Dauber Pauper vs. Dr. Fabulous

Dauber Pauper vs. Dr. Fabulous

Dauber Pauper vs. Dr. Fabulous

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ArtsandGoodies
Approval Committee
302 comments
# 10   Posted: Jan 30 2019, 11:15 PM
birblitz: Since everyone has mentioned this problem I will just mention how i handle the issue since i have had similar concerns with my font size. What you should do is find a good dialouge/text heavy comic on this site. Copy the image from a page, then scale it up to the size you are working in, then look at the size of the words and match your comic to be that size. It's the easiest way to double check to make sure your font is a good size. Also keep your font the same size throughout the comic, while you can have different characters speak in different fonts the fonts should be the same size throughout the dialouge, there are other ways to convey changes in voice and I would say focus on having a good consistent font size and bubbles in your comic. All that being said your comic otherwise is very solid and the fact this is the biggest problem is good since this is a really quick and easy thing to fix.

ROFLQU- This was a fun simple comic but the lineless style here doesn't work as well as the screentones in the other style. In particular the environments are really blockly and lack a form of texture. I think this style needs some more colored lines in the envrionements and characters. Dauber was the best part of this comic because and his expressions really popped out and I think that was partially because of all the grey lines on him. If the objects had some lines similar to their colors I think this style would turn out better. All that being said this story is great and even without that this style is really cool and something worth experimenting some more in future comics.

Radji
Artist
534 comments
# 9   Posted: Jan 30 2019, 05:44 AM
Birbblitz: you have a knack for comedy... but next time beware the Font size hahaha
EW: i busted my guts.

E.W. Schneider
Artist
1057 comments
# 8   Posted: Jan 27 2019, 03:34 AM
BIRBBLITZ: I read the comic. Actually read it, squinted and looked. That's an amusing little story you came up with! I liked the concept of a clothing line where Dr. Fabulous is also in trouble with the authorities often enough. I think the interactions were cute and I thought you did a nice job of establishing D.P.'s M.O. and how he manages to snag clientele for him to steal from. I think you had a solid little comic despite the fact of the text and if people could read the story I think they'd find it amusing as well, so yes you should upload it as a B.B. afterwards.

A lot of your background work is okay in the sense that I know what I'm looking at, but I think you would be better serviced if you were to use a ruler, digital or otherwise, since you'd get better mileage out of having the world your characters are inhabiting being more stable in a man-made city. There's just enough of a hitch-wobble going on that it's possibly doing you a disservice to your comic and possibly style?

I don't know what program you're using and what kind of things you can do with it but I guess for reference's sake, in the first panel of page 01: the wall's line is good and the ground divider for the sidewalk is less good. Go with a little more straight and let the uneasiness and wobbliness of your style come through, but let it come through the linework quality and not from a straight line not being straight. If you're confused with that, you can PM me and I can explain more.

I like your style and your character work is cute and reminds me a lot of Rocky and Bullwinkle. I also like that the good doctor's monocle is popping around all over on his face, I chuckled at that. One of the things that I think is definitely hurting you in the art department is what ends up being your kind of 'slap-dash' shading and Doc's anger face at the end of the comic. It seems like you just kind of used either an airbrush or waterbrush and put your shadows around where they were appropriate but without any particular control of how much. Basically put, location's good but density and amount is a bit dodgy.

I would recommend in the future to try doing flat coloring. I think it'd compliment your style a little more as it is currently and you'd get the benefit of a little more control. Ironically enough, you used flat colors for Dr. Fabulous' face turning red and angry, but that might be a situation where soft coloring would have maybe been the better choice. However, flat isn't wrong, but you should be a little more methodical of how you utilize it for that circumstance, since it was sort of scribbly and not filled out as well as it could be. Still, these things are easily overcome! You'll get better at this in no time.

I had a fun little time battling you and playing with your character. I hope you did as well. Best of luck and feel free to hit me up for a rematch any time! Good work!

Kozispoon
Approval Committee
1057 comments
# 7   Posted: Jan 25 2019, 08:04 PM
THEREALBIRBBLITZ- I gave this a first attempt at a read thru and couldn't. Came back to it, zoomed in, but to no avail. Your font is impressively small. I'm not sure what program you're using, but when you review your pages, ensure you have all your fonts at the same font size so it looks uniform and readable.
Its a shame since it seems your dialogue is crucial to getting what's going on in this comic. Even rifling from page to page, I'm uncertain as to how and when Fabulous' clothes trunk appears onto the sidewalk.

Maybe the dialogue explains it, but on page 4 Fabulous erupts into blotches. Or a rash. What happened? why is it suddenly gone in the next panel? I know this is specific example, but I feel that you're treating this medium like vignettes rather than moments that are meant to be sequential. A good rule of thumb is to remember what's been done on your previous panel (like the face splotch). Surely Fabulous is still mad over being had, so that red face would still be evident and should be in the next panel.

ROFLQU- I agree with Heathen that this isn't anything that's making you break into a sweat. You do good comics. You can do comics like these in your sleep. If this was just for funsies and to welcome the new kid to the block, then you succeeded. I think most of us know the quality and storytelling you're able to bring, so I hope this isnt the last we see of you.

Also its super DUPER rad to see FAbulous being a right bitch again. lol. <3 He's been away too long

Heathen
Artist
335 comments
# 6   Posted: Jan 24 2019, 07:45 PM
Birb: It's a shame this comic is mostly unreadable, so I couldn't give it much in the quality or entertainment areas. Be sure to let someone see your pages before uploading next time, so you have time to fix things like that. I know finding a good font size is trial and error, so it's just a good learning experience. Nice work finishing a full color comic on the deadline, though!

Eric: This is a pretty good little comic, short and sweet. It's not doing anything to flex your muscles, but it's a fun scene with some good character acting and I like how it takes a shot at your opponent's character on a conceptual level. That ending is great.

Good battle, guys!

TheRealBirbBlitz
Artist
9 comments
# 5   Posted: Jan 24 2019, 05:03 PM
Eyy so I realized that I really screwed up the text sizes on the pages, my bad Im sorry!! But, I can fix the text and upload it as a I BB once voting ends if anyone would want that?

TheRealBirbBlitz
Artist
9 comments
# 4   Posted: Jan 24 2019, 12:25 AM
Thanks for battling me dude! Here’s to a fun battle!

E.W. Schneider
Artist
1057 comments
# 3   Posted: Jan 23 2019, 11:54 PM
Thanks for the battle, hope you had fun!

Astro Sean
Approval Committee
318 comments
# 2   Posted: Jan 9 2019, 09:13 AM
Um, yes!

Kozispoon
Approval Committee
1057 comments
# 1   Posted: Jan 8 2019, 12:08 PM
Giving the new guy a VOID welcome wallop. Can't wait to see this one!

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Drawing Time: 2 weeks
Ended: Jan 30th, 2019
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