I.... huh.

Fred: well good job, that was horrifying XD Excellent pacing. Sickly, unsettling colours. Increasingly surreal sex and ATROCIOUS scar. I hated and loved this comic? fantastic job giving everybody sort of a vomit-boner lol

radji: hnnggg this kind of fell apart a little bit dinnit? the tone was sort of all over the place, it disrupted the flow. I think you were going for a dark comedy but in that case the timing was wrong, there were jokes when we should have been taking in the dramatic horror, and the last line was a big example of that. Others have already explained this better than me, but your art has improved a LOT, youre becoming an incredibly formidable artist, its just the writing you need to work a bit on now.

Alright it took a while but now I can probably formulate some cohesive stuff about this.

Probably.

Fred: I liked this. Right down from the buildup to the surreal blending of various sex poses to form a montage of surreal imagery on Pg 5 to the transformation onwards and the final payoff at the ending. Is rly cool. My only slight critique is only very minor nitpicks at Louise's proportions being a little wonky at times with lopsided arm lengths and whatnot, but honestly those are very minor. Good work.

Radji: Welp, it's already been said waht the main issue is. Something possessed you to dump a huge pile of exposition at the end with the subtlety of a speeding truck. Rein that shit in lol. Also, consider adding in drop shadows for your characters. A lot of times they look like they aren't very grounded.

Lefred: Excellent pacing and ending.  However, this is the exact thing that appears in my nightmares so I guess I'm never going to sleep again.

Radji: You killed your ending with a double dose of mood whiplash.  You would have been fine just having Louise mention about the telepath stuff without the info dump and end on a dramatic note, but we are interrupted with spider trivia and cartoonish Louise.  It feels like 'spiders dont get drunk' was the thing we should take away from the entire comic instead of 'Lucy almost logged into Arak Online'.

well that was a thing

Radji: I feel this story was a bit of a safe bet but the art was superb and the scar was an intresting idea.

Fred: OH God WHY OH NO GOD NO! that was some cool art and a very fun scar but no god Why!

@Radji

Art: I did not find this as crisp and eyepopping as some of your latest stuff have been, the flat colors didn't work for me and the effects felt slapped on almost.

Story: I enjoyed the story for what it was, silly and fun. But it was a bit choppy, the switch to aggro children and the need to explain why Lucy was lucky hampered it. I would have left it unsaid.


@Fred

Art: I love this style? It reminds me so much of the many watercolor heavy comics of the early 90's I read. I keep reading it again and again, becouse it is just very pleasant on the eyes for me personally. Not the erotic visuals, although you handled those great!

Story: I won't lie. I had ideas similar to this, but I don't think I can ever touch those now, you told it so well. I am pretty sure the monstrous devouring scene thrilled and creeped me out all at once. It was so macabre, and the way you handled the dialogue was fantastic.

uploaded. Warning: nsfw

uploaded pages and thumbs :B<br /><br />Fair warning that some may find this an unsafe read for the work environment.

Well color me surprised. Didn't think I'd see these two on a Scar Match ever.

Do well you two. You guys also should know that, whoever is victor, I will still cry.