Intro Story / Croco
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# 6
Posted:
Oct 30 2018, 07:10 AM
This style is so rad! I am looking forward to watching you improve! ♥
# 5
Posted:
Oct 28 2018, 10:58 PM
Yes croco is in! good job and congratulations. Others did a good job one stuff you should work on to improve so I will mention one cool writing thing you did. I'm interested to learn more about the "Killer eyes". there are a lot of times people here will allude to something without giving us any sort of name to the thing they want us to be interested in. I hope to see you expand on this idea based on who your battles are with in the future.
# 4
Posted:
Oct 27 2018, 01:43 PM
Thank you so much guys! I agree totally with the suggestions, Jelly. It's known that I've always struggled with linework and clean colors....and hands! UGH how I hate them.XP I'm in the process of learning how to do simpler, cleaner work from the get-go, like drawing with Clip Studio's vector lines, which are surprisingly troublesome, but also potentially very useful. For the last page, I actually just had an epiphany that would have been even better--breaking up the last panel into a separate page, starting the new page with the line "but, I never wanted quiet.." And that page would have a close up cropped image of Croco smiling, mysteriously, maybe holding a bat. But it's something I can try out later, rather than struggle to explain here.
# 3
Posted:
Oct 27 2018, 08:24 AM
how i've been waiting for this one !! welcome indeed
# 2
Posted:
Oct 27 2018, 12:42 AM
Oh. My. Gosh! I am quite happy to see you finally in!
I love your character, and your painting style! Looking forward to see your progress in VOID. Go challenge someone now, good luck!
I love your character, and your painting style! Looking forward to see your progress in VOID. Go challenge someone now, good luck!
# 1
Posted:
Oct 27 2018, 12:28 AM
A solid entrance to be sure. I look forward to seeing more of him. I just have two small tidbits. I know you're style is a bit looser than most and a lot of the time it's one of the things I love about your work, is the expressiveness of the marks. However I feel like you needed to tighten it up a bit in this comic. A lot of the time the backgrounds we're undecipherable, which isn't too big of an issue seeing how they were of little impotance, but there are a lot of dulled tones in this comic and they start to blend into each other. Your style is one that works best when there's contrast in the colors being used. That way having less of a solid outline of things is less important nsince the color differentiates different elements for you.
My other snag is the last page, which I feel lingers a bit too long. I feel like you would have been fine just ending it on "I know a place where even monsters can start anew". That feels like it should be the end of it but it goes on just a bit longer and it feels kinda extraneous to me
But all in all a serviceable introduction, I'm sure Croco will fit right in
My other snag is the last page, which I feel lingers a bit too long. I feel like you would have been fine just ending it on "I know a place where even monsters can start anew". That feels like it should be the end of it but it goes on just a bit longer and it feels kinda extraneous to me
But all in all a serviceable introduction, I'm sure Croco will fit right in
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