you can and that’s okay! The sketches are still pretty good tho! Hope you’ll be able to complete your next comic haha

OOOOO Sony i love the way you shaded and organised your comic, your art style is very eye catching and interesting and i love how you captured and written Deji’s character.
My only critique is that some parts just feel like its dragging a little but other than that i thoroughly enjoyed your comic and i wish you luck!

OPStellar
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# 1   Posted: Jun 26 2019, 08:04 AM
Short and sweet, as I like to say.
But I feel that 6 with powers against 1 with skill got a little hectic and slightly hard to follow.

      Edited Jun 26 2019,  08:06 AM by OPStellar

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Drawing Time: 1 week
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