Why We Droppin', Boys? / Anvil

Why We Droppin', Boys? / Anvil

Why We Droppin', Boys? — Anvil


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Crit level: Open to any comments or critiques
tags: koosh-koosh, anvil, bird furry, city council, council, fortnite, jasper, joseph vilensomething, koosh-koosh, politics, pure evilness, smile, The Smile, topical



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Pennydox
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235 comments
# 14   Posted: May 9 2019, 10:36 PM
I'm critiquing this out of context for the rest of the entire story here:
The text is nice, but a little hard to read. Making the text bold, or bigger might help a lot, even if it means sacrificing some of the effort you put in the illustrations. I feel like you put a lot of effort into the colors, but sometimes less is more--I would suggest keeping the colors closer to a specific color palatte to emphasize a setting or mood. For example, more bluish colors for the shadows to indicate the drearyness, while in the talkshow, there might be a purple overlay of color to match the background. It just helps the background have some uniformity with the foreground in different settings.
I find a lot of the characters could use a little more expression. A little practice, and looking at examples of how others do it will help you with your future work. Even having a mirror and acting out the reactions of the characters will be helpful too!

Tombola
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3 comments
# 13   Posted: Apr 3 2019, 07:55 AM
Fantastic, very very funny, each panel to panel interaction gave me a good chuckle!

demfae
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# 12   Posted: Apr 2 2019, 03:17 PM
I've come back to this comic maybe about 5 times now.  I genuinely think this comic needs to be archived for future generations of readers who will have no knowledge of what Fortnite is or ever was.

PyrasTerran
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1413 comments
# 11   Posted: Apr 2 2019, 11:12 AM
your comic has been reviewed on the latest VCast, now live

yarnwitch
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277 comments
# 10   Posted: Mar 30 2019, 05:13 AM
Teach me to be funny, cro. cause watching smile do that dance got me in a weird spot. I like this comic and that weird futile feeling that came with it!

ArtsandGoodies
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239 comments
# 9   Posted: Mar 29 2019, 09:03 PM
You're writing is always enjoyable and how you used the who situation with the election is great. I love this absurdist humor.
In terms of your art I think the thing that sticks out for me in terms of what you can improve is that your figures are stiff. Like in panel 1 page 2 the birds arm is straight down when it should be closer to him since he would be trying to use his muscles to hold the binder between his arms. I think you should try figuary: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Q8cWA3_0qs0 it's a 28 day challenge thing that is basically a 5 minute video of some advice for figure drawing then a 15 minute video on the other channel of gesture drawings. It's worth a try and helped me a fair amount for the little investment of time for a month.

Desichan
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181 comments
# 8   Posted: Mar 28 2019, 09:36 PM
Humor is amazing as always, very good work my friend!

Hellis
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210 comments
# 7   Posted: Mar 28 2019, 09:34 PM
Iäve said it before. BUt fuck man, your comedic writing is so goddamn sharp. The beats hit perfectly, the scene with the window had me rolling. It was so goddamn good.

Shen
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1276 comments
# 6   Posted: Mar 28 2019, 08:53 PM
i dont even know how to crit this, it just makes me happy every time I read it, your writing and sense of comedic timing improves every new comic. Poor Anvil is trying so hard lol. Also, i greatly look forward to the return of Invyn and jasper so that i can fight you

Heathen
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303 comments
# 5   Posted: Mar 24 2019, 07:51 PM
This comic gives me life.

Kozispoon
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1046 comments
# 4   Posted: Mar 22 2019, 05:25 AM
GAWD, I lost it at the Smile doing the Fortnite dance. XD

It was kind of neat to see the practical foundational elements explaining not only the mayoral tournament, but how the hell the Smile actually won. Only in VOID would big wigs in tall buildings not only take this seriously, but do their upmost to sell this to the city. This was a great laugh, though I wish some of your punchline panels carried more punch. Notably the reaction panel of the kids watching Smile Floss. The expressions still seem so static and quite similar to the neutral expressions in the first panel

The subsequent reactions of folks in AND out of the city made me happy- totally thrilled to see the Overlord and his computer pal giving us a peek at a comeback! :DDD

While I'm aware its not the focus, I am a bit lost on where Anvil falls within the city power structure and maybe I missed it, but the comic history doesn't seem to provide any context. Are they just playing at being part of the mayoral support staff? What authority if any do they have? If there was a council for the last mayor, what happens to Anvil now with Smile in the seat of power? I'm admittedly nerding out on questions of narrative and in universe progression when this was really just a comic to blow off steam and give us the funnies. Either way it was a swell time.

Happy August 19th! -Reecer6
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257 comments
# 3   Posted: Mar 21 2019, 11:50 PM
w-what are you talking about, leans against wall with sunglasses, sweat beads visible against my temples, this comic is perfectly fine and i didn't save over page 3 the first time pal

OberGoat
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27 comments
# 2   Posted: Mar 21 2019, 11:32 PM
Looks like page 2 got uploaded twice? I see the preview for 3 but it just shows 2 again.

Happy August 19th! -Reecer6
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257 comments
# 1   Posted: Mar 21 2019, 09:11 PM
i rejected an offer to join a super cool massive collab to make this comic, so please appreciate it. it is a passion project of the highest degree.

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