@Sony-shock Lovely art as usual (though it feels a little less polished than last time) and I just love seeing these kids since their design and premise is super neat.
However I didn't enjoy this comic as much as the previous round either bc it feels kind of the same. The opponent relatively doesn't do or say much, meanwhile one of the sextuplets monologues, the end. I think you did too much telling rather than showing as well - at the beginning it seems Maggy has been shot, we see blood and the bullet, but then Buck says his guns kept jamming. Another sextuplet talks about how Maggy must have gone after a big fish and that Buck must have been following her.. but we didn't see this, we were again simply told earlier that they'd seen him a lot. This really lessens the impact because it all feels like hearsay imo.
Having said all this it's still massively impressive that you completed 10 pages in a week! So congratulations for that!!
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More showing, less talking, more showing less talking! I know that rule (very important). I've been taking liberties on it due to deadlines, but I might be doing it too much, uh? I'm going to keep it in mind and improve!
A solution is that, if I can't afford to draw more (those deadlines don't allow for much!), I should simplify stories! In general, I might have been trying to cram complex stories into very small comics, so lots of the details are shown in dialogue... now that I think about it. I'd defintely tell the stories differently if I had more time...
And when I work with more time, I also will have to make sure to spend more time refining plotholes! I was aware of them and patched them as much as possible, but with so little time to write the script... Still, I will keep my eye on it, if not, I might make the same mistakes for lack of practise!
Measure is the key.
Thanks a lot for all the critiques!